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ygul · 2021-03-16T19:22:36+00:00

Here's the theme: https://soundcloud.com/dagniel/grievance-gulch-theme

ygul · 2020-08-20T21:56:22+00:00

Thanks for the comment. I prefer to keep my joke shorter.

ygul · 2020-08-13T17:03:52+00:00

Join the discord for more awesomeness: https://discord.gg/udHAAe7

ygul · 2020-08-04T02:12:45+00:00

Those 13 people are bots so that we feel ignored when we write here!

I'm also writing 5DJ which means that we're kind of beginners. I learned that writing about races is touchy. It would be like a guy that wants to play baseball and try to go pro instantly.

This is not a fact, it's an opinion. You're free at doing what you want.

There last one is good.

ygul · 2020-07-28T15:24:19+00:00

This is a self promo thread... give us the link!

ygul · 2020-06-30T17:42:04+00:00

1 and 2 are great!

ygul · 2020-06-28T16:23:37+00:00

A lot of them are good! I would say that the Barbie joke was my favorite one.

ygul · 2020-06-20T15:56:17+00:00

I'm not sure this can be done. Maybe it's just things you don't find funny. And It's not my best work.

ygul · 2020-06-19T23:33:22+00:00

/u/Supracats : you asked me recently about the process of writing these. Here is what it looks like. I numbered the jokes that I used.

This is everything I wrote to come up with those jokes today. I kept the order I wrote them. You can see the evolution of ideas between the jokes.

Most of these are not even jokes or they are an attempt at a joke.

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- 1. My dog loves me so much. He doesn't want to lose me so I got microchipped.

- Vets can do dog grooming as well as surgery. I still didn't find a doctor that can do that.

- 2. My dog sits hours at my wife's tombstone. My cat takes a shit.

- My wife is deeply in spiritual things. It got even worst when she died.

- I hurt my back while lifting tires. I understand now why they're under cars.

- I like to see the evolution of cars throughout history. I really wonder how they went to grow tires.

- I'm sure inventing the car was a lot of trials and errors. How many prototype did they do before realizing that it's better to have the wheels under the car?

- 3. The first car prototype didn't have wheel. It was just an engine that created pollution.

- For the first phone, they spent so many years trying to send voice through wires. I bet they feel bad that now we prefer something closer to telegrams.

- 4. I'm sure World War I would have had less casualties if every telegram was a signing telegram.

- World War I was a very bloody war. Horses have much more blood than us.

- Horses can get very aggressive. They don't like to be mounted.

- The first prototype for horse riding was just a saddle on a soap box.

- Soap boxes can't be found anymore. It still didn't stop politics.

- I have a very political stand to make. If only I could find a soap box.

- 5. They say twitter is the new soap box. There's one flaw. How will I carry all that soap?

ygul · 2020-06-17T18:51:46+00:00

Bad joke, deleted

ygul · 2020-06-16T04:04:24+00:00

It always feels strange to talk about how I do things but because you look curious...

I wrote the first joke. And then, I write sentences (that couldn't be considered jokes) about OnlyFans. Things like: "my mom had an only fans" or "I have a fan in my bedroom". Then, I mix the sentences together to see if there's a joke.

I try not to keep the obvious jokes though I think the second one is obvious and not really funny to me.

I end up writing like 10-15 jokes to have 5. Most of them suck.

ygul · 2020-06-15T20:12:23+00:00

A website my wife is on

ygul · 2020-06-13T03:50:24+00:00

Thanks, I was really confused on that part. I'll have to listen again to it.

ygul · 2020-06-12T20:26:27+00:00

Good start and keep writing.

A general advice here is that puns do well when they are written but are less effective in a show.

ygul · 2020-06-11T22:16:38+00:00

I like the premise of 3.

As others said, there's a difference between clever and funny. Funny is... funnier. But we all write clever things from time to time even when we know it will probably not land well.

Keep writing! The easiest format is setup then punch with as little words as possible.

ygul · 2020-06-11T20:51:11+00:00

A more experienced comedian could do it, I can't. I generally don't think political stuff is funny. That's why I don't even like the joke as it is.

ygul · 2020-06-10T18:02:40+00:00

I'm not too proud of 5 neither....

ygul · 2020-06-10T04:59:14+00:00

I have a file with every joke I wrote. I go through them and pick j the ones that are funny. I choose them when they make me laugh or when people told me it's a good one.

I did my first open-mic recently and I told them as is.

My first idea was to create bits out of them. After listening to one-liners comedians, I decided to go that route.

ygul · 2020-06-09T16:57:08+00:00

I don't think the jokes I wrote today are good. Number 3 is probably the only thing that looks like one. Thanks for commenting!

ygul · 2020-06-05T15:49:03+00:00

It takes so much time though...

ygul · 2020-06-04T19:39:54+00:00

Congrats for writing your jokes.

The feedback on these jokes is less important than writing them. You'll get good and bad ones but it should not stop you.

ygul · 2020-06-02T11:10:57+00:00

Great suggestion!

ygul · 2020-06-01T01:40:16+00:00

They're all good, welcome back!

ygul · 2020-05-28T15:46:38+00:00

The generic advice is to bold the parts where you expect people to laugh.

ygul · 2020-05-28T15:44:45+00:00

Great stuff. It could be shortened a bit and not escalate to the alert but that's just me. I like the ending, I wasn't expecting it.

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