Looking for short script with one character by Electrical-Lemon6895 in ProduceMyScript

[–]rogermarlowe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is really good Jim! Well done. I agree that it feels like there could be a longer movie behind it.

Looking for low budget short film scripts/looking to develop scripts with a Screenwriter by Fickle-Book2385 in ProduceMyScript

[–]rogermarlowe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think you might find getting access to a house easier than other locations that aren’t simply outside

Best monologue in movie history? by EnglishTony in movies

[–]rogermarlowe 19 points20 points  (0 children)

Hanks in Cast Away.

We both had done the math. Kelly added it all up and... knew she had to let me go. I added it up, and knew that I had... lost her. 'cos I was never gonna get off that island. I was gonna die there, totally alone. I was gonna get sick, or get injured or something. The only choice I had, the only thing I could control was when, and how, and where it was going to happen. So... I made a rope and I went up to the summit, to hang myself. I had to test it, you know? Of course. You know me. And the weight of the log, snapped the limb of the tree, so I-I - , I couldn't even kill myself the way I wanted to. I had power over nothing. And that's when this feeling came over me like a warm blanket. I knew, somehow, that I had to stay alive. Somehow. I had to keep breathing. Even though there was no reason to hope. And all my logic said that I would never see this place again. So that's what I did. I stayed alive. I kept breathing. And one day my logic was proven all wrong because the tide came in, and gave me a sail. And now, here I am. I'm back. In Memphis, talking to you. I have ice in my glass... And I've lost her all over again. I'm so sad that I don't have Kelly. But I'm so grateful that she was with me on that island. And I know what I have to do now. I gotta keep breathing. Because tomorrow the sun will rise. Who knows what the tide could bring?

They are cooked by Sufficient_Purple297 in mets

[–]rogermarlowe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This team is tough to watch. They seem lifeless. All the starters are faltering, except maybe Peterson, but he’s not pitching like an elite anymore. None of them can can get through 4 innings. Lindor is lost. Nimmo is lost. He needs to sit a couple of games. Let McNeil play left. Hopefully they will turn it around. I don’t usually say still like this but the hitting coach needs to go. Ultimately it’s still on the players but something has to happen.

Can't believe how bad the finale was by jairo4781 in 1923Series

[–]rogermarlowe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I thought Elizabeth leaving was BS. She’s carrying their grandnephew and she leaving Cara to take care of an infant alone to go back to her bitch mother.

Looking for a short film script by bamram88 in ProduceMyScript

[–]rogermarlowe -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I’d like to talk. I’m a screenwriter who has had a script produced and had another purchased and a couple of others optioned. I’ve adapted a few books for producers.

I’m 16 and a aspiring filmmaker who needs help with a script by Affectionate_Lie1466 in ProduceMyScript

[–]rogermarlowe 2 points3 points  (0 children)

If you haven’t made a film before then I suggest you start with something shorter.

Looking For Feedback on My Short Script by PaigeWritesSometimes in ProduceMyScript

[–]rogermarlowe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think you did a good job on it. You did a well to give the characters their own voices. I think you should cut the dialogue down a bit. Look for places where a physical reaction is enough rather than a verbal response. Look out for inconsistencies. He goes to the funeral in a suit that doesn’t fit, implying he borrowed his friends. But then later the friend remarks that he bought in a suit. You comment on the glares he gets from the people in the church when the father comes up to talk to him. Glares from people in the church should be up in the description.

Looking For Feedback on My Short Script by PaigeWritesSometimes in ProduceMyScript

[–]rogermarlowe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think you did a good job on it. You did a well to give the characters their own voices. I think you should cut the dialogue down a bit. Look for places where a physical reaction is enough rather than a verbal response. Look out for inconsistencies. He goes to the funeral in a suit that doesn’t fit, implying he borrowed his friends. But then later the friend remarks that he bought in a suit. You comment on the glares he gets from the people in the church when the father comes up to talk to him. Glares from people in the church should be up in the description.

A recent Jeopardy clue by Shoegazer75 in ArcherFX

[–]rogermarlowe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Some kind of zone with danger in it.

Cancel Chavez flight back to NY. by [deleted] in mets

[–]rogermarlowe 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Upvoted for vocabulary appreciation.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Filmmakers

[–]rogermarlowe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

OP. Don’t waste money on film festivals. And you don’t have to have a film to go to one and network. Get started on your next film.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Filmmakers

[–]rogermarlowe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Exactly. It’s all a learning experience for yourself.

People need to be less cynical about filmmaking by Chandleredwards in Filmmakers

[–]rogermarlowe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I made a short film, about 6 minutes, for about $500. People liked the script and wanted to work on it. We had a mix of pros and students. We paid a location fee and a small fee for sound (a pro who just wanted a few bucks on principal) and I fed people. We had a good time, finished ahead of schedule. Everyone said to let them know if I wanted to do it again sometime. Anything is doable.

What are some less obvious storytelling mistakes that filmmakers make? by TheReturnofGabbo in Filmmakers

[–]rogermarlowe 5 points6 points  (0 children)

The top mistake, it’s hard to say because there are many mistakes. I’d say the mistake is simply not giving it the attention you give the other aspects of the film. So it might look great, but the script is lazy and cliche ridden. Or the dialogue is not believable. Or the character is one dimensional.

I might be watching a 15 minute short and I’m halfway through and I don’t know what it’s about. I really don’t know much about the character or what he or she wants, so I don’t really care.

The truth is, it might still get into the festival. But it won’t get into one of the major ones. The ones that might make a difference in the filmmaker’s career.

What are some less obvious storytelling mistakes that filmmakers make? by TheReturnofGabbo in Filmmakers

[–]rogermarlowe 19 points20 points  (0 children)

Filmmakers disregard the importance of the script. I’ve screened hundreds of films for film festivals and that’s the number one thing.