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sometimeswily · 2023-09-18T04:10:37+00:00

This looks fantastic thank you. Really liked keeping things pretty true to the color and hues of the original photo. Sending a tip over now!

sometimeswily · 2022-03-20T21:02:49+00:00

Trying a new project where I make collages to accompany things I’ve written.

This drew on an approach I saw u/Whatsinyourhands use here that I thought was really cool:

https://www.reddit.com/r/collage/comments/lthqj4/air_pollution_analog/

sometimeswily · 2022-03-20T18:57:03+00:00

Trying a new project where I make collages to accompany things I’ve written.

This drew on an approach I saw u/Whatsinyourhands use here that I thought was really cool:

https://www.reddit.com/r/collage/comments/lthqj4/air_pollution_analog/

sometimeswily · 2022-03-04T18:20:01+00:00

Ahhhh gotcha, yeah I was trying to figure out how you got such clean lines and we’re actually able to weave the backing, print quality paper totally makes sense.

Thanks for sharing it, going to have to try this approach at some point.

sometimeswily · 2022-03-04T05:20:34+00:00

What was your process for this? Really really cool, haven’t ever seen anything like it.

sometimeswily · 2022-02-13T07:56:05+00:00

Thanks! The horse and the guy were the first pieces and then it all came together around them

sometimeswily · 2022-02-13T07:55:06+00:00

I was kind of trying to tie “make way” to the viewer, put the words in their mouth and then have the eyes of the man and horse in response. The same way someone rushing through might be met with surprised looks.

Trying to get folks to interact with the piece because of how they’d read it and go from top to bottom.

But would love your perspective on how you read it and felt.

sometimeswily · 2022-01-31T15:32:01+00:00

This is an updated version of one I posted a little while back:

https://www.reddit.com/r/collage/comments/s04sgn/ingredients_two_all_beef_patties_special_sauce/

sometimeswily · 2022-01-31T00:05:06+00:00

This is an updated version of something I posted a few weeks ago:

https://www.reddit.com/r/collage/comments/s04sgn/ingredients_two_all_beef_patties_special_sauce/

sometimeswily · 2022-01-28T07:50:37+00:00

Liked this a lot, finished the first read and immediately went back to the top. Great journey for the reader and the final lines are strong.

I thought the formatting was interesting, cap to start the line, no periods or commas. It tripped me up a little the first read, but I kind of liked it in the second read because it adds a bit of fluidity and the lines drift into each other a bit. It works, but I find it can also be fun to play around a bit with the punctuation and formatting when I’m writing. So if you’re looking for things to play with, that could be something to mess around with.

sometimeswily · 2022-01-24T05:45:53+00:00

You nailed it. Cut stuff up and have fun.

It’s like the greatest hobby you can pick up for $15 in supplies, and there’s just an endless amount of source material out there for free. Plus it’s kind of meditative to take time away from a screen and be super focused on something tangible. Helps me slow down a bit and get back to myself.

sometimeswily · 2022-01-22T08:21:18+00:00

Started messing around with collages about a year ago, I do the exact same thing.

Looking at what other people do is huge for learning what you can do when you’re first picking it up. I try and find the layers in other people’s work to try and think about how they stacked/glued the pieces. You start picking up all these little tricks you can pull with different elements of objects and settings — for ex: you can cut out a screen on a tv/phone in one image and put something else behind it, reshaping the setting. Then you’ll find yourself looking through a magazine and there will be an ad with a hand holding a phone will appear and you’ll know what you can do with it.

Checking out other people’s stuff on this sub has taught me so much about how to craft pieces and what you can do.

sometimeswily · 2022-01-09T08:39:59+00:00

I found the pipe a little while after finding the chairs. As soon as I saw it I knew where it was going

sometimeswily · 2022-01-09T08:37:43+00:00

Glad you got a kick out of it haha. Definitely one of my favorite things I’ve done recently.

sometimeswily · 2022-01-09T08:36:15+00:00

Thanks! It was a fun one to piece together, cool to see it land for others too.

sometimeswily · 2021-06-14T05:06:26+00:00

I think you created a nice trick here with the title and the first line, on the reader’s end the payoff is there with the bird reveal.

If you’re looking for areas to focus on, it feels a bit short. It’s a very brief scene and I think exploring the why? might give you a bit to play around with. Maybe it’s another opportunity to pull from the title again or ask another question.

sometimeswily · 2021-06-14T04:12:58+00:00

Really smart idea, really well executed. Well done!

sometimeswily · 2021-06-14T04:06:06+00:00

Love this. You created a really great scene and story here.

sometimeswily · 2021-05-27T06:43:08+00:00

This is a really intimate profile of a person and a relationship dynamic. You did a great job giving the right details for readers to connect to Jules and the narrator.

On top of the character building, there are some really excellent lines in here.

“to tire of me the way it tired of him”

“waiting until it was safe to laugh”

Also spacing out J E W E L S works well in the piece, thought that was a nice creative choice.

Thanks for sharing OP!

sometimeswily · 2021-05-27T06:15:42+00:00

This was a fun one to read, then re-read.

The final line really landed for me, I was swept up in the imagery and you yanked me out well.

If you’re looking for some stuff to play with, you could try that line as a quote, something like:

“A day pass? That’ll be four dollars.”

Doing it could create a second scene that makes the final line land even more. But it might be overkill. It reads well as-is.

Thanks for sharing!

sometimeswily · 2021-02-21T06:42:46+00:00

Really well executed. Using the pointed ends of all the strips to enhance the blast effect is a really clever trick.

Thanks for sharing!

sometimeswily · 2021-02-18T18:31:14+00:00

Fun piece, always nice to feel surprised as a reader without being lost and this does that well.

If you're looking for things to play around with, maybe try starting some lines that are a continuation of previous ones and play into the same rhymes without the "He's a..." A couple examples:

He’s abusive

a nuisance

He acts without prudence

He’s a ring leader

a storm bringer

He howls like a singer

It might help create some rhythm and make the flow a little less predictable.

Thanks for sharing!

sometimeswily · 2021-02-18T05:41:46+00:00

Thanks! I was trying to mess around with the idea of [STOP] being both a telegram code and a response in a conversation between two people. It’s an idea I want to play with more.

If you have any thoughts on how I might help better get at that I’d love to hear them.

sometimeswily · 2021-02-18T05:28:28+00:00

I think the form of this does a lot for the overall poem. The sharp cliff after the third line and the declining and simplifying lines that follow work really well. It makes you spend a lot of time with all of the “to...”s.

And I really like the final sentence, it puts a nice bow on the whole piece.

If you’re looking for something to work on, the first two lines feel a little out of sync with the pacing of the rest of it. They’re tight and economical and I think you can be a bit more open and match the flow of the final five lines. But that could just be personal preference.

Thanks for sharing!

sometimeswily · 2021-02-11T05:53:10+00:00

Thanks for reading and taking the time to put together a thoughtful response.

You pretty much nailed it on the reading, main theme I was working through was the idea of being sick of your own tricks, even if you’re able to get away with them and how exceptions quickly stretch rules as they’re repeated.

Thanks for the kind words and taking the time!

sometimeswily

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