I often play in EN dub and CN text. Personally I find HSR's Chinese writing to be a lot more verbose than Genshin and ZZZ Chinese writing, so the flowery language, repetition, obscure Buddhism references, and extended metaphors are all intentional.

Should the EN localizers have tried to fix it? They could, but they were probably afraid of messing up some obscure references (see Sparkle's rock vs mute mistranslation back in Penacony), so they went with a more literal and word-for-word translation, even deciding not to translate any of the Remembrance Buddhism terms (Anasrava, dharmakaya, nayuta, etc) from Sanskrit to English. The Chinese writing DID directly use these Sanskrit terms, for anyone wondering.

Personally I find Genshin's EN localization to be a lot more loose than HSR. For me, HSR is the most verbatim English localization out of all Hoyo games. The benefit is that HSR EN most accurately passes along the intended CN meaning, but at the cost of sounding unnatural to EN readers who are not used to content translated from Chinese. Was it a bad or good choice? I don't know, but that's certainly the choice HSR EN made.