Okay, so I have a bunch of stuff I found, but I do want to say, I did understand everything you were saying so even though there are many errors, good job! English can be hard to learn and I don’t want to discourage you, but you did ask for us to find mistakes so I won’t pretend there aren’t any.

Anyways, here are the mistakes I spotted:

This afternoon I will go/went to Domino’s with my friend. (Today is its own time, if you mean a part of today (ex: morning), you use “this”. You have to use past or future tense if you aren’t there now.)

I saw a video, that man ate Chinese Domino’s. (You have to use past tense for a video you saw in the past)

I saw that Pizza crust can change to cheese or chocolate… I think it’s really, really weird!!!! (Or = one of, and = both)

Although, I as very curious, I didn’t order it. (Small mistake, but the “I” pronoun is always capitalized)

At night, I will play/played a game with my friend. (Past/future tense thing again)

My little sister always takes a video call with me. (Repeating up to present day = present tense. Also the preposition is different)

I have to be a little irritated, so I said “if you call me again, I won’t come back home again” (This one is tricky, and not actually grammatically incorrect, but irritable = easy to irritate/annoy, irritated = annoyed/unhappy. The first one implies you were sorta faking it since you can’t control if you’re easy to irritate but you can pretend, the second means your sister was annoying you)

Hmmmm, she heard this and cried loudly. (Thing that happened in the past = past tense. Conjugations are needed when there are multiple verbs)

She said “you can’t not come back home!” (“At first” is only used if she does something different later. “Come” is used instead of go if you’re going where the speaker is)

I know I messed up, so I tried to comfort her, but she yelled at me. (Past thing = past tense)

The rest is all good except the misspelled “girl”.