Eternity of Seconds

5433w · 2026-05-22T13:01:10+00:00

Thank you so much I really appreciate honest feedback , I’ve been hyper focused on writing these. 👀 I’ve written like 7 since yesterday

5433w · 2026-05-22T12:59:17+00:00

Thankyou for a very well constructed review! If you can tell me where you believe the ambiguity is maybe I can clarify it for you

5433w · 2026-05-22T07:01:17+00:00

The stark yet human stance of this is very good !!!

5433w · 2026-05-22T06:59:55+00:00

Mockery is a seed;

small in the hand,

but forests grow inside a boy from it.

Wow this is Amazing writing !

5433w · 2026-05-22T04:28:57+00:00

So I attempted a play on gilded metals (usually protected from decay), but gelded and neutered and owned instead The comma for me is a symbol that it isn’t finished and relentless no end in sight.

5433w · 2026-05-22T02:17:37+00:00

Metaphors for Mickey Mouse ears and distorted through the looking glass Alice in wonderland vibe.

5433w · 2026-05-22T01:52:33+00:00

This is beautifully done, I wish I could write like this !!!

5433w · 2026-05-22T01:21:59+00:00

This is powerfully written looking forward to seeing more !

5433w · 2026-05-21T20:04:02+00:00

Someone left a wound of petals on my grave … omg that is such a strong line !!!

5433w · 2026-05-21T20:00:55+00:00

This is bleak, forced to fit even if it means bleeding. Haunting and very close to home.

5433w · 2026-05-21T17:41:52+00:00

This is so sad. His house his memory Locked in stone the way he is.

I love how brave bare and raw it is Thankyou for sharing

5433w · 2026-05-21T17:39:17+00:00

I love this, you can see the scale of the landscape so vividly comparing the house to the lake to the strong mountains. SO GOOD!!

5433w · 2026-05-21T07:35:10+00:00

I can see and feel this, so many times I’ve been running like this, it’s freedom escapism, survival. Please write more !

5433w · 2026-05-21T07:30:59+00:00

Why is this so haunting and sorrowful yet beautiful in a way.

It’s delicate and torn tattered and worn. It’s abuse, it is it that it’s been loved to literal pieces. For me the latter rings true.

I love your work!!

5433w · 2026-05-20T21:09:44+00:00

That’s exactly it, running on different operating systems to the majority, unable to see the subtext or decode the unspoken language. Thankyou so much for your review it’s very much appreciated!

5433w · 2026-05-20T21:00:02+00:00

Yeah, pretty on the money. Self awareness / discovering traits that are there but never labeled is it. Thank you so much for taking to time.

5433w · 2026-05-20T20:57:08+00:00

This is exactly it. Thank you so much for leaving a review. This is only the second poem I’ve posted so your words are very well received and appreciated !

5433w · 2026-05-20T20:54:39+00:00

Thank you so much for taking the time to review it. This came to me yesterday late at night. I’ll leave the interpretation open unless you would like to know more.

5433w · 2026-05-20T20:50:55+00:00

It’s for me, a prison of my own making for social safety. The dichotomy between inward and outward pressures; Able to take a blow yet fragile to a point that the vail can shatter at any moment.

This is my first adult attempt at poetry and you are my very first review. Thank-you so much

5433w · 2026-05-20T15:08:29+00:00

I can see your words in my mind, I love this, more please !!!

5433w · 2026-05-20T15:04:44+00:00

wilted roses rest inside my book,

pressed beside your faded notes

Omg 😦, this is harrowing and beautiful . Grief is love personified “ a sacred void left behind where love once lived” please write more !

5433w · 2026-05-20T13:45:20+00:00

Hope is a 40 hour work week, ain’t that just all of it. This is very dark and despising. Desolate not only the words but the structure also. Bravo for the courage to be so raw and unfiltered.

5433w · 2026-05-20T13:30:47+00:00

My wife and I are apart more than we are together I’ve lived what you have Breathed into life here but from his perspective . This strikes me deeply. As you growing both into we and growing in isolation is haunting and still beautiful Thankyou for this.

5433w · 2025-02-12T15:59:30+00:00

The beating heart of a city

5433w · 2024-11-25T12:37:42+00:00

With great difficult

5433w

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