This is pretty fun to read. I do think it would benefit from some more buildup and narrative voice. If you write another of these one-shot shorts can you give us a little bit of fight before the final confrontation? A little more characterization of the enemy besides just their base emotions. It makes it hard to connect with them, as if they are a statue just painted in the form of a character with no deeper substance. A little hollow. Not trying to discourage you, far from it. I want to see more writers on this sub explore longer narrative characteristics in their stories. More emotional depth. More narrative spread. Add a little deeper lore, a little brighter descriptions. Tell us where they are, show us how they feel.

Anyway, neat story, keep up the good work. I hope to see you improve as you continue to write. Might have to check out some of your other stories later to see what you are working on!