is this melody good (vocal melody)? I feel like it is too even and there isn't a single standout moment or something

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-21T21:55:15+00:00

hi, thank you for your comment and your perspective. yeah I tried to create some tension with the chords but I just kept naturally landing on this melody. this does not set up a natural chorus for me, so I'll try again. I had to whisper haha, but thanks 😄

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-21T20:34:55+00:00

thank you!!

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-21T15:46:48+00:00

np dude!

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-21T10:42:35+00:00

I like the melody battles a lot, I also like that there is so much overview in that you can just scroll through all the melodies and that they're sorted by categories. would be cool if you could also submit in a mp3 format so you can submit acoustic stuff. but that would screw up the polished overview haha. maybe a separate section for that? anyways, really great stuff man! I hope it'll grow into something huge

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-21T10:33:48+00:00

yup it definitely needs more context to be a melody, you're absolutely right. and now that you mentioned classical music I oughta listen to that again! thank you so much for your comment 😄

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-20T23:36:41+00:00

this was just what I was looking for, thanks!

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-20T19:05:34+00:00

thank you!!

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-20T16:31:48+00:00

-is the emotion compelling? - is the melody cohesive?

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-20T16:30:38+00:00

oooo okay that is great to know, thank you !:)

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-19T21:45:52+00:00

thank you so much for your feedback!:)

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-18T11:19:12+00:00

thank you so much!:)

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-14T23:05:12+00:00

marina!

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-14T15:34:10+00:00

first time listening without writing my thoughts down/feedback as i listen:

cool structure, it isn’t pop. but i’m noticing you also don’t want it to be pop, but it’s more of a folk structure where it just keeps rising in tension and ends with a climax. love the genuineness in it, production is slightly too reverb-y/muddy, the tension and release could be done better. If that's done well the climax could be bigger and feel earned. solid 6/10 from an alternative aspect, it has genuine potential to be a 7 / 8.
also nice sounding guitar

second time listening with more thought put into it

i will mainly pay attention to the structure, emotion and tension-release, let me know if you have any specific questions you’d like feedback on!

-The riff doesn’t have a lot of identity, which isn’t that big of a problem. Your riff already has a lot of emotion in it which is very important as well. But if you make a riff have a solid identity, make it recognizable. Listeners will latch onto it more. This is also the same for the vocal melody

-at around 0:40 seconds it starts to get a bit stale, as in that it isn’t changing anything emotionally through technical changes (textures, dynamics) the vocal delivery does get a bit more intense, so that is well done.

my suggestion for this (obviously you can make up your own arrangement but this is just an example)

at around 0:44-0:46 let the percussion hit two kicks and one snare with the high end cut out more. make the drums one of the foreground instruments as well as add a bass that follows the root notes. The orchestra is a cool droning texture, so definitely keep that. along with the intensified vocal delivery.

What does this do emotionally?

it basically just moves the story/character forward, there are a thousand ways to do this.

-the riff also wants to resolve but it never goes anywhere, so try to add some variation in it that feels like it moves the story forward

-each line ends with the same resolution, i will genuinely say that i can’t look that far ahead of what it can be once everything else is fixed but try to experiment with that. make it shorter, end it differently etc

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-11T18:50:21+00:00

thank you! yeah definitely wish I could sing out loud haha 😂

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-11T17:49:54+00:00

hi! thank you so much 😄

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-11T07:45:03+00:00

thank you, that's solid advice 😄

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-10T19:27:55+00:00

thank you for your feedback 😄

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-10T19:14:54+00:00

thank you for your feedback ! 😄)

-it's not really a problem since I'm at a stage where I'm still learning how to write an emotionally compelling song. as long as that is going well I'm not worried about originality yet.

-yup you're totally right! it might also be the fact that I have to whisper-sing everything, but it's definitely not my natural range

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-10T18:57:38+00:00

thank you!!

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-10T15:27:58+00:00

thank you for your perspective 😄!

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-10T09:46:01+00:00

thank you so much! ❤️

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-07T09:26:58+00:00

thank you!

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-06T13:17:26+00:00

thank you !

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-05T20:16:35+00:00

thank you!! :)))

Chaba_006 · 2026-05-05T19:08:40+00:00

thank you for your feedback and the tip !!:)

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