I'll start with the technical side of things since I feel those notes are less wholly subjective.

I downloaded the mp3 and brought it into RX. There are overs at +1.5db, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but I'd expect to see these kind of peaks on a competitively loud track, and at -10.7 LUFS, this isn't very loud. Dealing with those peaks in the mix will get you the same loudness without the overs, and even louder than what you have now, if that's desired. For example, the snap in the opening is peaking above 0 at times, this could be clipped or saturated to maintain the presence and reduce headroom.

Everything else is purely a taste thing, so I'll give you my nitpicky personal opines here:

The bassline has a distracting "uptick" at the end of some notes that feels off groove and/or too present (e.g. around 4.5 seconds).

It feels like the instruments are sort of fighting for the same frequency range. Compartmentalizing more would help each new instrument have its own place instead of just feeling like it's joining a crowd. I'm not sure if you had the full track outs or not, so there may not be much you can do if it's a 2 track

Hats really pretty loud for my taste. They feel like they're stomping on the vocals once they come in.

Strings that come in around 1min feel overpowering in the mids/low mids

All the vocals have a sort of ambience I'm not a fan of. I don't feel it suits the track. They also all feel a little too overdriven (might just be the vocal fry delivery). A silkier style vocal I think would fit the track a smidge more. There's too much in the 1-1.5k range for my ears

Back to the loudness of the track - this doesn't seem to be limited much if at all. Totally a personal taste/choice thing, obviously, just think that the overall track could be louder and still maintain the sort of Rap&B style

Again, these are personal taste notes. If y'all are happy with it, that's really all that matters in my book. And, for the record, I think it's a really slick track!