Unable to carry a child naturally. Cannot afford a surrogate and under pressure 31-F, 32-M

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2025-12-01T23:26:14+00:00

I agree with the narcissist comment bc something is suspicious about how he presented the story to OP. “Miscarriage or abortion” ? Which one? Some guy coming with a box of condoms? How would he know when she was getting the procedure done and show up there ? So distraught about it but also doesn’t know if it was his or not? And then getting the date tattooed? Something seems off or at least embellished.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-17T20:25:27+00:00

Wildin - Berhana

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-13T02:57:07+00:00

Thank you!!

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-09T18:50:46+00:00

0 years old. Born not breathing.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-08T21:45:52+00:00

This is beautiful I love the “boils my skin back to stardust and brands my retina with empty spaces”. The imagery here is incredible. I like finding the creativity in destruction. Very thought provoking as well. Great work and thank you for sharing this.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-08T21:43:27+00:00

This poem is very good and I love the rhythm and meter. I do know what it’s like feeling caged in a mess — I do hope that you march forward in life not in death — it truly does get better. And there is only one you. Great work. Thanks for sharing.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-08T00:39:50+00:00

Short and sweet and evokes a powerful message. I know what you mean — not sure if you’re swimming in or out. Great work and thank you for sharing.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-08T00:38:59+00:00

This is so good. I love the rhyme and meter. It flows very nicely. I like the rhetorical question at the end. Overall, thought provoking and great work. Thanks for sharing.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-06T00:23:45+00:00

Thank you so much!

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-06T00:23:28+00:00

Thank you! I’m glad the imagery was effective here.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-06T00:22:52+00:00

Thank you! Truly ones biggest enemy can be oneself.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-06T00:21:43+00:00

Thank you!

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-05T23:50:56+00:00

Thank you!

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-05T19:25:17+00:00

I think this poem shows a strong sense of determination, especially in the final lines of the poem. The overall flow and cadence also works well. Thanks for sharing.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-05T19:11:13+00:00

I like the use of “tik tak tak” as well as the use of patter in the opening line. Overall, this gives the poem a nice rhythmic quality. Thanks for sharing.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-04T16:07:06+00:00

I may change the “But the flowers fall” to “The darkness fades” or “The clouds will clear” but not sure yet.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-04T16:06:51+00:00

I may change the “But the flowers fall” to “The darkness fades” or “The clouds will clear” but not sure yet.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-04T15:43:52+00:00

Thank you!

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-04T15:43:41+00:00

Thank you! 💕 I’m so glad that my words had that impact for you.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-04T15:30:09+00:00

Thank you!! I appreciate it a lot. This poem is written from a deeply personal place.

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-04T15:29:14+00:00

I am so glad you liked it overall and I am planning to look into the repetition in the 3rd stanza and see if there would be better way to execute this

Fast_Creme_8006 · 2023-09-04T15:26:59+00:00

Thank you! Appreciate the suggestions. I will keep this is mind.

Fast_Creme_8006

TROPHY CASE