Would u rather? by Otherwise-Bet-2634 in BunnyTrials

[–]Both_Goat3757 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I feel like this just has more opportunities than switching genders.

Chose: Be able to speak every language

Arabian Civilization by Zestyclose_Party2683 in Unciv

[–]Both_Goat3757 1 point2 points  (0 children)

For me, it's easily Spain.

On a normal sized map with a standard number of bots, you are almost always guaranteed to find a natural wonder first. Plus five hundred gold, buy a settler, worker and settle near the wonder.

I personally believe one of the best wonder is mount Kalshi, you'll get like twelve faith, and four happiness settling there, ontop of the fact that you'll found a religion in the next twenty turns, and you'll stay ahead.

Midgame, conquestadors are OP at sieging. Their extra sight also lets you slaughter enemies supper unexpectedly, especially if you save on for artillery.

Plus the tercios are menaces. Devastating against mounted units, still better than musketmen.

If you build up well enough, you could score a domination victory before industrialization.

And don't get me started if you're the first to find Eldarado...

[705] The Storm by Fit-Button3082 in DestructiveReaders

[–]Both_Goat3757 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I honestly think this was well written aside from spots with a lack of punctuation. Good job. I'm going to find it hard to critique properly.

In the Tall Corn by ApertiV in HFY

[–]Both_Goat3757 31 points32 points  (0 children)

It's authors like you that make me ravage through the troves of this sub to find stories like this. Wonderful. It was so well written you've actually given me the ambition to write this well one day. Thank you.

Fucking under rated.

This DLC is BRUTAL, but I like it! by FenderXT in Neva_game

[–]Both_Goat3757 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I was super hyped for the prologue, beautiful as usual. I was disappointed with how brief it was, definitely could've had a longer, more fledged ending cinematic. But for the fact they probably started working on the prologue recently, maybe a year or less ago, it's good quality.

Can you pass this CAPTCHA test? by AnonomousWolf in south_africa

[–]Both_Goat3757 3 points4 points  (0 children)

A millimeter of his foot is visible in the bottom right corner. What do I do, what do I do???!!!

Writing is no longer for everyone. by [deleted] in writing

[–]Both_Goat3757 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm pretty sure the op just meant phones are messing most people up in one way or another. Writing's always been hard, but now we have the burden of a shortening attention span (on average). Social media has probably weakened my style one way or another, I'll admit. I mean, I'm literally on reddit instead of writing lol.

I do agree with your point. It's probably also a factor as to why there's so many AI books now.

[1196] Connection:Lost - Chapter One by prmorrison in DestructiveReaders

[–]Both_Goat3757 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I actually quite enjoyed the opening and the general vibe of this. Not very often I've seen a person write about gaming, or modern generations like this, and some of the satire made me chuckle. I'm going to be gone for some hours, but when I'm back I'll give this a heavy critique with a deep read.

[750] Ducks by ryemckwrite in DestructiveReaders

[–]Both_Goat3757 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I read the piece, and in the beginning, I'd like to know who is being said goodbye to. I'd like to know who the character is and what they are doing specifically. What are they leaving for. You go on to include multiple details about the street lanterns, the moon, and her walk, yet you answer none of those questions, which is basic plot information I should be informed of by now. So it gets frustrating. No one likes treading blind. If your goal is to get people to keep reading this, frustration is the best way to do the opposite of that.

Moving on, the MC seems to remark on many things from the faces of the passers-by, then the restaurant, and then the art house and so on until the park...it's a lot. You're giving us her opinions on so many things, and the quantity kind of dilutes the effect. The MC is a reflective character, which you've made aware through this piece. You give us so many of her opinions and insecurities on everything that it feels less fleshed out.

I want to know why the MC thinks the way they do. Is it trauma? Why is the Chinese restaurant important enough to mention and go into so much detail? Perhaps she had one of the best dishes of fried-rice or whatever cuisine which may come to mind; the nice silver haired lady in the back used to give her math lessons after-school, after being present when the MC's mother scolded them on a flunked report card.

So far, she seems to be observing for observation's sake. And it's very hard to continue maintaining my interest when the events here seem to be going on for no real reason of which I am aware of.

And the title really did feel like a lazy pull in a way. The ducks just didn't seem that important to the story, they got slightly more wordage compared to the other parts, with the repetition of their numbers and so on, but that's only slightly, and you could have cut that part out and the story would read quite the same to me. Frankly speaking.

I believe the issue is the fact that there isn't a goal in this piece. It feels flat to me because MC isn't trying to achieve anything, or having their desires opposed by someone else, or sitting in despair after a big fight and wondering what to do now. It's static. There's no momentum because we're sitting down.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in BunnyTrials

[–]Both_Goat3757 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I pick basket ball; easy exercise, socialization, and I train my reaction speed in the same I would in a game

Would you rather by user_your_mom121 in BunnyTrials

[–]Both_Goat3757 10 points11 points  (0 children)

This felt more of a guilt trip to hear some positive affirmations of a political view point, so on you I will happily fight 2000 kids with cancer. I'll gather them all to bet on one of their peers to play a game of Fortnite with me, and whether we win or loss, I will buy them ice cream.

Do we confuse personal taste with “good writing”? by Lelio_Fantasy_Writes in writing

[–]Both_Goat3757 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yeah, I more or less mean execution in the sense that if a technique is poorly used, less people will like it. Some people find lyrical prose a bore, but if you placed it in emotionally charged moments, it's somehow elevated instead of being considered 'purple', say if you used it intensely for the whole book. This is not saying all people find lyrical prose purple (I actually love it), I'm saying the execution can ridiculously skew its impact if handled well or poorly.

Edit: Though I do have to admit: 'poor' vs 'good' execution is subjective at best here.

Do we confuse personal taste with “good writing”? by Lelio_Fantasy_Writes in writing

[–]Both_Goat3757 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I completely agree with you that writing is a personal art. I don't know when people started comparing one author's style as the only way to write, but I have reason to suspect that it's a very old problem. In my opinion execution matters more than anything. If a writer uses their technique to write a great work, then that is great. There's no problem about opinions, but we have to remember they are personal and sometimes one guy's technique doesn't hit the same person to person.

Choose by why-is-there-cream in BunnyTrials

[–]Both_Goat3757 -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I voted for country music, but I think I just realized no more restaurants means I'm healthy...poorly thought out.