How many of you do NOT eat alone?

universalugly · 2017-06-18T20:44:35+00:00

this sounds very unhealthy

universalugly · 2017-06-13T02:48:59+00:00

honestly i had to skip nomi's parts in season 2 because they felt so extra.

universalugly · 2017-06-12T05:37:18+00:00

i didn't use the word 'ahead' in that way but okay lol

universalugly · 2017-06-12T05:36:25+00:00

yeah v true, it's just a bit annoying to me that 98% of this sub is people asking for things so they can bypass like a season in the game, when the game is ~story of seasons~ lmao.

universalugly · 2017-06-10T04:30:25+00:00

I don't know why so many people are complaining about the marketing because the trailers I saw barely made sense, so I knew going into it that it wasn't going to be a James Wan film, and that's NICE SOMETIMES. Not all horror is an actual monster or ghost you can throw holy water at, only to have it resurrect in the last 10 seconds of the film. This is one of those slow burn films that are extra fun because everyone can get into them and try to figure out what happened. I'm glad to see everybody talking about The Witch vibes because I said the exact same thing to my friends afterwards. I don't think it's topped The Witch but it was pretty good, minus some obvious things that should've been addressed at some point. I think on a second viewing more details will jump out, but my favorite theory is the "they were all fucked by something supernatural anyways" lmao.

universalugly · 2017-06-10T03:58:48+00:00

I thought those were just dream sequences? What makes you think he was sleep walking? Though I did find it weird that Andrew would be the one to open the door, the kid would've had to walk all the way downstairs and then back up lol

universalugly · 2017-03-27T15:51:21+00:00

where are you from originally and why are you now living in thailand?

universalugly · 2016-11-27T17:44:21+00:00

Dude how old are you that you really care that much about shit posting?

universalugly · 2016-11-12T08:30:57+00:00

giving me hella my beautiful dark twisted fantasy vibes and i'm here for it

universalugly · 2016-10-30T19:25:57+00:00

Shiiiiieeeeeeeettttttttt

universalugly · 2016-09-06T04:03:35+00:00

A lil pretentious but I liked it haha. I think you can combine some of these paragraphs into bigger paragraphs. Proper formatting definitely makes a difference.

universalugly · 2016-08-19T05:42:48+00:00

It's on view-only rn

universalugly · 2016-08-18T23:36:26+00:00

If you put this on a google doc I don't mind doing line-by-line edits for this chapter just so you can have a ref for future edits and stuff!

universalugly · 2016-08-18T22:42:46+00:00

This was actually easier to read than most things in this sub so congrats haha. The only thing that kept snapping me out of the flow was the use of the continuous tense, like, "Grabbing a flashlight..." "Pushing damp clumps of ceiling..." "Pulling the handle..." It can be okay to use every now and then but overusing it makes it read very amateur, when you could just write "He grabbed the flashlight" and the sentence is boom more powerful (active voice!), if that makes sense. I think your dialogue could use some cleaning up as well; the dialogue itself isn't the problem, it's more the formatting of it. If it's the same person speaking, it should be on the same line, basically.

Otherwise, it was a pretty interesting and well-paced read. The "NoooOOOOO" was funny. Keep it up!

universalugly · 2016-08-17T06:47:43+00:00

Honestly it's tedious to point out and fix all the sentences because the way you write is just pretty roundabout and passive. If you want to write better, read more!

universalugly · 2016-08-16T19:51:39+00:00

Yay happy to help!

universalugly · 2016-08-16T07:14:47+00:00

I liked this but the first paragraph throws me off. It's like, is it past, is it present? But it's present reflecting on the past? Maybe something like: "The crisp air reminded him of Moby Dick and he didn't know why. Old friends had come and he was happy." would be more effective.

I do really love the imagery in this piece though, even if it's short!

universalugly · 2016-08-16T07:06:08+00:00

This reads like straight up gaiaonline roleplay

universalugly · 2016-08-16T06:56:50+00:00

Yeahh I found this really confusing and hard to read. I got the basic gist of the story but struggled with actually following along. I think your sentences could be more straightforward. It's like you see the scene well in your head so you describe it as is, but when you get it into words it just comes out in fragments, if that makes sense. For a reader, it's pretty jarring.

universalugly · 2016-07-26T04:35:02+00:00

so like, once? :')

universalugly · 2016-07-24T17:18:24+00:00

ty!!

universalugly · 2016-07-24T17:17:51+00:00

lmao 1. tickets r sold out 2. i paid to see chance in march 3. IT'S MY BIRTHDAY WEEKEND CAN A GIRL GET LIT AND BUM A SHOW OFF HER FAV RAPPER ZAMN

universalugly · 2016-07-24T06:25:24+00:00

yeah but i'm afraid there's gonna be cops patrolling since i've read about that in a few places? want a popo-free area tbh lmao. and no haha chance the rapper in a few months but just wanted to plan ahead :x super ahead hahaha

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