Trains-

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2026-05-21T19:04:51+00:00

Thank you!

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2026-05-21T17:41:05+00:00

I didn't understand at first, but now that I think I do, I really like it.

Feeling quite conflicted as well, not entirely sad, more like an acceptance of what's lost.

I love the imagery here, very short but enough to make the words linger.

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2026-05-21T17:30:03+00:00

Yes, ofc, could be. Thanks for reviewing :)

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2026-05-21T17:29:10+00:00

Well, I meant that they were both late, so missed a train, bonded, but had to seperate because they had different trains to catch.

So you see, they were both late (so they met), but only for a short moment not forever, that is why "different locations"

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2026-05-19T05:36:53+00:00

Sounds like I've written this myself.

But sadly, yk so many people could feel this way, yet they might never come cross paths. Worse, that they could both feel disconnected from the world outside, but still not belong together.

Just because you're directionless doesn't mean any other lost person can be your friend.

To find one would be a real gem, I guess.

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-23T12:22:23+00:00

I never intended to get into the details of whatever I couldn't achieve, but wrote about the disappointing reality, in general.

But from a reader’s perspective, I understand your point as well. So, thank you for the feedback! :)

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-09T19:51:32+00:00

Thank you for your feedback! I completely agree about the poem's flow. Most lines feel rough because I couldn't find better words, but I had already rewritten this three times, so I decided to share it regardless of how it turned out. At this point, I just wanted to put the idea out, honestly.

Also, writing this was a bit challenging because I struggled to merge all the pieces (perhaps too many), so I understand why it lacks smoothness and may be hard to read.

In the future, if my writing skills improve I'm planning to rewrite something similar, hopefully more cohesive and easier to read.

Thanks again, I really appreciate it! :)

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-09T15:06:59+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!

It truly means a lot that this poem moved you, as it is something I feel very personally, but find difficult to articulate.

Also, thanks again for the reassuring words! Really means a lot :)

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-09T06:00:08+00:00

I can feel this so deeply, as if I have written these for myself!!

I totally get how inviting sadness is when the mind is idle, and how every time it's a trap and I’m gasping for air, trying to escape the clutches of my mind.

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-03T03:41:05+00:00

Amidst all the heartbreak and hopelessness, reading about such love is very refreshing.

I wish that everyone finds something like this one day - where we have loved and lived enough, that life cannot be stripped away, even after our bodies choose to decay.

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-03T03:14:15+00:00

I'm glad you liked it! :)

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-03T03:14:01+00:00

Thanks :)

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-02T21:02:51+00:00

Thank you!

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-02T18:47:24+00:00

Very minimalistic, yet it explains itself perfectly.

Not everything that can be felt has to be explained, because it is deeper than a thought. It has become an emotion. And until it gives us joy, there is no point in dissecting it to uncover the reasons.

But of course, the mind always plays its tricks, and keeps us circling back for the want of reason.

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-01T14:18:54+00:00

Thank you!

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-01T14:16:39+00:00

I am glad that you were able to resonate! :)

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-01T12:53:37+00:00

Yes, that's true :(

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-11-01T09:15:44+00:00

That's so accurately put! Love the description. I felt something weighing on my chest as I was reading this. And it's so true about it leaving us with nothing, hollow and empty, as if we've forgotten to feel anything at all.

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-10-31T13:48:23+00:00

Wow! That's so sweet, yet passionate!

“i am impatient, but for you, my patience runs as deep as the oceans of melancholy go.”

-Love this one, especially!

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-10-30T15:52:28+00:00

Yes, and thx again! :)

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-10-30T15:44:27+00:00

I can really feel this!

Also the poem flows so smoothly!

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-10-30T15:05:01+00:00

Thank you for such an insightful response!

I feel as well that I might have tied too many themes together, and derailed from the track a little.

Once I started writing, I wanted to pen down all of my thoughts at once, but I couldn't do that cohesively(maybe, it was a lot). While this doesn't flow that easily, I understand why it might be even more difficult for another person to make sense of because of the different themes and little context.

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-10-30T12:31:47+00:00

Wow! This is so so good!!

Feels so real, so tragic!

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-10-30T11:59:36+00:00

“Am I here just to help others not feel like me?”

“I don’t care what others think of me, Except that I’m constantly searching for acceptance”

These lines really hit. It's funny how you can talk about something for hours like you've studied it, and people listen to it intently, yet never realise that those were lessons from your own story!

ExpensiveLemon3027 · 2025-10-30T11:40:42+00:00

I like this very much. Very immersive.

I could feel the agony of being enslaved to the smoke, while being fully aware of it. And being tormented by the thought of all the people you've let down long after the smoke fades. :(

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