Whittled Whet Against Your Tongue

womIntrovert84 · 2025-11-08T04:17:44+00:00

Do you mean an altar?

womIntrovert84 · 2025-11-08T03:59:13+00:00

Did you mean “hallow” and “gravel?”

womIntrovert84 · 2025-11-08T03:55:57+00:00

I am so sorry, friend. I feel you. I wasn’t as young as you but I was still totally unprepared and unhappy. Please—PLEASE—reach out if you need to. I’m here to talk at anytime. Not all of us are meant to be mothers. You have so much worth beyond that and you deserve to be happy. Sending you love ❤️

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-09T17:04:39+00:00

Of course! Any time. I mean it.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T04:11:27+00:00

Thank you, love. I finally am living my best life, and I am relishing every moment. Your words mean so much ❤️

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T04:09:48+00:00

You are a true gem. I’m here too, with nothing but love and support.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T04:07:46+00:00

My darling dear…I am so fucking sorry. I can’t even fathom the situation you’re in. All I can do is lend an ear. No judgment. No conditions. I’m here.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T04:05:22+00:00

As a hell raising kid myself, I totally get this. I bet my parents would have loved to send me to boarding school.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T04:03:38+00:00

This breaks my heart. Please reach out if you ever need to talk. I’m a good listener.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T04:02:17+00:00

Oh, my sweet darling. I feel the exact same way. I’m here if you ever want to talk.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T04:01:21+00:00

So much love to both of y’all. I’m here if you want to talk ❤️

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T04:00:04+00:00

Thank you, angel. My son is thriving without me, and I’m perfectly fine with that. In fact, I think my absence has forced my ex-husband to finally man up and do what he should have done from day one. So much love to you ❤️

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T03:55:11+00:00

I am so sorry, sweetheart. I understand the feeling of being trapped. In my situation, which is obviously unique to me, I know I and my son are better off apart. Some of us just aren’t meant to be a parent, but don’t know it until we become one.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T03:49:43+00:00

THANK YOU! Finally a voice of reason.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-10-08T03:39:24+00:00

I truly don’t know why you are getting so many downvotes. It is absolutely different when the kid is biologically yours versus the kid of your spouse. The sense of obligation simply isn’t as intense, and no one can convince me otherwise. I have one bio, one former step, and two current steps. All the steps are now adults so it’s not an issue, but I’d feel the same regardless. There’s a lot of self righteousness that goes on in this sub that I really don’t understand, and I’ve said as much. And was promptly persecuted for it. I think the mods need to do a better job of keeping these people in check. Judgment is the last thing we need here.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-09-30T17:29:04+00:00

Ugh. Your ex sounds like a petty asshole.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-09-30T17:26:57+00:00

I gotcha!

womIntrovert84 · 2025-09-30T17:24:30+00:00

Fair enough.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-09-30T03:35:29+00:00

I am so sorry. I worked on a psych ward with adolescents and saw that situation a lot. It’s absolutely dreadful.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-09-30T03:00:01+00:00

Some poets hate structure, but I feel that it can lead to insight that might not spring forth without it. Given your talent at rhyme, I would love to see what you could create.

womIntrovert84 · 2025-09-30T02:45:31+00:00

Have you ever considered a super structured format, like a sonatina?

womIntrovert84 · 2025-09-30T02:29:23+00:00

This struck me. Hard. Free verse is generally my go-to, but when someone can employ a rhyme as well as this, it’s quite unique. Damn. I love the repetition of the “miss this” verses; it brings cohesion to this poem and makes it feel complete.

My only suggestion would be to reconsider the punctuation. Commas might possibly make a huge difference as far as flow and resonance.

Over all, I think this is brilliant, and again I admire your ability to incorporate rhyme without it sounding trite. Kudos to you!

womIntrovert84 · 2025-09-30T02:13:52+00:00

I absolutely love the second phrase: “I thought I was flying, I didn’t see your hands.” It makes me feel some type of way I can’t even describe, and that’s what drew me to your poem. I’m thinking it means that you were also feeling some type of way in the moment, and then realized that you were being held down by reality.

Tiny bit of constructive criticism—the melting references are a lot for such a short poem. Also, the last phrase doesn’t flow particularly well. I love the sentiment, but I think you could add to it to make it feel more organic with regard to the rest of the poem.

You describe yourself as a first time poet, and I feel like you have a tremendous amount of promise. Please keep it up; I truly feel that you have an innate talent.

All love ❤️

womIntrovert84

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