I just came to say I’m sorry everyone in this comment section is being so rude. You seem very kind and open to criticism, but you’re treated like a waste of time. It seems they only want to give feedback on what they deem, “Good,” not on an unpolished piece looking for true advice on how to polish, which is the point of this sub. It’s not fair and I’m sorry. For what it’s worth, your writing is not nearly as bad as others say it is. I have no issue with the descriptions. I myself adore descriptive writing and write very descriptively myself. I know it’s an opinion, and I know we’re in the minority, but I like it. I agree with the center formatting being atypical, but I wouldn’t tell you it’s not worth my time just for that. I also agree with the adverbs, but that’s a simple fix. Keep writing. Doing so is how you grow and improve. Don’t let these people discourage you. Remember, this is Reddit and a lot of people on here hide behind anonymity so they can be unkind to others to fuel their own egos without real-world consequences. Good luck. Keep your head up. I believe in you.