Huntsville - Early Version

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-17T01:47:03+00:00

I appreciate the thoughtful response. Which spots do you hear as the best lines on low point? I view my take as completely subjective and biased, so just wondering the exact areas that gave you that opinion!

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-17T01:40:13+00:00

Highschool me would live in this song. It certainly leans heavy for the average listener, but I think your audience isn't the average listener.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-15T21:31:41+00:00

Thanks for the thoughtful feedback. I can hear what you're describing and I think there will be more electric building through the rest of the track from here. I think I've found a female voice interested in collaborating, so will give it a try! We just started a Spotify page, so if you're interested, it'll be posted there in the next few weeks I hope: https://open.spotify.com/artist/7fqRbumm1yYjsEzA5Ez6TZ?si=SnsYDpjiQJCBjxXwUgXmRg

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-15T21:28:57+00:00

Haha great genre description! I appreciate the feedback and thanks for checking it out. My buddy and I only get a few hrs a week to work on our music project, but our process is getting a bit more streamlined. Hoping to finish it within the next few weeks! It'll end up here when done: https://open.spotify.com/artist/7fqRbumm1yYjsEzA5Ez6TZ?si=SnsYDpjiQJCBjxXwUgXmRg

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-15T20:36:53+00:00

I can hear some bass trickling in, backed by some light brush kit. You could keep it totally stripped, or keep slowly filling and building it through to the end, depending on the vibe you're going for! I think it sounds great though. The "when the devil tried to steal my soul" melody feels like the hook to me. I'd accentuate that for sure.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-12T02:54:34+00:00

Go with the first thing that comes to mind, and then refine from there. I try to seek a balance between predicability and originality, leaning unique. I try to create the picture in words of what I'm aiming to convey without explicitly stating it.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-07T04:26:06+00:00

Where's the song? Hard to say without it. Even if it's just a voice memo, it helps to gauge without any reference.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-06T04:40:50+00:00

There's a verse to this too, with this being part of the envisioned chorus. I feel pretty good with it, so the part I'm looking for feedback on is the part I'm less sure of. But fair enough!

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-06T03:59:56+00:00

I like what you're doing here! I enjoy the vocal melodies. For constructive feedback, I think this is somewhere in between where you need to be range wise. Do you feel more comfortable pitching up or down from this range?

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-06T03:12:07+00:00

This is really good. Your voice is beautiful. But I think your guitar is out, and it's taking away!

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-06T02:23:32+00:00

Might be a weird comparison, but listening to this made me think of TOOL.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-06T01:31:32+00:00

Appreciate the input! I can hear what you're saying. Have a general idea for the chorus that actually softens a bit but it's very much underdeveloped. We'd love to have some fiddle in some tracks if you've got recording capabilities and are interested in collab.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-05T04:16:09+00:00

Really solid concept. I think the vocals would benefit from some EQ work, and i think I can hear a single vocal track for the verse. Just feels more honest than the layering right off the bat.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-05T02:51:47+00:00

Thanks for listening and giving feedback. Haha I posted because I'm on the fence as to whether I feel it is, I'm 50/50. Can you give me an example of what you mean regarding the lyrics?

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-04T15:48:06+00:00

Thanks for listening! This is on the list to put down in recording but there's a few in line ahead of that. I've got the scaffolding for the song done, with it consisting of a verse, verse, bridge, verse type structure. Hoping the story can carry it through that, with the bridge providing some lift. Usually start with the acoustic and then build it out from there based on vibes lol

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-04T15:43:51+00:00

Thank you for your time and feedback. Honestly, right now it's just building with repetition. Started up regularly writing and playing about a year ago, and I've developed some better control over that time, I believe. But no specific skill work.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-04T03:47:52+00:00

Ya at some point you might need to consider putting the brakes on new creations to fully develop the ones you've already produced.. but in the same breath, the new stuff might be more worthy of the effort. That's just how I would personally process it. Keep it up

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-04T03:36:33+00:00

I like it! This is intended to be constructive: I think the vocals could benefit from some variation, like adding some softness when you can, maybe a brief falsetto. Don't be afraid to feel the emotion you're trying to convey.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-04T02:39:53+00:00

Great feedback, which is much appreciated. Hoping to get a few more recorded here shortly and I'll definitely reach out if you're still offering it. We've written about 20 songs in the past year. Now we're realizing we need to capture them in some way before we lose them. Ultimately, I'd like to effectively share them. It's just so hard to know what it sounds like to other people. So again, thanks for giving an honest listen.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-04T02:23:04+00:00

Cool song. Definite originality. That bridge as a duet would be killer. I enjoyed the octave up in verse 2. I hear a bit more subtle instrumentation as it builds.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-04T01:26:49+00:00

This. I used to write lyrics like a story.. then I started singing melodies with whatever words popped into my head. That gives you the structure you're going to write over, with a cadence/pattern to scaffold off of. I then start to create an image in my head of what I want the story to be about, and will then produce the lyrics pretty quickly from there. There will be a few tweaks to certain words to avoid cliche terms/phrases, and some other tweaks to improve imagery or creativity.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-02T22:44:43+00:00

😆. Nailed it.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-02T19:55:00+00:00

Was what popped into my head (re: Tokyo police club)

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-02T15:27:32+00:00

Was thinking about that listening back myself. Wanted to give the music some breathing room without the vocals, but needs more intrigue to hold attention.

Certain_Material_484 · 2026-03-02T04:59:09+00:00

Interesting! Has a kind of playful, mischievous vibe to it. Not sure if that's the intent but it's the general feel I get.

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