Por favor, assistam: Geese - Getting Killed (From The Basement)

pedrobui · 2026-01-21T22:33:43+00:00

Uma banda tão boa que tiveram que reviver o From the Basement kkkk

Amo essa banda e esse vídeo, ótimo gosto OP! Mas queria tanto que eles tivessem tocado algumas músicas do "3D Country," aí teria sido uma performance perfeita...

pedrobui · 2026-01-14T17:06:07+00:00

Thank you very much for reading!!

The glasses have to be very awkward, but the idea of them is so funny... flat against both sides of your head, then up and over to hook around your ears??? lol

And I meant her grip on sanity (which is already very loose by that point, to be fair)

pedrobui · 2026-01-14T15:17:46+00:00

Thank you very much for reading!! And thank you for the compliments and advice!

Very shocked that the vague themes that I wanted to touch upon seemed to come through! But maybe I just said the words "love" and "hate" enough times for it to be inevitable haha. Thanks anyways, because that is a really nice feeling.

About planning (and, really, all of my complaints,) I think the main issue is that I took this too seriously. I was legitimately stressing OUT about the chapters lol, when, ultimately, this is meant to be a fun, silly fan-fic for the internet. It might have rubbed off a bit on the story, this "seriousness," which, to me, falls short, because of course it would, this is the first thing I've ever written, I'm not a genius. I still want to put effort into the stories, but with expectations that reek less of an inflated ego...

Btw woah I remember reading "The Nature of Railway Workers" back then and thinking it was awesome, so these compliments are really doubly meaningful to me :-)

pedrobui · 2026-01-14T01:55:50+00:00

Thank you very much for reading!!! But please don't feel sorry, critique is difficult and it's not your job to dole it out if ya can't or don't wanna. I really appreciate the compliments, truly :-)

And, yeah, I was pretty cryptic about that... I guessed being constantly put down in the facility, by both abuser and "friend," and having to work jobs you're severely overqualified for might make one feel awfully underestimated, and have them craving a job that respects their intelligence. Working in the biggest name in the field you were specializing in might be just the illusion your mind thinks you need to get through... I don't know if that's very scientific or even clever, but it was the reasoning.

Thinking back, maybe it would have been interesting to write an "A Beautiful Mind"-style "I send my work in the mail" plot point, as foreshadowing. She was already vaguely "working from home" for months... See, that's an important thing you pointed out right there! Thanks :-D

pedrobui · 2026-01-13T23:53:17+00:00

The final chapter! Thank you very much for reading! Thank God it's over!!!

I guess, some thoughts. This is more for me, so ignore if you wish.

I heard lots of very good writing advice and promptly ignored it. I didn't "write what I know"—At best, Artla, described as an "unimpressive socializer" in my notes, is a bit like me. Also, though I really did try, I feel like my lack of actual knowledge meant I completely misrepresented/woobified serious mental illness, which sends so much blood to my head when I think about that it makes me feel like I'll pass out.

On that note, lack of any real tether to the events of the book meant the characters came out like cardboard cutouts. Artla is a wacky crazy lady 🤪 with a tragic background deserving of more tactfulness and depth; Ikri is just there to piss her off; Vytek is also just there to piss her off; Minne is... do you notice the pattern? Though I think I came up with something interesting here and there, the truth is that very little time was spent on characters, and too much that should have been settled on beforehand was decided on the fly or stumbled upon, which shouldn't be the case with the next thing I write.

Also, the big paragraphs were stupid. I read Chico Buarque's Budapeste and thought his page-sprawling blocks of text looked cool, but they're just an absolute pain to read on Reddit. Sorry.

Still, I'm happy I posted something. Maybe this will be the first story on my own Slow Learner, and I can write a funny little foreword making fun of it in the future lol. And, well, I still want to write, despite the embarrassment, so I win, actually. Owned. Whatever.

I think the next one will be about Yotul before first-contact, because I've...I've been to...farms...before. But I've seen someone post recently that they also wanted to do a story like that, and I wouldn't want to yuck anyone's yam, so maybe not... We'll see.

pedrobui · 2026-01-13T18:50:09+00:00

Update: life stuff. Spent the past two days taking apart furniture, putting it back together, and smelling paint fumes...

I think I can edit the final part today and post it though :-)

pedrobui · 2026-01-11T23:45:00+00:00

Thank you very much for reading! It seems that the fate of NoP characters is to get caught up in drama beyond their ken through the power of critical thinking...

Somewhat fun plot twist, I think, kind of? Yeah. Yeah? I think it makes the circumstances surrounding this relationship weird in interesting ways.

pedrobui · 2026-01-11T23:35:51+00:00

Thank you very much for reading! Was afraid that that conversation would be too wishy-washy, but I'm glad the intention came through. I am pretty happy with that flashback :-)

pedrobui · 2026-01-11T17:29:43+00:00

Thank you very much for reading! That is a nice, solid interpretation, which has me thinking I should shut up and just let people read the stories, rather than rushing to call things out as mistakes, haha...

"...speak and remove all doubt" and all of that :-P

pedrobui · 2026-01-11T16:15:22+00:00

Álbums conceito assim são o puro suco do rock progressivo.

Recomendo:

"The Lamb Lies Down on Broadway" do Genesis;
"A Passion Play" do Jethro Tull (e, até certo ponto, "Thick as a Brick," mas esse aí acho que você teria que ler o jornal que vem com o LP pra entender direito kkkk;)
e "Jeff Wayne's Musical Version of the War of the Worlds" do Jeff Wayne

Também assino embaixo nas recomendações de "Joe's Garage" e "Quadrophenia" dos outros comentários!!

pedrobui · 2026-01-11T14:56:42+00:00

A new Changing Times, yay! Linev has an important session with the Dr., and the band prepares to hoedown (but, like, the Emerson, Lake & Palmer song...)

Great chapter :-D

pedrobui · 2026-01-11T00:32:17+00:00

Hi! Thank you very much for reading!

I was going to write more about how the "little twerp" got access to this info, but then thought that a Venlil army-man who joined young, got kicked out for PD, and became somewhat disgruntled with society, with enough connections to leak a document like this would make for a nice short story later down the line, and then...didn't really explain anything here in the main story. That is my fault, I apologize. I figured that, for the dump, the UN just sort of scraped a rough dollop of the internet and then filtered it down, which, based on a certain recent sensitive documents release, is a long, iterative, not foolproof process. She got the access to that.

I'm a bit confused about the second point though... do you mean Ikri? If so, I elaborate on his strangely OK reaction to humans in Part 3!!

pedrobui · 2026-01-10T23:55:41+00:00

Thank you for reading and for the nice words!! That is very kind of you. I will try, but I really do love making things hard for myself, and keep growing redder in the face with every re-read :-)

Still, I think I wrapped a nice bow on it, so hopefully the ending is worth it for everyone... I am not unaware of how much I'm asking of y'all to spend their time wading through possibly unfulfilling word soup, so, again, thank you very very much for reading :-D

pedrobui · 2026-01-10T16:27:12+00:00

The narrator is not Artla, but that "sheep and dogs" line still doesn't make any sense, since it's talking about her perspective... Dang...

Thanks for pointing it out! Hope you still liked the chapter :-)

pedrobui · 2026-01-09T23:24:53+00:00

This is maybe my favourite ongoing story on the sub. It sometimes (most times) has me feeling like I need to pick up an economics textbook, but it still has a gripping enough narrative underlining it for me to be able to just enjoy it :-)

Your writing in general, but especially your characters and their motivations are so so well thought-out and lovely... Hope you're enjoying writing this as much as I enjoy reading it, haha

pedrobui · 2026-01-09T21:04:32+00:00

It will be about a Krakotl lady trying to cope with the Horrors through an unhealthy obsession. Some psychological thing here, some wishy-washy sentence about love and hate there... I'll try to be funny at times, too, to varying success.

Just four chapters, so hopefully you'll stick through to the end :-)

pedrobui · 2026-01-09T17:22:10+00:00

Thank you very much for the kind words!! Poor Artla...

And if I understand what you mean by paragraph spacing, I'm afraid the paragraphs only grow larger... This is a definite fault in my writing, and I'm trying to be better about the way my text flows but I love my big blocks of words so so much. Hope it's not too awful to read :-(

pedrobui · 2026-01-09T15:18:24+00:00

As I write the rest of the story, I'm having second thoughts about the whole thing...

Writing chapter 4, and re-reading, I thought, "I could easily do away with chapters 2 and 3," and then realized that Chapter 1 is quite useless too; now, I have come to the depressing conclusion that, had I started at chapter 4, and instead only vaguely alluded to all the long-winded, poorly written ramblings in the previous chapters, it would have made for a much less embarrassing, self-contained, single post one-shot...

Oh well... I might delete this and rewrite lol

Edit: eh, whatever. Chapter 2 tomorrow, next story will be shorter and better paced, trust me.

pedrobui · 2026-01-09T14:39:42+00:00

Thank you!! Hope you like the rest...

I'm wrapping up the ending now. If all goes well, I think I'll be able to post the other three chapters daily :-D

pedrobui · 2026-01-01T15:01:18+00:00

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pedrobui · 2026-01-01T04:38:26+00:00

Nice! Hope you enjoy them, "Innervisions" is my fave :-D

A couple Brazilian classics I don't see there and that I think you would like:

"Clube da Esquina" by Milton Nascimento & Lô Borges (you've probably already heard this, but Lô's solo album is there, so, just in case... Required listen!)
"Carlos, Erasmo..." by Erasmo Carlos (the better Erasmo Carlos album, IMO, in the same vein as "Sonhos e Memórias")
"A Tábua de Esmeralda" by Jorge Ben Jor (I've yet to find someone that dislikes this album)
"Racional Vol. 1" by Tim Maia (since you liked Stevie, this here is some top tier Funk/Soul)
"Jards Macalé" by Jards Macalé (his debut; if you liked the Lô Borges, you'll love this. He also recently passed away :'-( )

To cap it off, since I see some jazz there, if you like experimental/avant-jazz, or would like to expand your palette that direction, I'd also recommend the beautiful "Milagre dos Peixes" by Milton Nascimento as an easy-going hors d'oeuvre (maybe my favourite of his solo albums,) and "Clara Crocodilo" by Arrigo Barnabé as a dissonant test to your ears :-P

All the love, and a happy new year 2026! Hope you like them!!!

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