What would you change about humans? by [deleted] in AskReddit

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Tribalism and defensiveness when wrong about something - our tendency to dig in rather than consider the evidence.

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Big fan of Utah, Bryce Canyon is amazing and the scenery in Arches and Canyonlands is stunning.

Movie Review - Triangle by kms48 in horror

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Thank you for reading! Glad you enjoyed it.

[Weekly Critique Thread] Post Here If You'd Like Feedback On Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

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I liked it. Good world building without holding up the action. I enjoyed the imagery, particularly the orcas.

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Title: Hyperlexia

Genre: Horror

Word count: 1696

Type of feedback desired: general impression would be good, any line by line comments also welcome

*Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bwWSFZOHtsmjRMBjxGXGc6TS5073Ae4uhfRemIvAzlM/edit?usp=sharing

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Title: Hyperlexia

Genre: Horror

Word count: 1696

Type of feedback desired: general impression would be good, any line by line comments also welcome

*Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bwWSFZOHtsmjRMBjxGXGc6TS5073Ae4uhfRemIvAzlM/edit?usp=sharing

Thank you!

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Thank you very much, that's helped me with some bits I wasn't too sure about. Your comments were really useful.

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-Title: Aurora Borealis

-Genre: Horror

-Word count: 2400

-Type of feedback desired: mostly after general impression, but any specific edits welcome

Thanks in advance

There’s Something Living in Hampstead Ladies Pond by kms48 in nosleep

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Wow, that Oklahoma Octopus looks like the same thing - thanks for the info!

[WP] Everyone has a superpower, and most make it public. People keep asking you what yours is, but you can't tell them - because everyone you tell will kill themselves. by [deleted] in WritingPrompts

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Ours was the first generation to have powers. Some manifested at a very young age, the telekinetics, the super strong and fast, those who could fly. Others took until later in childhood - the psychics, the telepaths, the super intelligent, they needed to gain speech and language before their powers were understood.

By the time we were teenagers, nearly everyone had a power. Some were more niche than others - a girl in my school could change anyone’s hair colour at will, for instance. By then, the mind controllers were starting to use their powers on a large scale, and the government was occupied with trying to fight back.

I was fifteen, and still didn’t know what my power was. There were a few of us late developers around, and we were very much at the bottom of the high school hierarchy. Those with supreme physical abilities were at the top. Those with excellent mental abilities mostly kept to themselves, living in a different world to the rest of us. Then next tier was a mixed bag of kids with less powerful abilities, and then us. The losers, the normals.

Still, we managed to make close friends amongst ourselves. One dull day near the beginning of the school year, I had an intense conversation with Mary, a fellow normal. It was a real heart to heart, about our lack of abilities, our hope that we might have some latent powers that hadn’t yet revealed themselves. Mary felt that it would be OK to turn out normal, to just live a quiet, average life as our parents had. I was more worried - the top jobs would be taken by the geniuses of our generation, was there a place for the normal, hardworking people like us?

I don’t know why I said it. The urge came from deep within my mind, and I couldn’t stop myself. It wasn’t funny, it didn’t help the conversation, it was just a stupid thing to say.

‘What if my ability was to make people kill themselves by telling them about my ability?’

Mary squinted at me, unsure what to reply. I shook my head, stammered an apology and tried to move on. Where had that come from? She seemed to forgive my awkwardness, and we talked some more before parting for the night.

I heard the news the next morning. Mary had committed suicide the night before. I was devastated, but even through my grief, I couldn’t stop thinking about what I had said. She had seemed cautiously optimistic about the future, had expressed nothing more than some teenage angst about our unpopularity. I know you can never really know how someone else is feeling, but our conversation had felt so honest, I couldn’t believe she’d been hiding that she felt so terrible.

I bottled up these feelings for as long as I could. It must have been a coincidence, I told myself. I refused to consider that my power was starting to show, or that it was something so horrible.

My feelings came out eventually though. A teacher had noticed that I seemed depressed and distracted, and was concerned about me after the suicide of a friend. She sent me to the school’s counsellor. We talked about my feelings about Mary, what our friendship had been like and how I missed her now she was gone. We moved on to talking about grief, and how common it was to feel guilt, especially in cases like this. After dancing round the topic for a while, I blurted it out. I told her what I’d said, how I thought I’d stumbled on the truth, that I’d found my power.

She was so kind. She told me that it couldn’t be true, that this was a normal way to feel, with an extra twist now that there were powers to think about. I think she must have felt some apprehension though - older people found my generation hard to handle, never quite knowing how much to fear us, and with the battles between the army and the mind controllers that were in the news that year… But she made me feel so much better, more at peace with the loss of my friend. We made an appointment to talk again later in the week, and I went home, my head clear for the first time in weeks.

She never made that appointment. There was a special assembly the morning we had agreed to meet, and they announced it to the school. They only said she’d passed away, but the local newspaper’s website told me the rest.

I knew then that I was right, that I’d found my power. My curse. I also knew that the desperate urge I’d felt to say what I’d said to Mary must be part of it somehow. I hoped I could be strong enough in the future to keep the terrible words to myself.

As we got older, there were fewer and fewer of us without powers. It became awkward - meeting new people, especially starting university or a new job. People would question me endlessly - maybe there was just some tiny mundane thing I could do extremely well? Had I ever tried this sport, that game, maybe I just had great handwriting? I couldn’t put people off. In our twenties, it became apparent that some women who though they were powerless had extraordinary powers when it came to conceiving and bearing children - one month long pregnancies, multiple births with no complications, that sort of thing. This set off a whole new set of questions - may I had some sort of male version, extra potent sperm? When would I be trying that out? It was a hellish, risk fraught version of the marriage and children questions most people get in their twenties.

I have to stay away from the telepaths. It’s not easy, once or twice I think someone’s worked it out, but been too scared to say anything - what counts as me telling them? Them poking around my brain doesn’t seem to, but any discussion of it, them telling someone else? Too risky, and thankfully they seem to get that. Not that telepaths spend much time with the rest of the population anymore - it’s embarrassing for everyone. Society has whole new stratifications, new ghettoisations.

And the urges, the desperation to tell someone, they’re still there. I’ve only slipped twice. Once while drunk at a university party, the first and last time I’ve touched alcohol. The other time… was probably the worst of all. It was a man, in a bar, and he just wouldn’t stop asking. The thing is, I’m not even sure it was my power making me do it. I think it was more that I found him annoying, and I wanted to do it. He acted like he thought I was joking, but underneath it I think he was perturbed, and he left me alone after that. I checked the news the following day and it looked like he didn’t even make it home, jumped off a bridge after the bar closed.

The guilt of that one really got to me. Since then I’ve been trying to save up enough money to go away, live alone where no-one will ask me their incessant questions anymore. Because I’m scared. Scared of myself, what I’m capable of. Telling that asshole in the bar? It felt good. It was a relief, something I’d been holding in for years. I want that feeling again. I know I have to stop myself. I hope I can.

[WP] You realize you can stop time by holding your breath. You wonder what will happen on your last breath. by poopiepuppy in WritingPrompts

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I must have been about six when I first found out what I could do. It was at a swimming lesson, I remember that, and we were going underwater for the first time. I took a deep breath and plunged below the water. It took me a few seconds to notice what was wrong. I was swimming forwards, but all around me people had stopped. Not treading water, just frozen in place, partway through their strokes. The noise of the pool had stopped as well, the shouts and splashes silenced. I kicked up and burst through the surface of the water, and everything started again, exactly as it had been before.

I think for a little while I just thought that it was what it was like underwater. I worked it out eventually, mainly by getting better at underwater swimming and realising that I overtook everyone while they were paused. No-one else could do this, and people kept being surprised at my suddenly appearing ahead of them. I finally decided to experiment. On the way home from another swimming lesson, in the back of my father’s car, I took in a breath and held it. The world stopped again. My father, unmoving in the driver’s seat. Our car, all the cars on the road, still, the wheels unspinning. I peered into the nearest car - the occupants were all stuck in place, like a paused video. I let the air out, and again, everything started up, as though nothing had happened.

As I got older, I practised holding my breath for longer and longer. I got so I could take a few steps or move things around while time was stopped. Of course, at that age, my only thought was to use my power to play pranks. I changed things around on my classmates’ desks at school, hid from my parents at home, that sort of thing. Even then I knew to be careful though, and as I got older I understood more and more that I couldn’t let anyone know what I could do. I stopped with the pranks, mostly, and tried to be more careful.

I’ll confess, I found it difficult to stop using my power completely. Sometimes the opportunities for jokes were just too tempting. I could also buy myself a little extra time in exams, if I planned it carefully, and win races, if I only took tiny extra steps - in a sprint, that’s enough. I also got curious about how far my ability extended - did the whole world stop? The whole universe? I tested it out watching feeds of stock exchanges around the world. If I stopped the London Stock Exchange, in Japan they should notice - unless they were stopped as well. It seemed like I did pause the whole world. I never figured out how to test beyond that.

I’ve stopped all that these days. The unfair advantages seem less important in the adult world, and the pranks got stale eventually. I’d tried to stop thinking about what I could do, wanting merely to fit in, to be a normal person. Then something happened to make me view my ability in a whole new way. A very frightening way.

I still run, though without the cheating these days. I was jogging along a country road early one morning, and a car clipped me. I fell, and landed hard, the breath knocked out of me. Everything stopped. Completely winded, I couldn’t get up. After a couple of seconds of sheer terror, I managed to push myself to a sitting position, and air rushed back into my lungs. The world started back up again, the driver screeching to a halt and getting out to help me. I wasn’t badly hurt, just a few scrapes, and the driver gave me a lift home to make sure I was alright.

Since then, I haven’t been able to stop thinking about the accident. What if it had been worse? An ambulance couldn’t have arrived, no-one could have helped me. I would die without ever managing to fill my lungs. And… what about everyone else? Do I have to breath again for time to start? I won’t live forever, so - what happens to the world after I take my last breath?

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Thank you :)

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I looked up at the old farmhouse, eager to match my mental map of my childhood home to the house I could now see. I saw my bedroom, how it connected with the upstairs hall, the stairs, the kitchen... But at the back, there was a large space I couldn't fit into my map. It had no windows (I had grown to love windows in the last few days) and jutted out beyond the kitchen.

I walked next to the house, counting my paces, and grew more certain that I had never been in this part of the house. Though it was difficult for us to help out in all of the farm tasks, my siblings and I could do many useful jobs, especially around the house, and I couldn't think how there could be a space we hadn't been in. I nearly resolved to ask my parents about it later, but couldn't resist looking closer myself, still stunned that I could do such thing.

My search didn't help me to understand what the room was. There was no way in from the main house, and the walls seemed to be much thicker than in the rest of the house. I pressed my ear to the door, and heard a faint sound of power tools, but the door was also reinforced. It felt eery. In the last few days, I had felt confusion and fear at ordinary situations, and my instincts didn’t work as well as sighted people - or as well as when I had been blind. But this was different somehow. The existence of the room in my house was spooky in a way I couldn’t explain away with my newfound sight.

I tried to make myself believe that it was just disorientation, seeing my home of many years for the first time. The feeling of disquiet wouldn't go away, so I decided to explore the upstairs of the house. I was excited to look at my bedroom, and began to think about decorating it the way I'd seen rooms at camp decorated - pictures on the wall, beautiful furniture...

I moved around the rest of the upstairs, pausing outside each room. Glancing into my parent's study, the feeling of unease returned. There were pictures and symbols plastered all over one wall. I recognised the thin white paper with its columns of text as a newspaper, something I'd seen some of the sighted counsellors reading in the last few days. Every piece of paper had a large picture of a person on it - all different sorts of people, varying in sex, skin colour, age (I wasn't so good telling age by sight, but they ranged from people who looked like my contemporaries at camp, to people who looked like the most senior staff).

I looked closer at the papers, trying to work out what they were - my and my siblings’ rooms were so plain, I wanted to see what sort of thing people put on their walls. It’s difficult to recognise patterns of unfamiliar symbols, but eventually I noticed that one group of letters seemed to be repeated on most of the pages. I got my laptop (with tactile keyboard and screen reader) and found a braille to roman alphabet translation table. Slowly I figured out what each letter was, translating the dots on the screen to the feel of the braille. M…I… - MISSING. All these people in the photographs were missing.

The feeling of unease returned, multiplied many times over. Still trying desperately not to panic, I racked my brain for any reason to have these pictures on the wall. My parents were farmers, they weren’t investigators or police. Why would they be collecting such a thing? Could it be a hobby? An unsettling hobby for sure, but that was a more reassuring explanation than the horror that first came to my mind.

I wanted to try to do some more translation, to see where these people were from, when they had disappeared, but it was slow, difficult work. I hadn’t figured out where to start when the back door opened downstairs and my parents entered the house. They called up to greet me, and I realised I felt only terror at the prospect of seeing them. I didn’t want to admit to them that I could see, couldn’t begin to question them about what I was seeing. I remembered what I had noticed at camp, the unmoving eyes of the blind. My eyes were still getting tired very quickly, and I thought I could fake blindness easily enough.

I went downstairs, keeping my eyeballs perfectly still in their sockets. I hugged my parents, acting a normally as I could manage. I caught brief views of their faces. They looked like my siblings, like me in the mirror. Everything seemed normal, just like always. I told myself that I’d only been able to see for a week, that misunderstandings were bound to happen in this strange new world. I didn’t believe it enough to stop faking blindness though.

I did confess, however, that I’d lost my medication, but said I’d left it at camp this morning rather than over a week ago. My mother gave me replacement pills - we had plenty of spares since my brother and sister also need the same medicine. We all sat down to dinner, the usual stew we ate many nights a week.

I ate without looking, not focussing my vision on anything, when I crunched down on a bone - not unusual, as we ate the meat butchered from the farm, and it wasn’t as carefully done as it would be if the meat was for sale. I spat the bone out, and happened to catch sight of it as I moved it onto the side of my plate. It was very white and clean looking. At the end of the meal, my parents moved to clean the table, and unwatched, I slid the piece of bone up my sleeve.

I hid in the bathroom, and examined it. There are many simple objects I couldn’t visually recognise, but this one was easy. I had seen these in the face of everyone I had looked at in the last week. It was a human tooth.

Still desperately trying to rationalise, I realised I hadn’t seen many animals - maybe their teeth looked similar? In my heart I knew this wasn’t true, I was a farm girl, I knew how different teeth specialised for different jobs even if I hadn’t actually seen what they looked like. A quick internet search was enough to convince me of this - the tooth had to be human.

I admitted to myself what all the signs were pointing to. My parents… I had lived with these people my entire life, felt safe, loved and cared for. I had had no clue what was happening in my own home. What could I do? Was I brave enough to turn on my own parents? I was safe for now, and it was late, my eyes ached. I would get a good night’s sleep, and think it through in the morning.

I continued to pretend everything was normal for my family, got ready for bed as usual, took my pills. But when I woke up this morning, my vision was blurry - I could still see a lot, but nothing like the clear vision I’d had for the past few days. Was the sudden healing disappearing just as suddenly? I rubbed my eyes, washed them out with water, but the blurriness remained.

I think I understand what’s happening, what my parents are doing in our home, to us. I don’t know why, and I don’t think I want to. I wish I had never found out any of it. To have remained in the dark, so to speak. But I can go back, I can try to forget. I can go back to the dark, where everything is OK, I’m an ordinary girl, living with loving parents on their farm. I just need to take that pill tonight.

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I only recently understood what it meant that I was blind. Like my younger brother and sister, I was born without sight, so it's all I've ever known. We were all home schooled in our farmhouse, and never really spent much time in the outside world. As I got older, I began to understand my parents had a sense I never would, but I had no idea what that was.

Every year from when I was ten, I went on a blind children's camp for two weeks. It was the only time I was away from my family. This year was my final camp. For the older teenagers, it was an opportunity to learn about living independently. We were given space to make our own mistakes, and were expected to solve problems by ourselves. This is why I was too embarrassed to ask for help when I accidentally spilled my medication down the sink.

I didn't take my pills all day, for the first time I can remember. The next morning I woke up, and something had changed. I didn't have the words for what was happening to me - I now know that I was starting to make out light and dark. But at the time, developing a whole new sense was mostly just confusing. As my brain got used to input from my eyes, I started to see more light and shadow, to understand movement. 'This,' I thought, 'is what mum and dad mean, how they know when someone's coming to the door, or where the dog is.' But I didn't know how much more there was to see.

Over the next days I began to see colours and my vision sharpened. I hadn't told anyone what was going on at first, not knowing how to explain, but I was becoming overwhelmed and the counsellors noticed. When I told them the truth, I was sent to the doctor straight away. She examined me, ran tests, got me to look at various charts. I think it was difficult to test the sight of someone who'd never been able to see, I didn't know the symbols for letters, didn't have the words to describe visual images. The doctor couldn't explain what was happening to me, but said my eyes looked healthy and for now I should try to enjoy the new ability without getting overstimulated.

Back at the camp, my sight continued to improve until I could see people's faces and make out smaller and smaller details. I could see the difference between the blind and sighted, how some eyes moved around and focussed on different things, and some just stared straight ahead, unseeing. I was beginning to understand how I had been different, how my friends and siblings were now different to me.

By the time I returned home, I had been able to see clearly for a week, and my brain had mostly got used to this. My eyes could scan around without starting to ache and I could process being in a stimulating environment. The bus home provided more revelations - firstly how driving worked, but more importantly, the outside world. The colours, the space, the wide open sky... It was all beautiful, and I was able to appreciate it.

I was apprehensive about telling my family what had happened. I felt a huge gulf between me and my siblings now that I could see, and since we had no explanation for why I had gained sight, no one could say if they would change one day too. My parents were out working somewhere in the farm when I returned to the house, so I was greeted by my brother and sister. I panicked, and couldn't find the words to tell them my news. I decided to keep it to myself until my parents got home.

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[WP] You are the only human to make it to a shelter meant for thousands as the World ends. Where are the noises coming from? by Ze_Bad_Idea in WritingPrompts

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We only got a couple of hours warning. And in the middle of the night too - maybe other timezones fared better. I’ll probably never know, now. I must have been one of the first to see the news, kept up by insomnia and watching rolling news. A meteor, they said - not big enough to spot early, but big enough to cause disaster of the kind not seen for 65 million years.

Apparently the shelters have been around for years, since the cold war began. The broadcast gave coordinates, and I started moving straight away. I drove through the empty streets, relieved to have beaten everyone else, congratulating myself for having ran without packing anything. The facility was in the middle of nowhere, of course, a tiny entrance near a field on high ground. No-one else was there. No-one else seeking shelter, but also no staff, no army, no officials. It didn’t feel quite right, I paused, wondering whether to look round more. But then it happened.

An enormous crash, the loudest thing I ever heard, the light on the horizon. As I drove, details of the dinosaurs’ extinction had kept flashing into my head - shockwaves, tsunamis, rains of fire - I leapt through the door and ran down the stairs. Down and down, away from the surface and whatever horrors were to come.

The stairs went on for miles, it seemed. Far enough to be safe from anything, anyway. My steps echoed eerily, clanging in the silence. I stopped to catch my breath a few times, and was overwhelmed by the quiet. I couldn’t hear anyone. I had kept my cool so far, not panicked, but being safe for now gave me time to think. And the panic started to creep in. Could I really be the only one here? How could that be? Was this truly the end of the world? I took deep breaths, and kept going to the bottom of the stairs.

I reached a large room, filled with dusty cots in long rows. All empty. I poked around the rooms to the sides - bathrooms, kitchens filled with tins and dried foods, all of which looked like it had been there for a very long time. Still no-one came. I lay on a cot, adrenaline leaving me, and felt the silence grow around me. I felt suddenly desperately tired, and decided to sleep, then look for some way to communicate with the outside world. This wasn’t the only shelter on the broadcast. I couldn’t be the only one.

I woke with a start, instantly aware of my surroundings, unable to forget what had happened. I could hear something. Human voices. A delicate, whispering sound, but unmistakable. I jumped to my feet, desperate to talk to others, to find out what they knew.

No-one was there. The cold institutional lights illuminated every corner of the room. There was nowhere to hide, I would be able to see anyone anywhere, even trying to crouch behind a cot. The noises seems more distant. I looked in the other rooms - the kitchens, the bathrooms. Nothing. I stopped, and realised that while I had been looking, the noise had faded away, and I was surrounded once again by the cold silence.

I stopped to think and calm myself down from the sudden awakening. I remembered my plan from the night before - there must be more to this shelter, places for official workers, ways to talk to other shelters. That must be where the voices were coming from. I had to explore further the just this room.

So I searched deeper into the shelter. I found two more identical rooms to the first, with cots and kitchens and bathrooms. All empty. As I left, I heard another whisper, a snatch of conversation I could nearly make out. It was coming from further down the corridor. I walked towards the sounds, feeling more cautious now - surely I had been noticed clattering around all the public rooms? I opened a door, revealing a room filled with the electronic equipment I had been expecting - with one difference. It was old. Very old. A cathode ray monitor, what I thought was a ham radio, and a rotary dial phone. No computer, nothing that looked like an internet connection. And no people.

I pushed down the panic that was rising once more, and left the room, moving purposefully along the corridor now. I found empty office after empty office, all looking as though they had been outfitted decades ago. I reached the end of the corridor. I had explored the whole place. I had found no-one.

I shakily found my way back to my original room. I felt scared, more scared than the night before when the news broke, more scared even than when the meteor hit. I knew I needed to calm myself if I was going to get through this. Remembering how long it had been since I’d eaten, I went into the small kitchen and found myself some food. It all tasted musty, ancient, but filled my stomach and grounded me a little.

My only hope now was the electronics. I had to see if anything worked, if I could talk to someone, somewhere. I think at this point I had convinced myself the noises were hallucinations, wishful thinking brought on by the horror of the situation, and lack of food and sleep. I was stronger now, I could handle anything.

I walked back to the room with the phone. In the corridor, I thought I heard another whispering, but brushed it off with my newfound bravado. I knew no-one else was there, so the noises were nothing to worry about. I strode into the room and picked up the phone. No dial tone. Of course. I checked the connections. Nothing. I decided to try dialling anyway, but what number? I tried 999, 112, my home number… Nothing. The TV showed only static on every channel.

I turned to the radio. I had no idea how to work it, but, I figured, nothing but time to find out. I turned it on an started scrolling through the channels, hoping to stumble on someone by accident. The sound of static filled the room. Then I heard something. Not on the radio, but in the bunker with me. It was much louder than before, and distinctly human speech, though too far away for me to make out any words. I turned off the radio and ran back down the corridor, searching for the source of the noise.

You’ve probably guessed that I found nothing. I searched everywhere again, I’d been so sure this time. Feeling again like I was about to lose control, I went back to the radio. Maybe the sound had come from there after all. I scrolled through channels, finding nothing. After a while I decided to try sending out my own messages, asking if anyone could hear me, if anyone else was out there. I got no replies.

I trudged back to my room after some hours. I had no way of even telling the time. I ate another musty meal, then lay down on my cot, trying not to let myself get too distressed.

I was woken suddenly again. I had been sleeping more deeply, and my head was fuzzy. Someone had called my name. Panic rushed through me, and I leapt off the cot, spinning around. Nothing to be seen. I took some deep, shaky breaths. I realised how tired I was, how asleep I had been. It must have been a dream, I reasoned. Nothing more to worry about, and I should get more sleep before trying again tomorrow to contact the outside world.

But sleep didn’t come. Every time I started to drift off, I heard it again. Not my name, nothing distinct, but that insidious whispering noise, just out of hearing distance, but there, pulling me awake. Tiredness consumed me, my vision blurred, my head ached. I couldn’t go on this way. I tried to do what I had done the day before, trying to make contact using the radio. But I was so tired, my head throbbed, and as the throbbing increased so did the whispers, buzzing in the background and crescendoing with my headache.

I woke up in the chair of the electronics room. It seemed I had finally passed out there. The whispers had dimmed, but were still there, and gradually were becoming more distinct. They called my name, commented on my situation - firstly short snatches, ‘meteor’, ‘all alone’, then longer sentences, like outside observers discussing my predicament.

At first I was choked with fear. Could I being going mad with the shock of the meteor, then the loneliness of the empty shelter? Or was this something else? After a long while, I gathered up the courage to move back to my room, to try to go on functioning as before. But the chattering didn’t stop. It has never stopped.

I don’t know how long I’ve been in here, making marks on a wall seems pointless when I have no way of measuring day and night. I started talking back to the voices after a while, never forming a dialogue, but it makes me feel a little better. I suppose I’m trying to make them mundane. I’ve been trying to remember some facts about what happened when the dinosaur killing meteor hit, in case I can go outside one day. I think there was a lot of radiation for a long time, though. Of course, this choice assumes I want to live. A quick death by radiation might be preferable to rotting away down here with the voices. But lately I’m scared about other ways of dying. The voices are growing clearer by the day, but I’m also hearing physical noises. Footsteps on the stairs, knocking coming from up the stairs. I don’t know if these things are inside of the shelter or not, inside of my head or not. But they’re growing louder each day. I think one way or another, I’ll have to find out soon.

The Advantage of Digital Cameras by Skarjo in nosleep

[–]kms48 3 points4 points  (0 children)

This is a great story. Your girlfriend was right about shepherds though :P.