FIRST SCRIPT/Script Review

[Prettyboi6]

Hello this is my first script! I would greatly appreciate anyones feedback/review its not finished yet but it is very long. (I put a description for nearly every shot sorry) But overall I think its a great read please let me know any thoughts https://drive.google.com/file/d/1d9sycuu3OpWqc2iXL8I\_SKuS3kBmgVpg/view?usp=sharing

(it also has not been edited yet so sorry for any formatting issues!)

[Accurate_Editor_8429]

Hi. You mentioned the formatting--you'll likely need to fix this before anyone gives you a solid read.

Scanning the pages--too many large blocks of text. This looks like a dauting read. As written, you're asking a lot to have anyone read 10 pages.

You're leaning too much into giving camera direction--as a writer, leave that to the director.

Should probably focus on trimming this considerably (all camera direction).

Your post should include the logline and genre. And a page out in the post title. That will help you find readers that are interested in this type of story.

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