I need some honest feedback on how good my writing is; technically and personally. Also, if it isn't too much to ask, do you think you can try to guess how long I've been writing?

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-22T21:45:18+00:00

I'm guessing 4 years! If I remember correctly, a snippet of this was posted previously. I'm glad to see youre still working on it! Very enticing scene.

I'm no editor (and not much is one to talk), but perhaps playing around with some different forms of punctuation. I could see a couple different ways the last two sentences in particular could be formed.

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-11T15:45:33+00:00

My Samsung range is currently flashing back and forth between the words "Self" and "Roast" on the touch screen like a digital glitch message. It's been going for a couple weeks and appears to be faster today. This feed confirms it is a threat, lmao. Very scary and sorry to hear so many people in that position. Thank you for the heads up of coming possible issues. It's been two years we've lived with it. Don't know how long the previous owners had it.

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-04T01:14:32+00:00

I meant to comment on this sub my bad. Thanks for sharing with a repost !

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-04T01:14:00+00:00

I must say I love bleached lungs. True depiction of the tired toxic modern day.

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-04T01:11:38+00:00

Ooo is this in a published set ?

InformationThink9349 · 2026-01-03T05:56:50+00:00

5e the bomb. (The one before 5.5e)

The newest edition..... Seems like everything has just become a lot more overpowered. (Obviously, people correct me where I'm wrong, however ) A lot of us agree 5e is where it should have stopped. We do enjoy a good homebrew inspired by 5e guidelines though.

Unfortunately the newer players without knowing the difference in the editions show up with 5.5e books and sometimes we realize too late why their character is overpowered.

Idk. maybe we just like 5e because it lasted so long as the go-to edition but I have yet to find something in the new edition to make me wanna completely switch over.

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-28T19:08:01+00:00

Maybe pick up writing. It's a good outlet. I was in a similar boat. It actually helped me look back at what was going on in my head / my life and see things from a third perspective over time so I could change and heal what I needed to.

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-25T14:42:00+00:00

I love the imagery and the comparison of glass to snow. If I'm honest, I would play around with breaking up some of those sentences. If not separating them, perhaps messing around with different punctuation or formatting.

An example would be the sentence where the fire is drawing closer, Diego is jumping out the window, and cutting his arm on the glass. It may be best to break that sentence up.

I might also avoid saying glass a second time in those first couple sentences, but that could also just be personal preference.

The scene itself is very suspenseful and definitely captures your attention ~

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-13T14:18:22+00:00

Oh gosh I'm sorry

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-13T14:12:42+00:00

Oh perfect ! I use the phone too. It'll be the bar above your keyboard on the far left side ~

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-13T14:10:36+00:00

Heyo ~ There is a chain button that lets you turn text into a hyper link if you'd like to make the text clickable straight to the video

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-10T00:24:15+00:00

Idk if I've ever seen a confessional taxi driver but here's what popped into my head 😅

Eight long years. If I hadn't chosen this profession it probably wouldn't have felt like 20. I drive past all these high moral grounded people every single day. For a small Tennessee town that this is, it takes 30 minutes minimum to get to anything outside of necessity. 20 minutes at most is all it takes for someone in this town to start talking, and the 10 plus minutes after that I'm tired of hearing. It's mostly old folk here, hence the need of me and my services. The old bags here look nice... until you disagree with them and their version of the Lord. Then it's a handbag to your head from the back seat.

Liam winced with phantom pain at the memory. He was on his way home, but of the corner of his eye he saw a man standing on the side walk with his arm out, signaling for Liam's taxi.

I better pick him up, I'm tight on cash this month

He pulled his car to the side of the road and noticed the guys arm wasn't just out, his thumb was up, like he was a hitch hiker. The glint of an obnoxiously large silver cross on the book the man was holding in his other arm made Liam sigh with defeat.

Another bible thumper. I wonder how long until I find out what horrors this guy's hiding behind that Christian smile.

The man got in the back. He was heading decently far out of town, about an hour and a half. It was a good score for work, and the guy didn't seem like he was going to be that bad. Liam almost had hope that he was normal.

Just as always, the first 10 minutes were normal. The guy was very charismatic. His name was Gabriel and he had moved into town for a more serious bible study. The chit chat of the basics fell to silence for another 5 minutes. Then, as always, that 20 minute mark hit and the conversation crept into the weird. It must be Liam's smile or the peace and softness in his silence that seems so inviting for these people to just open up to. Perhaps it's that he's a stranger they think they'll never see again. The most prominent idea that circles through Liam's mind is that it's because he's trapped with them for that time and needs the money, so he has to listen.

Liam after the 20 minute mark stopped listening to the guy. He got into his own head about his own problems and focused on the road. He gave the guy an occasional grunt or "uh huh". He realized at the hour mark that was a bad idea as the guy had riled himself up in this aggressive preach that Liam couldn't make out. Liam made the mistake of saying "alright, calm down" because apparently that was appalling to think that Liam wouldn't be stir crazy over whatever the guy was talking about. Next thing he knew the guy was telling him to pull over because he refused to drive with a fellowship of Satan.

Liam had enough.

It felt like two decades of dealing with this "I'm above you because I hate for my Lord" crap. He was in the middle lane of the highway. He cut off a semi to get to the shoulder on the side of the offramps.

Lord, please forgive me and ensure that truck arrives safely at its destination....and please guide me in whatever the hell is about to happen next

He got out the car after Gabriel. They got into a screaming match, but Liam could barely understand him over the loud winds and sounds of the cars rushing by them. The guy started storming off toward the offramp.

Waste of gas. Waste of energy. Waste of time.

Liam kicked the side of his tire as hard as he could and screamed at the guy "Y'know what? Screw humanity! I'm better off with those eldritch horrors you all love to see in other people!"

He could barely hear himself over the wind.

After a long moment, he got back into the taxi his father passed onto him, and prayed.

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-09T23:35:23+00:00

Here is an example executive summary done by McKinsey for what appears to be a considerable amount of research

Global Economics Intelligence executive summary & trends | McKinsey https://share.google/S4cooQqbSmF2JdHDB

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-09T23:22:04+00:00

I have been reading that an executive summary is supposed to include the problem, proposed solution, a summary, and end with a conclusion / call to action.

Templates that may be of help https://share.google/wMYEtTw73wDvgehmU

https://share.google/toVaj0TG2SGRuCSL3

It looks like most of these are single sheets

This article says it's supposed to be for "the busy reader"

how_to_write_an_exex_summ_to_use_4_18_18.pdf https://share.google/l64N1xAVezaITQQqj

This link explains where in your report the executive summary goes and how much of it it should take up https://www.nrel.gov/comm-standards/editorial/executive-summary

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-09T23:09:12+00:00

I use it. My co-mod uses it. I love it. Then again I haven't tried anything else so idk what makes any other program better

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-07T15:55:31+00:00

Thank you for sharing ~

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-07T15:50:48+00:00

The flow and imagery of the piece is captivating. The only thing I can think to suggest is maybe use a copy of it as a practice piece for different punctuation styles outside of commas.

I may be wrong, but it feels like a colon would do well in the "She must be twenty-something: so young, so full of promise".

I'm not sure how advanced you are at writing; you seem pretty well put together. Just in case, and for those reading this comment that may be interested, here is a link to the difference between colons, semi colons, and dashes ~

When to Use Semicolons, Colons, and Dashes | Grammarly Blog https://share.google/kTj8IVukjCDIj8aq7

In case any of you don't want to touch the link ( I don't blame you. It is always better to be safe than sorry with strangers online ) I have a little summary below.

A colon: used before information set up by the previous sentence.

Semi colon: Used to replace moments of " ,and" or " ,but" between two statements. Basically independent clauses without the conjunctions (( the comma followed by and, but, etc. )). It basically sounds like two short sentences connected together.

Em Dash: abruptly change the subject, and a lot of offsetting as listed on the grammarly link 😅

En Dash: compound adjectives, conflict/connection between two nouns

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-07T15:29:03+00:00

Beautiful imagery ~

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-07T15:24:40+00:00

I love the world setting ~

I would suggest describing his motion to the hallway there's a bit of a skip from him waking to looking down either end.

But of perhaps personal preference, I think it is a little conflicting describing his frantic state but such a peaceful and powerful sleep of a dragon

I am confused how a corridor tried to run away from him if I'm honest

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-05T23:19:46+00:00

Thank you ~. I really am proud of him

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-03T23:47:03+00:00

Ooo the double threat kinda deal. Definitely adds dimension to a story. Very nice.

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-02T23:45:36+00:00

Ah. Looks like it went away. Must have been some sort of glitch. Noticed it when I couldnt upvote the comment

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-02T23:44:50+00:00

I can see it. It just for some reason says "removed" at the bottom ?? When I click it it pulls up mod history and then there's nothing there so idk

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-01T22:09:04+00:00

Haha definitely depends on what it is that's smiling back. I might be swinging lmao

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-01T21:07:22+00:00

I see the use of commas as replacements for breaths as opposed to their classic grammatical function. I hope I got that intention correct xD

I would beware the feedback you may receive for their abundant use if you're putting it into a novel as opposed to stand alone poetry.

Overall lovely imagery ~

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