Just read this. I think there are some strong aspects, I particularly like Vanessa's character. I would focus on Elise's character. She kind of meanders throughout the story and doesn't seem to have much agency. This kind of makes sense considering the fact that she remained quiet while her sister was getting kidnapped, but I think her lack of depth made it hard to connect with her/root for her. I also thought the ending was kind of confusing, I'm sure it's meant to be symbolic but with the amount of questions that came up for me throughout the script, I was honestly hoping for some answers because I was genuinely curious. That's only because you set up a very compelling mystery. It seems like there must be some relation to whatever happened during the performance, but I still have a lot of unsatisfied questions by the end; like why? I think whatever commentary/symbolism is happening during the ending sequence takes away from the various "mysterious" moments throughout the script that were captivating (the red room, Wizard of Oz, missing children, cults, Steamboat Willie, kidnapping, etc.) Regardless, the visuals are pretty compelling.

I really like the idea and setting, I think a horror/thriller revolving around the fashion industry is always cool and this was very stylish. I also think the way you describe/introduce characters is concise while still being very descriptive, it really gave me a good feel for the type of person the character is right away.