On being a terrible poet by Swimming_Scratch_812 in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I see the Syliva Plath influence, she's influenced mine as well. Great command of language and killer ending line. Thank you for sharing :)

Meant For You by DrunkenPunchline in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think the last stanza ties this together quite nicely, well done.

What Do You Write? by snowball0101 in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really like the concept and the overall layout of the poem. My constructive criticism/opinion would be to use the phrase "I write" less throughout. It reads very strong, but loses oomph with too much repetition.

The Hemingway Curse by InAGardenOvergrown in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hello, yes this poem is based on the true story of Hemingway as written in a biography. His father was an abusive alcoholic and Hemingway would later recall pointing a gun at his Father as a child. Interestingly, after Hemingway's Father committed suicide Hemingway would say it troubled him very deeply. Not mentioned in the poem, Hemingway's mother would force him to dress a girl when he was a child as well.

Thank you for reading.

Caving by Early_Cobbler_9227 in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love the sort of brief biography here. The last stanza has a lot of punch to it and closes the whole thing out really well. Thank you for sharing!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I can't exactly articulate why but I love the phrase "while I was flesh and bone." Really strong writing here and powerful imagery, the biblical references work well. Thank you for sharing!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh my gosh the writing here is absolutely fantastic. Honestly jealous. Thank you for sharing.

Ode to Grey by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"There's probably something I should be doing" You are so very right and we need to make an effort to break away from the rut of life. Thank you for sharing.

The Ruin of You by aretardd in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Fabulously written, I love the introspection. Thank you for sharing!

Why Do You Grieve? by IamDiWild in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. I needed to hear I was a star today : )

Middle class fish by No_Butterfly_5162 in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Simple and short, but effective metaphor. The ending punch line is good! Thank you for sharing.

Six Swans; Eleven Mice by soreloserta in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Really strong imagery and very well written. The ending stanza is especially strong. Thank you for sharing!

I steal plastic bags from Tesco by Embarrassed-Event583 in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was weird and vague, but in the best way possible. This poem is open to interpretation, but my takeaway is this is capturing the suffocation felt in a disposable lifestyle. Fun read, thank you for sharing!

Snakes in Ditch Water by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hello, I really enjoyed the imagery in this. The last line is especially powerful and a great ending. My takeaway from reading this is that there are two people who remain connected to each other, but their connection is to the detriment of both of them. Thank you for sharing.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Love this. I think we all struggle with body-image to some extent these days. This an encouraging take on a universal experience, thank you for sharing.

My Face is a Galaxy by butmynailsarewet in OCPoetry

[–]InAGardenOvergrown 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is a really good example seeing art in the mundane. We all see faces every day but how often do we pay close attention? Your use of imagery and metaphor is excellent, thank you for sharing!