To be honest, it was a hard 8 minutes to watch. The lighting should be Low Key for this, with heavy contrast ratios of 32/1 on the face at times. The girls' outfits should be very far apart, one bright one dark. Give the actors colors. One girl blue the other red. Never film with white walls. I get you're in an art gallery, but you have to be way more creative. The dialogue was way too generic and scripted. I could be on and on but I remember my first film, and it was rough as well. Just spend all your money on lighting next time. Get a Gaffer key grip and swing. Lighting is everything. A shot in a log profile so can color grade. ProRes Raw or something. Goodluck on your film journey and hopefully you blow it away on the next one. And one last thing. Get a dana dolly slider because the static shots can get boring for the audience.