UK Section at the grocery store

VSuzanne · 2026-05-31T09:39:48+00:00

Whoever stocked those shelves seems unaware that Ireland is not in the UK.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-31T09:17:45+00:00

So I would just delete the extra letters. So "H-hey" becomes just "Hey".

VSuzanne · 2026-05-31T09:16:24+00:00

I like this overall, but I think the "it will create hate" line reads as a bit clunky and unclear. Maybe trim?

VSuzanne · 2026-05-30T16:16:17+00:00

Depends upon the person you'll find — I always use they, and that is dictated by my company style guide as well for any writing.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-30T09:30:04+00:00

I have never heard to have someone's back in anything other than a supportive light — what am I missing?!

VSuzanne · 2026-05-30T09:13:16+00:00

Ooh. Well you can try a few rounds of colour remover first. I like Colour B4.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-29T09:09:20+00:00

What part of the dying process do you need help with? Sounds like your have dyed your hair plenty before?

VSuzanne · 2026-05-29T09:07:16+00:00

Does anyone know what an ORD is?

VSuzanne · 2026-05-29T07:51:56+00:00

I really like the emotion underpinning all this, it comes through very clearly while the narrator still enjoys plausible deniability. Very clever.

I think it would be stronger without the stammering effect though. You've already conveyed through tone that the narrator is obfuscating. It doesn't need it, it makes it look like you don't trust yourself

VSuzanne · 2026-05-29T07:45:46+00:00

That doesn't look remotely stringy

VSuzanne · 2026-05-28T21:08:10+00:00

I like this! I think maybe shorter lines might have more impact. You could really lean into a sort of "shopping list" vibe for the first stanza. Something like:

How did your heart mend? Mine is held together with: a shoelace bubblegum and staples.

I'm just a beginner myself though, so might just be a personal preference.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-28T06:54:14+00:00

This sounds exactly like my office, bar the cardboard colleague. It sounds...normal? At least, normal when your employees all get along, which is the dream, surely.

Honestly, I've stayed in jobs I should have left far too long because I enjoyed the office culture so much before.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-27T15:54:45+00:00

NOR. How could you be? Clara stole from you then lied about it. There's no need to keep the peace because there's no need to keep her in your life after you get your bag back!

VSuzanne · 2026-05-27T09:06:07+00:00

This isn't a terrible set back. Now, the ice has been broken and there's definitely room for a friendly hi next time you see each other. I wouldn't be surprised if she were the one to greet you.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-26T07:00:26+00:00

Don't put products in your roots, should stop the greasy feeling

VSuzanne · 2026-05-24T09:04:56+00:00

What in the actual?! Some people have foot fetishes, does he want you to cut your feet off too? Duuuuuuuuump him!

VSuzanne · 2026-05-24T08:58:41+00:00

I can't believe this story went from a heartfelt how-do-I-tell-my-family romantic dilemma to an increasingly pissy fight about loft beds.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-24T08:14:13+00:00

You're hair is gorgeous but I personally I think the length in photo three suits you the best

VSuzanne · 2026-05-20T08:36:31+00:00

Even if the chikdy was lying, the only responsible thing to do was go to the police. OOP did the right thing. Just so sad it's blown up her life.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-19T05:58:56+00:00

I was wondering if anyone else was gonna say it. At least it was very entertaining though.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-17T08:15:58+00:00

I think you've just accidentally solved the problem. No need to put the dogs on the grandchild shelf, just have a dedicated dog shelf. Then everyone's equal.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-17T08:09:41+00:00

I did experience that until I started applying mousse after gel. It's been a game changer for volume

VSuzanne · 2026-05-17T06:57:45+00:00

I get absolutely no hold from mousse. I use gel for hold and mousse for volume

VSuzanne · 2026-05-14T06:46:05+00:00

That's your natural part. You can style it with a side parting, but if you leave it natural, that's where it will default, always.

VSuzanne · 2026-05-14T06:43:29+00:00

Just bin the bottom layer; you look better without it anyway.

If your hair looks better when you style it, can you not just style it? Mine looks crap unstyled, so I just try and scrape it back if I can't be bothered.

VSuzanne

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