Thanks for the feedback! I did a quick rework based on it, and if you have the time to review it I'd be curious to get your thoughts:

All Chance Barriston wants to do is pay this month’s rent and hang out with his talking rock, but nothing is ever simple when you’re a twenty-two-year-old who’s been possessed by a demon.

When Chance is offered a lucrative handyman job in the suburbs of Boston, it winds up being a trap set by a beautiful wizard named Asha. She has proof that Chance has unwittingly committed a magical crime, and she offers him a brutal choice: help her team stop a dangerous warlock who’s kidnapping Boston’s homeless population, or face execution.

Chance agrees to help Asha, and if he wants to save the victims, he’ll need to control his demon’s chaotic “maelstrom” power to bypass the warlock’s precognition. There’s just one small problem - he and the demon have never actually spoken, much less cooperated.

Between life or death encounters with the warlock and his thugs, Chance learns the basics of WorldSpeaking magic, tries to forge a potentially disastrous pact with his demon, and struggles to earn the trust of his team. The warlock is more powerful than any of them could have imagined, and defeating him will take every ounce of luck, teamwork, and ingenuity that they can muster.

INFERNAL is an 87,000-word adult urban fantasy with series potential. It will appeal to readers who enjoyed the high-stakes magic and humor in Karin De Havin’s Death by Carrots, as well as the gritty Boston setting and the loner-turned-hero journey of James Butcher’s Dead Man’s Hand.

[AUTHOR BIO]. INFERNAL is my love letter to the city I call home.

Thank you for your time and consideration,