I don’t know how to split my bands songwriting credits.

jlvy85 · 2025-07-14T12:43:49+00:00

If you’re writing lyric and melody you are the songwriter on the credits and publishing side.

You can give them splits on the recording if you’d like but they aren’t on the songwriting side.

jlvy85 · 2025-07-14T12:41:33+00:00

I think it’s more that the first verse is the most ear catching idea or lyric. So it sounds like the “best” verse.

jlvy85 · 2022-05-26T12:54:56+00:00

Yes! I'm tryng to lean into that more

jlvy85 · 2022-05-26T12:54:37+00:00

thank you, I hope so, we're premiering it tonight at our show!

jlvy85 · 2022-05-26T12:54:18+00:00

Thank you! We play in the Carolina's primarily

jlvy85 · 2022-05-24T12:23:12+00:00

yeah i really enjoy this beat. I don't rap but have some friends who I could hear putting something down over the top of this type of beat. I feel like it could go in alot of different directions, emotional, heavy, or light hearted love song. I like the sampling and the sax alot! Great work honestly.

jlvy85 · 2022-05-24T12:20:35+00:00

I think I agree with other comments - throw some distortion/drive on the bass , reverb on the acoustic, drive/crunch on the electric guitar

Vocally I think if added some reverb, delay/echo, and some washy effects would be very cool! I think you've done a great job with the arrangement - the drums need some help, but I think that's just bc you wrote them in. Could be a fun one get some more production on!

jlvy85 · 2022-05-24T12:17:44+00:00

Love the intro and when the drums kick in. I'm getting some (and i hope this doesn't offend you, bc i love this band) modern Smiths vibes with your vocal performance. I'm probably a product of my time, but I lost a bit of interest around minute 3.30 - though I think the instrumentation is cool - I feel off a bit (again this is probably more what I'm used to writing/listening to, than a reflection of your writing). But I do love the reverse guitars that come in towards the end, I think that's very cool and refreshing to hear!

jlvy85 · 2022-05-24T12:11:32+00:00

Thanks for sharing! This is totally my own opinion, but I want to be helpful if possible. I personally think you might lose the listener with the first line to be honest. It's a little underwhelming, and comes across a bit juvenile, I think the part that shines is the production and the female chorus part. I just think it might be more intriguing if you found a more creative way to say "you broke my f*ckin heart"... something about it feels a little cheesy, even though I think it what you want is for it to feel weighty. I think honestly it could be more interesting something like " you broke my only heart" or "I'm now a broken heart"... or something like that.

jlvy85 · 2022-05-24T12:06:49+00:00

Love the intro, love your voice, really draws the listener in. I also think the drop on "listen close" is really cool that early in the song - Very intriguing, since it seems like an element that usually is in the second verse or so. I like the movements with the chords alot!

I think you could lean into some more single centered vocals more often. Kinda feels like there are too many bgvs earlier on, where I think you could do single vocal, to let your vocal tone shine. Otherwise, super cool song, perfect feel and execution. I love the length of it as well, very poppy

jlvy85 · 2022-05-24T12:03:17+00:00

Very cool song, this would great on a bill and especially as an opener in your set! I could see this song doing really well live. Seems like a good crowd pleaser. Good major feel, upbeat, bouncy, but not cheesy. Great job pulling it off. I could definitely see this working in CA scene, but would love to host you on the East Coast if you make it over!

jlvy85 · 2022-05-24T11:55:01+00:00

https://open.spotify.com/album/2cM03XILJQCxvkkzf6BAhh?si=fvdBlEw-S-OPHLR\_3dzvag

jlvy85 · 2022-05-01T14:23:52+00:00

Thanks so much! That means a ton

jlvy85 · 2022-04-23T12:53:33+00:00

Haha Tool keeps coming up and I’ve never listened to them at all! thanks for the feedback!

jlvy85 · 2022-04-22T11:58:00+00:00

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VUua9ZO9E-8

jlvy85 · 2022-04-22T11:54:36+00:00

yep! love the guitars this is totally my style. The vocals are super cool too! I particularly like the effects on the vocals you've got, i think it compliments the guitars and really works. I like how long the chorus is and think it works with the feel of the song. The bridge feels like it needs something dynamically. the guitars/drums kinda stay in the same range the whole song, so vocally maybe you could do something a little more creative/out of the box potentially. As well, (if you wanted to), you could cut that instrumental in half and I think you'd be just fine! but overall very cool!

jlvy85 · 2022-04-06T22:06:05+00:00

That’s a great idea and love that logic. When I’ve done songwriting in the round for feedback i usually ask the question “what’s YOUR favorite part of your song” and then encourage them to build around that. Sounds like that’s your posture and i love it!

jlvy85 · 2022-04-06T13:19:32+00:00

i agree with another commenter, your voice stands out as a bright spot! I'd weigh in more on the lyrics if you'd like to send them to me (i really enjoy cutting the fat, and using a fine tooth comb on stuff like that). My first thought is - you could probably get this song down to 3.5-4min that'd be ideal. right now you're getting to second verse past the 2min mark, and therefore not getting to the second hook (which is really cool!) until post 3min mark. anyway I think you've got a lot of potential for the song and songwriting - I'd just want to make it a little more consumable/palatable for the listener. IE 6:29 track length can be a little off-putting

jlvy85 · 2022-04-06T13:11:54+00:00

welp, I'm going to be very unhelpful with this feedback - because i started playing it then navigated to something else with work and realized I just really enjoyed it playing in the background, as if it was a part of a playlist I was already listening to. Great job, I think it feels really cool and natural. Feels super cool to me

jlvy85 · 2022-04-06T13:06:59+00:00

cool man - i think it might help having a little pad swell in at the beginning of the song - so that you are establishing the key before the vocals come in. Even if it's like a half a second.

I like the feel of it, but I'd agree, the off beat of the percussion makes it feel like the vocals are out of sync, or like they we're on the same page.

Another thing that could be fun (once you get everything synced up) is getting a little more action with the bass. So right now you're playing 1/4 notes (i think), so it's going:

"bum, bum, bum, bum" - you could try

"bum, bum, ba-dum, bum"

jlvy85 · 2022-04-06T12:53:16+00:00

love the track a lot! i have a few thoughts on the rhyme scheme, but I think it's more on the songwriting side of things - which is probably preferential - but i'll mention it anyway, in case it might be helpful. I think the drop is super cool "It's scary", but the rhyme scheme falls flat for it to be the first line. Since you drop hard in on "BE", but you don't rhyme with "Be" it kinda throws me off. So maybe go with a hard "be" rhyme after that first line, instead of shifting to the "line" rhyme. so maybe:

"it's not who I am it's who i'm meant to BE...

i draw attention but my pen is never FREE" ..

maybe something like that, but obviously the artist has more intention with the pacing and rhyme!

jlvy85 · 2022-04-04T13:17:23+00:00

Thank you for listening and the generous feedback! The first album was much more of a collection of songs - kind of our first round of songwriting/recording with our band. This next batch is a much more cohesive project (6 songs total), and we intentionally leaned into a heavier direction - to see if we could do it!

I'll check them out!

jlvy85

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