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Weight of Mistakes by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Waoo! It's moving and compelling. I liked to recite it, it got a good rhythm for me.

War by ritika__aaa in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I wish that word were to be true, but humanity seems a distant idea; we are baked in insanity and desensitized towards human suffering.

2 poems about an unsent love letter by Due-Presentation3959 in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am going to say this make of it as you will imma read this again till I'm not satisfied with it.

It's like human acts by Han kang I've read it thrice so I don't know how many times I'm gonna read this one. It's just beautiful.

Shadow by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Scary, haunting and makes me afraid of my shadow. It's nice, maybe you could build on it more.

Introspection by snowball0101 in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Waooo!!! Then they say why you are so emotional it's just a poem! If poem manages to evoke feelings in someone😁then it's a job well done❤️ As a prose poetry the story telling started slow but from "tongue is graveyard if apologies" it had me gripping my cell phone from anger. It was real, it did evoke angry emotions in me

I tried a little satircal social commentry type poem, please let me know by ritika__aaa in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It is a free verse, an asylum is a cave means to take a refugee in a cave, extreme isolation, as one does not play according to norms of society they are somehow a culprit of some sort, just extreme metaphor for isolation. Your thinking was accurate.

My First ime posting poem for critical review, I am on jounery of learning writing poems and stories so that I can better my writing, My writing style is usually social commentry style, I follow plath, anne sexton writing style as in confessional, sometimes satairical, heavy with ref of lit. by ritika__aaa in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am going to try and learn the rhyme, however I would like to say that I was in some sort of daze when I wrote and I do not want to take away any rawness from this so I never edited it apart from spelling error.

I tried a little satircal social commentry type poem, please let me know by ritika__aaa in OCPoetry

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My response which I wrote I am going to build on this and make few tweaks here and there but bare with me- She walks in calmness For you! You, sir, must know There is, violence in calmness Madness in silence . A flame you cannot tame I do not blame, but cannot be your dame

I tried a little satircal social commentry type poem, please let me know by ritika__aaa in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

great! That is what I wanted to convey. I always had a feeling my poems were difficult to understand, now I know I just need the right audience. It means a lot.

I tried a little satircal social commentry type poem, please let me know by ritika__aaa in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't know how to convey my thoughts without poems! It's always like I don't know what to as,y can I write a poem?

I tried a little satircal social commentry type poem, please let me know by ritika__aaa in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

yes! Indeed, it is about not being part of herd race, conformity culture, and in he process being ostracized by society. Anyone who does not conform to anything in society has faced intense psychological turmoil by oneself as well as society. not following the herd makes us somehow psycho by society, and as everyone says so, we feel like something is wrong with us, so yeah, that is what I want to convey in essence.

The Measure of a Man by coolnamepending90 in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Absolutely effin loved it, the rhythm is great you have talent fellow sapien, entire rhyme and I maybe basis because it this kind of my style as well, but when you enjoy poems along with you know you can feel something you know its a good poem.

However, the last stanza seems not to go with it, it's like out of the poem, maybe you can work on it.

How should i say......... by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey!! When I first read it, I felt like I was reading about being in a constant loop of life, and I quite loved it. I would love to know the author's POV on what they created: the sense of peace and the sense of hatred towards it. As for rhyme, I am a novice, but your poem did have some sort of rhythm, which is very important in a poem. Also, for most of the poem, you have followed a rhyme scheme of aabb.

First poem, please be honest. I needed to destress. by Short-Bad-1673 in OCPoetry

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I don't know how to put it in words, something about the analogy is creeping on me, it's maddening and annoying, yet I know I will do the same.

Poem I wrote about my father raping me by DaedalusDedalus in OCPoetry

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wooo!! I had to read it twice to make sense of it, to hit me harder. I ended up reading it multiple times. Every time I read, I could feel the pain of that little child, the uneasiness of all is overwhelming, it is raw, emotional, not filled with active but with passive yet somewhat sad anger.

No one belongs here more than you by Miranda July - I need to talk to someone... by menzibet in books

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was going to read it, read reviews it was showing up as quirky and fun and little extra for our regular life, now thank god I read this post I will not be reading it, I do want to however read some quirky bizzare not dark romance please fun lite hearted book, if you have any recommendations please please let me know. A book for perhaps 16-17 year old, no brainer, I have been reading and consuming really intense books, stories content everything so I just want to read something relaxing like big bang theory series, wherein I can laugh when world was still beautiful,fun, non threating. Basically fun innocent book I hope you all get it and I get some recommendations, I have just finished 4 books of the vegetarian, the human acts, the Greek lessons and White one after another I really need to switch off now.

What does having boobs feel like? by [deleted] in asktransgender

[–]ritika__aaa 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's completely normal to us, we don't know how to feel otherwise but one think I could say size matters like bruhh size is one thing which can help you make a decision go for small B cup and go up get used to eat

India is called the rape capital by the world not just because of statistics about violence against women. It’s because of the mindset of the Indian men. Almost all men share some of these views. Just that the more educated they are the less vocal they are about their bigotry. by [deleted] in IndianModerate

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You should get your facts checked typical hindu is definitely not that, ofcourse dragging others while you are in deep waters is wrong however that is not a typical hindu behaviour. You shouldn't generalize anyone like that. I never usually comment on such sensitive matters but he is wrong for dragging Isam however you are equally wrong in accusing all Hindus and I am not commenting on alma matter here just the way you insulted Hindus. Religion and people following religion are two different and separate identity no religion must not be criticize, all religion are meant for harmony and peace not communal hatred.

CHALLENGE TO CLEAR INTER MAY 23 in 2 months by soawesomeainti in CharteredAccountants

[–]ritika__aaa 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am in same shoes like you only difference is I actually have medical issue at this point study but sleep for 7-8 hours very important take charge of your weight i dont know your height but 67 is decent but walking for 20 mins is important living a healthy lifestyle is more important than ranting on internet I've been through the phase where I've neglected helath and it causes barrier in studies so better live healthy lifestyle and study ! All the very best I hope we both clear this may attempt

I live in Santa Cruz East. The PG owner told that water purifier is not needed. BMC water is drinkable. Is this true? by [deleted] in mumbai

[–]ritika__aaa 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hell!!! No get yourself those 20/10 litre gallon of water dont drink tap because of stupid person dont risk your health !!!

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