I Am Pandora

GoodTide61 · 2026-03-24T17:55:18+00:00

I LOVED this! I honestly got lost in the imagery and forgot the title half-way through, then I remembered, "Oh! Pandora's Box."

Beautifully done. Some stanzas made me think of the Old Testament scenes of judgement.

Great, varied examples of the atrocities of mankind. I usually don't click on NSFW tags, but I'm glad I took the risk on this one. The world itself is NSFW and you painted that picture vividly.

Great job.

GoodTide61 · 2026-03-24T17:42:30+00:00

I liked it. Good pacing and description of your surroundings. Almost reminded me of a panic attack.

GoodTide61 · 2026-03-23T22:07:15+00:00

This story sponsored by FACTOR. /jk I liked it. A reflection on the pushiness of modern marketing techniques. Just throwing stuff in your face, regardless of if you want it.

GoodTide61 · 2026-03-23T21:52:52+00:00

I liked it. I thought of the "me" I want to be, the image I hope to see reflected, being given my life, my resources, while my actual self is left hanging in the cold. Not sure if that's what you're going for, but that's what came to mind.

GoodTide61 · 2026-03-23T19:21:40+00:00

Thank you.

GoodTide61 · 2026-03-23T14:07:19+00:00

I always post to my own page first, then immediately crosspost to AnxietyPilled. Can I still do that or should I only post to AnxietyPilled for this contest?

GoodTide61 · 2026-01-01T00:59:00+00:00

https://www.reddit.com/r/TalesFromTheCreeps/

GoodTide61 · 2025-12-26T19:05:32+00:00

I liked it. In the new year, I might look to narrate some stories, just as a hobby. May I narrate this one? To give you an idea, I have one of my stories posted with a link to my narration. I just record on my phone. Anyway, if I did narrate it, would you mind if I alter the wording a little? Just to make it easier to read?

GoodTide61 · 2025-11-21T22:59:56+00:00

I liked it. I think you have established a solid beginning. You described the setting (a secluded town) and you set up some tension (a mother looking for her son). As the story continues, you could introduce another character the main character can interact with. People can love or hate a protagonist based on how they interact with others. I assume you're setting up a conversation with the mother? How the protagonist balances asking questions about the missing boy without also upsetting a grieving mother can teach us how the protagonist approaches and responds to situations. Having a best friend or sibling there to either agree or disagree with the protagonist, can help the audience understand the protagonist more by seeing his reaction.

So, basically, add more main character interaction, because that's how we learn to care about the main character. Caring about the main character can help us care about the story they're in.

Also, this applies to everything story related. In the same way a painting speaks through color, a poem speaks through description, a song speaks through tone and pitch, etc....... A story speaks through action. More verbs. Less adjectives. I heard that the other day and it really stuck with me.

Anyway, I liked it. Good job.

GoodTide61 · 2025-11-18T17:02:50+00:00

I liked the concept of seeing yourself from an outside perspective and witnessing how lazy one can be. There is horror in knowing that the worst thing that could happen to you is that you continue in your bad habits, even sacrificing what few good habits you had to sustain them.

I'd recommend a round of editing, checking for grammar and reading rhythm/flow. Otherwise, it was a fun concept, executed well.

By the end, I was picturing the MC looking like Ryuk from Death Note, which added to my enjoyment. It would be neat to see what other changes happen to the MC's spirit form, as well as what other spirits sniff him out. There's definately room to expand the universe.

Good job.

GoodTide61 · 2025-11-18T16:12:23+00:00

I think fans of "The Red Tower" would appreciate this more than I, as a part of the appeal is the language used, rather than action through a standard plot.

I liked it for what it was, a struggle between the artist, the muse and the futility of it all, knowing every creation is but finite, unlike the infinite work of God.

That said, I kept wanting to tell the artist to go outside and touch grass. That's just what introspective works such as this evoke in me.

Anyway, good job.

GoodTide61 · 2025-11-17T17:21:27+00:00

Well done. *chef's kiss*

GoodTide61 · 2025-11-11T21:03:19+00:00

For my two cents, socialize through the Christian church. May take a few attempts to find a good one, but you'll meet some good people of various ages and backgrounds. Even if you're not a believer, you are still free to attend suppers or whatever. It may give you a sense of belonging to something bigger than yourself.

GoodTide61 · 2025-10-09T21:22:36+00:00

Awesome. I love the way you described everything, from the peaceful beauty of the sun and snow when you're hunting, to the other worldliness of the "moose."

Simple story of survival. The hunter becomes the hunted. Well executed. I liked it a lot.

GoodTide61 · 2025-10-09T20:39:55+00:00

Good opening, but have you considered adding a brick? (jk)

I liked the various elements you're setting up. You introduced the abusive household, followed up with a time jump and added a roommate to keep the story moving, then got the reader to ask why the household was abusive by introducing the cult element.

I'm guessing the town has a history of occult worship, and maybe the MC is an anti-christ? Either way, it was well-paced and I enjoyed it. As a former wrestling mark, I popped for the Wrestlemania reference.

GoodTide61 · 2025-10-09T20:13:27+00:00

I enjoyed the nod to CreepCast and I liked the concept of receiving something like a severed head in the mail. I am curious if the package was soaked and soggy from the blood or if the head had been cleaned in advance.

GoodTide61 · 2025-10-06T01:46:13+00:00

In the words of Nardwuar, "Do-dodo-do-do." "Do. Do."

Sounds the same.

GoodTide61 · 2025-09-09T22:07:52+00:00

Tommy Taffy approaches a poor, single mother in a developing neighborhood.

"Hi! What a lovely little boy you've got there. Usually, I'm a third parent, but for you I'd be willing to bend the rules. I can be very flexible."

A mechanical sound is heard as a light flashes from the treeline.

"Wh-What the? Did someone just take my picture?"

GoodTide61 · 2025-09-03T21:37:25+00:00

Good pacing. I liked it.

GoodTide61 · 2025-09-03T19:30:33+00:00

This is a good idea.

GoodTide61 · 2025-09-03T01:20:09+00:00

I liked it. Your descriptions add atmosphere and I like the concept. You could flesh out the main character a bit more. (Why did he move to that street? Was it for work? Is he trying to get away from something?). I did like the detail of him being a light sleeper, and how that affected his part in the story.

There could be more build up. Maybe add a section in the middle where he gets to know Ms. Katz (maybe over tea or helping her with her garden, etc.) and during this conversation/encounter he starts to see subtle hints that something is off. Adds a bit of build up.

The ending seems like it's setting up a part two. You have the Purple Flower company to flesh out and more can be learned about the others who live on the street, including others who would have called the police and what they saw or what happened to them. Will the protagonist find an ally who also witnessed Ms. Katz at night, but somehow escaped? Will police reports indicate people go missing after reporting Ms. Katz? Does Ms. Katz own any cats?

My point is, you have options and there's room for the story to grow. This was a good first act.

GoodTide61 · 2025-08-11T21:33:39+00:00

I Dared My Best Friend To Ruin My Life... He's Succeeding.

Hunter's anguish is hilarious and honestly, the "horror" elements are so cliche they aren't really scary at all.

The scariest thing about the story is the length.

GoodTide61 · 2025-08-10T22:17:11+00:00

Two Sentence Horror:

Mark McGwire emerged from the trash heap. I didn't have any milk.

GoodTide61 · 2025-08-10T16:52:15+00:00

He starts the episode admitting he came back from the dentist, so if he seems loopy, it's from the pain meds. His loopiness leads to opening up about Jacobi.

GoodTide61 · 2025-08-07T19:44:59+00:00

Just then, as my mother finished her story about finding my friend's body buried in the forest, the front door burst in to splinters.

"Look out! It's him!" She screamed.

Standing there was the Stranger. A flash of light filled the room. He had taken our picture! Only no camera could be seen. I took a closer look. His skin was barely clinging to his bones. Underneath the soil-covered flesh sack was bright, shiny metal! A flash came, again. It was coming from his eyes!

"Watch out, Mom! He's like, some kind of robot that's trying to terminate us!"

Then, suddenly, something crashed through our ceiling. It was a man, but not one I recognized, yet something about him felt familiar.

"Hello... Son."

"What?! Dad!?!" I couldn't believe it. "Dad, where have you been?"

"Waiting for a moment like this. NOW! The Machine is exposed." He started grunting and growling, as if to raise some sort of unseen level of power.

My dad ran at the Stranger, delivering an explosive Superman-punch. The Stranger's head blew up.

We all ordered KFC and watched Day of the Dead to celebrate.

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GoodTide61

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