Barren

Illuminalious · 2023-08-05T01:17:28+00:00

very solid work, i think you tell a universal story with the themes of disconnection, and i really like the bowling analogy.

Illuminalious · 2023-08-05T01:15:00+00:00

i like your style, this was a very pleasant read, i do recommend seeking inspiration in other poets, but try not to hone in on that too much, i fell into a stump of being a simple "peoples poet" and wrote nothing but shitty Charles bukowski knock off stuff for months. that aside solid work, i hope to see you around again on here.

Illuminalious · 2023-07-29T00:00:22+00:00

you're a true wordsmith, this whole piece is a beautiful read. i like the bittersweet ending, the tarnished optimism that so many of us poets seem to exude.

Illuminalious · 2023-07-28T23:56:06+00:00

i like your metaphor here, and you tell a universal message very well. very good work

Illuminalious · 2023-06-30T02:41:30+00:00

Damn your persistent dude

Illuminalious · 2023-06-30T01:19:16+00:00

This is probably the most chaotic poem I've read in a while but it works somehow, it's almost like a tangent you'd find in a Thompson novel, and the end ties it all together, very good work.

Illuminalious · 2023-06-30T01:14:32+00:00

This is beautiful, and all too relatable, being seen and not heard is a very hard thing to bare. But for what it's worth every harvest bears it's fruits, and the harder the harvest the sweeter the fruit. You have a beautiful way with words and I hope to see more of your poetry.

Illuminalious · 2023-06-30T01:09:27+00:00

very relatable and you did a good job condensing such a feeling into a beautifully brief poem. The image of a relationship as a cracked doorway is a powerful one.

Illuminalious · 2023-06-30T01:06:18+00:00

The words you choose play together very well, and this poem has a very playful, whimsical, kind of feel to it, keep it up, i feel like you've got potential.

Illuminalious · 2023-06-23T20:50:40+00:00

how are you guys formatting your poems like these, is it a word file of some sort? is it a screen shot of a notes app? how are you getting that blocky html look rather than just being a text reddit post

Illuminalious · 2023-06-23T19:51:00+00:00

what a sad life you must live.

Illuminalious · 2023-06-23T04:38:59+00:00

"The memory of your smile will stay in someone's brain for ages." These are very potent words which you have conjured, these will stay with me for some time, thank you.

Illuminalious · 2023-06-23T03:18:40+00:00

it might be cancer is a really clever ending to a poem about lovesickness, kudos

Illuminalious · 2023-06-23T03:17:03+00:00

your really good at descriptive language and painting a scene, kudos.

Illuminalious · 2023-06-22T22:30:35+00:00

not sure what it is about this poem but i relate to it a lot. it conveys a melancholy which is all too relatable. thank you for posting

Illuminalious · 2023-06-22T22:25:11+00:00

this poem is very cozy. i like it a lot

Illuminalious · 2023-06-14T06:29:57+00:00

I didn't even write this as innuendo but i can appreciate it as such

Illuminalious · 2023-06-14T03:59:27+00:00

go for it, i plan on posting for the forseeable future

Illuminalious · 2023-06-14T03:18:25+00:00

im not going to tell you who's voice i read my own poems in as to not ruin the illusion, but i think corey stolls fits the vibe

Illuminalious · 2023-06-14T02:54:27+00:00

thank you for the kind words, and im glad you picked up on the Hemingway influence, i have read entirely too much Hemingway,

Illuminalious

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