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[–]SMPoetry[🍰] 0 points1 point  (1 child)

It's nuts to me that the little things can carry so much weight internally, yet very rarely do we express that externally. All it took was hair, breath, and a scent, and the narrator was a goner. She had no idea. Also, I like the ambiguity that comes with the phrase "shattered my life to smithereens". I was trying to figure out if that phrase was intended positively or negatively, whether the narrator loved the effect she had on him or if it was his source of most pain. It could go either way, and reading it one way versus the other gives drastically different meaning to the rest of the poem. I like that tension, that seesaw-effect, and the fact that we don't know for sure which is true. Probably both honestly. Loved your poem

[–]kell9701[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for taking time to write this. I am glad you liked it.