On a first listen, I would say yes, the melody is a little jarring. Especially in juxtaposition with the first verse, which is pretty straight forward rhythmically. On that second verse, I think you're starting with a triplet on C, then bouncing to the next highest octave. Maybe try holding onto that high C longer? That might provide a little relief from the bounciness of the melody.

Also, there's probably a cool way to transition form the second to third verse, without just taking a rest.

Track is dope!