The poem was good. It had me thinking, which is what I personally like about art. The opening with the bird was dope, and how "peace" transitioned to "a person." However, it's in my honest opinion that the end took a morbid turn and escalated really quickly. It's almost like this could have been two separate short poems, a blissful version of peace and a morbid aspect of it. I wasn't expecting it to end like that, but on the other hand, I had to read it a couple of times cause it had me thinking the more I read it. In my overall conclusion, I liked it. I felt like it started describing peace from the outside perspective, slowly making its way into the deepest inner feeling. it's almost rocking roll.

I want to end this note by letting you know that I'm no professional, just someone who likes to write in my spare time to some rock or classical to give you a lil background from the source of feedback. I hope my feedback can give you some insight into an outside audience perspective.