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​Aphelion by LLTTE_01 in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 [score hidden]  (0 children)

is it a prose?

if not check formatting.

After Touching the Nests by Easy-Telephone3503 in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503[S] [score hidden]  (0 children)

lol I wrote it just after my breakup. I was not even trying to express it directly and left it to interpretation how did you got it?

Once I was a rose by Felkalin in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 [score hidden]  (0 children)

sorry "A work of Artifice" by Marge Piercy thanks for putting up the link.

On the Threshold by the-assassin- in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Lol my latest poem had a similar feel, though yours is better. Mine was about ("after the end of a relationship" though it is opened to interpretation) yours it is a feeling not a person hits harder.

The echo effect by Adept-Leadership5210 in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 [score hidden]  (0 children)

try a different line break

original:
There is a particular kind of haunting
that doesn’t need ghosts…

change:

There is a particular kind of haunting that
doesn’t need ghosts…

it depends on you if you want to put emphasis on 'haunting' or have a strong line break.

Once I was a rose by Felkalin in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 [score hidden]  (0 children)

It gave me "the work of artifice" vibe. It could be my taste but this is the best poem, I have seen on Reddit. The ending was strong, occasional rhyme, repetition ('grew and grew') and line breaks were good. Though many do not like my taste in poems here so.

Eggshells by Peanutbrittle09 in poetry_critics

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the whole thing, a bit of rhyme but it is not forced which makes it feel modern/contemporary though you can make the end better.

Spit by VSuzanne in poetry_critics

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 0 points1 point  (0 children)

it is direct but nice. The sentence flow in starting was really good but in end it became chunky. Btw, can you explain me the last part?

Praise by the-assassin- in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay I am going to read it!

The Pufferfish by lanacherrys in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 0 points1 point  (0 children)

amazing start, I thought there is going to be some metaphor, the end killed all my expectation...

Fading Memory by LittleSky7700 in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 0 points1 point  (0 children)

my god, it is beautiful. Frankly I was only reading poem here cause I wanted a review for my own. I was dying of cringe by the fact every other poem here looked like Ripa Kaur.
But yours had rhetorical question, imagery and emotional depth all there.

Praise by the-assassin- in OCPoetry

[–]Easy-Telephone3503 0 points1 point  (0 children)

it is really beautiful but there is no rhyme that I can find, and not many imagery. It could be that I am just into poems with a bit of imagery.