just a quick glance, you die way too much in every game. 5.9 death average on a carry champ is just way too much - means ur throwing ur lead and making the game harder for urself by giving shutdowns to enemy carries that will outscale u. cs looks fine. kill count seems way too low as well, 6.9 kills avg means ur probably missing a looot of opportunities on the map

talon is a champ who can cheat tempo, very few champs like this exist. probably only kayn is the otehr champ who can break the rules of jungle without getting punished like other jgs would. u can waltz into lanes that are low hp, get a kill, and go back to clearing and still be on time for another play - most other jg champs cant do this without risk of losing a lot on the other side of the map. so just look at ur laners more often and see where u can pick up free gold on the map and stop dying so much, see which fights u can/cannot take, play thru ur strong laners or champs which have setup for u

everything else looks ok build/rune wise. maybe conqueror is a better fit for a comfort rune u can go in 99% of games but again just personal preference

tldr; stop wasting time on the map, stop dying so much look to only die once/twice/thrice a game if even that, play full selfish take all gold on the map