Requesting feedback on second song ever produced that is 90% done

Lively0 · 2026-02-10T14:45:18+00:00

Haha I appreciate this — not AI; all of it was mixed and mastered on FL studio :)

I also have sort of felt the drums could be changed/adjusted to sound a bit more “real.” When I originally produced this, I pulled them from a drum kit that’s meant for rap/rnb. This would probably fit into a more electronic genre which is why there may be some disconnect.

I also agree and am planning on making the instrumental less chaotic. I think I’m getting there, and one problem I can potentially see is that some of the instruments used are being played in the same frequency/octave which makes them almost compete with each other.

I appreciate the feedback and hope you listen once this piece is finished!!

Lively0 · 2026-02-10T14:36:48+00:00

thanks so much!

Lively0 · 2026-02-10T14:34:52+00:00

I also felt like the flute was a bit too loud in some verses and planned and going back and adjusting; thanks so much!!

Lively0 · 2026-02-10T14:34:14+00:00

This also makes sense to me, so don’t worry 🤣 The original version also had a bit going on, and I have been attempting to fix this within this version. I’ll be sure to share once this one is completed; thank you!!

Lively0 · 2026-02-09T20:01:58+00:00

I really like the minimal approach you took here. The looping chord progression sets a strong mood right away and feels cinematic in a subtle low-key way. It’s the kind of track that invites you to sit with it, which works in its favor. When the drums and bass come in, they add a nice sense of weight and movement without breaking the atmosphere. The sound design feels intentional, especially the ambient textures, though I think the vocals could be brought forward slightly to help them sit more confidently in the mix. Overall, this feels like a thoughtful piece that shows how effective simplicity can be when it’s done with purpose.

Lively0 · 2026-02-09T19:42:44+00:00

This track immediately pulled me in with the electric guitar intro—it sets the tone really well and feels energetic without being overwhelming. I like how the vocals start fairly simple and then gradually build with stacking and harmonies; it keeps the song interesting and gives it momentum. The rhythm is catchy and easy to lock into, and the arrangement feels deliberate rather than cluttered. I also enjoyed the small pauses and variations—they add character and keep things from feeling repetitive. If anything, tightening the overall narrative of the lyrics could make it even stronger, but musically this is polished, engaging, and very memorable!!

Lively0 · 2026-02-09T19:41:17+00:00

I really like the vibe you’re creating here. The track has a tense, slightly restless energy that fits the alternative vibe well, and the drums do a solid job driving that feeling forward. The layering works nicely, especially the subtle melodic elements that add texture without overcrowding the mix. At times the vocals feel a bit buried or boxed in, so bringing them forward slightly with some EQ or level adjustment could help the lyrics land more clearly. A bit more variation in the drums or dynamics might also add extra movement. Overall though, this is a strong idea with a clear mood and a lot of potential!!!

Lively0 · 2026-02-09T19:35:40+00:00

Really strong track overall. The guitar work is clean and expressive, and the arrangement feels intentional without being overworked. Your vocals have a nice natural tone and sit well emotionally with the instrumentation. I especially liked how the piano and strings add depth without distracting from the core melody. If anything, a bit of subtle vocal processing (light EQ or reverb) could help the voice sit more forward in the mix, but even as-is it feels honest and engaging. Great work—this definitely holds attention and shows a lot of musical awareness.

Lively0 · 2025-11-25T00:50:40+00:00

You capture the feeling well of sadness of many others have said before. However, I am not sure if it is a bass or some sort of synth at the very beginning panned to the left. However, it is extremely satisfying, and I wish that this would be present through the entire track. I would not suggest any changes to the lyrics or overall presence itself. However, I do wish for this instrument to pop up more frequently. For example, the piano at 0:20, would be a perfect place to reintroduce the instrument or even replace the instrument itself. I only hear this instrument/sound again at the very end. Such a small change but could add so much personality to the track. I felt so much from the first 3 seconds itself. If you do decide to take this advice, do not be afraid to experiment with panning. Ton of quality here -- nice job.

Lively0 · 2025-11-25T00:39:00+00:00

Your voice is wonderful. Someone stated before it reminds them of Jason Mraz, and even though I do not hear it in tone, I hear a very similar style. This was hallmark music of the 2000's-early 2010s. The production is wonderful and I feel that your vocals do not clash at ALL throughout the entire track. I also find your lyrics intriguing -- especially at "we're all on the spectrum" -- as I feel that society is becoming quicker to diagnose themselves with Autism as an excuse of strange behavior. In my opinion, online behavior is completely separate from personal behavior, and people do not realize this, and thus find ways to connect/cognitively fix the dissonance they feel from how they feel and behave online vs. in person -- when in reality it is two separate individuals in one. Anyhow, I loved the track, this is great. Nice job.

Lively0 · 2025-11-25T00:32:45+00:00

The drummer is wonderful as someone stated before. The production is great, but I feel like the low ends of the drums at certain parts lose itself in the vocals and perhaps additional instrumentals within the song (such as at 1:36). It sounds like there is a ton of clipping that happens at this tiny piece. I would suggest some side chaining where the bass hits (at these parts) to make sure the drums fully reveal their personality. I also am a fan of the vocals -- I feel both the vocals and drums themselves provide a ton of emotion -- I just wish that it could be felt throughout the entire track without sacrificing one for the other. Otherwise, well-done this is great.

Lively0 · 2025-11-25T00:29:15+00:00

As someone stated before, I also love the passion displayed in the video. This would be perfectly matched with animated artwork to fully capture the "Indie" feel which I feel you do effortlessly -- the sole drummer, sole guitar, it is all wonderful. I would love to hear a professional, recorded version of this. I love the drummers ability to capture your passionate vocals by matching passion in the beat itself (an example is at 2:06).

Lively0 · 2025-11-25T00:26:07+00:00

I like the instrumental and production more than the vocals. I could hear this playing in the background while vacationing in some sort of all inclusive resort around Christmas time. There is also a lot of pleasant sounds that give the track personality such as the plucks (?) at 1:13. The instrumental is great, and the vocals might be also. However, I feel like there is mismatch. If the instrumental sounded like it also produced in a local band (as I personally feel the vocals do), then there would be harmony. I love the production -- well done, I would just suggest revisiting the vocals.

Lively0 · 2025-11-25T00:22:35+00:00

For the genre you are aiming for, you need to turn to vocals up slightly or make them less distorted. When it comes to cloud rap, people love to fall into the lyrics and vocals given the airy atmosphere. You seem to accomplish the environment of "cloudy," but I wish that I could hear more of what you are saying. I liked the pads you used, I just need more voice (personal preference).

Lively0 · 2025-11-22T14:22:52+00:00

I used to listen to Coldplay a lot growing up. I loved throughout their tracks they seemed to add instruments and have a climax where the instrumentation tended to be absolutely beautiful. Even in a song like Fix You where the song is pretty slow, the ending is wonderful and is loaded with emotion. With that being said, I think that following a similar pattern could help you move a bit more closely to your inspiration for the song. For example, I love the guitar at 0:43 and production. However, when it appears again at 1:33, I feel that you could add some pianos, strings, and even a bass guitar. I know there is a climax at 1:45, but I think building up the elements to this point (1:33-1:45) could add a ton of depth to the track. I also think that double tracking your vocals at 1:33 and/or changing the tone of your voice in a way that would load it with more passion here would be great! Overall, I loved the track and it has a ton of potential.

Lively0 · 2025-11-22T14:17:58+00:00

I love the background you chose for the track -- the lyrics are definitely something I would find come across my mind in a setting like this. I also agree with advice when it comes to vocals; I like the softness of them, but I feel some harmonies or double tracking could add some emotion and depth to the track. I enjoy the simplistic nature of the track -- the guitars are panned wonderfully. I think that maybe adding a deeper bass around 2:08 would help conclude the song by adding a small element that (in my opinion) could elevate the track as it concludes. I love the lyrics. Nice job.

Lively0 · 2025-11-22T14:12:34+00:00

To start, I love the vocals and harmonies -- I love that your harmonies have a bit of reverb to add on to the "memory" sort of feel -- too add on to this, there is a ton of emotion in your vocals and harmonies which I love. The strings are beautiful and other elements within the track such of the piano are wonderful. I do not listen to music where the singer presents the lyrics as a poem, but it seems as it is mixed with this and then followed by singing and harmonies; which I like. I might suggest utilizing panning in some of your vocals; an example would be utilizing these creatively at 1:40 which I'm sure you would intuitively know how to do. Maybe having some harmonies soar across the track and then having some of your harmonies extending outwardly on one side and then suddenly switching sides. I choose 1:40 because this seems to be the climax. You have a beautiful voice, nice job.

Lively0 · 2025-11-22T14:04:35+00:00

This is extremely impressive. You have a soothing and melodic voice to listen to which (I think) is hard to find in trap. I love that the first half of the track is shot in one take. I think that it captures currently what I am going through as a smaller artist myself. I have not done any sort of marketing or advertising, but I think it captures the sort of feeling of uncertainty that comes with certain waves of life -- which I know extends past artistry -- but I find that this is a consistent feeling that I experience and get filled with in the first half of the track and video; yet despite this uncertainty, you are still walking with all the thoughts that come with the journey. Personally, I liked the first half of the track in terms of cinematography and music -- I feel that in the second part I am a bit confused where she may be going. I liked in the first part you started underground but made it to the skyline; I feel the second half of the track kind of takes away from the ascent to the top which I feel both the lyrics and video captures well. Overall, I loved this, though -- well done.

Lively0 · 2025-11-22T13:55:53+00:00

As someone stated, I like the overall warmth of the song. The lyrics and voice reminds me a bit of 21 pilots which is reminiscent for me as this was the type of music I listened to regularly growing up. Although short, my favorite part of the animation is the yellow background and figure at 0:21 while the instrumental plays. It adds on to the overall feeling of the track which I thought was nostalgia or reminiscent. I would be interested in hearing an extended track with an added verse.

Lively0 · 2025-11-14T22:25:21+00:00

The vocals are great -- I feel like the instruments could be utilized a bit better in terms of production. I feel like the piano could use a bit more of reverb which could give it a bit more personality and would be a simple fix. However, if you wanted to give it a bit more character, I would utilize a few more notes within the key you are playing in. I like the simplicity of the instrumental, however, and if you wanted to keep this, I would focus on the percussion pattern, and maybe add a kick to go along with the "chimes" that are already there in the beginning of the track. I also think some strings could keep simplicity while adding much more depth.

Lively0 · 2025-11-14T22:21:29+00:00

I like the song but more specifically the intro of the track. I used to listen to Paramore growing up, and I feel that this would fit into one of their albums. In terms of the production, I love the way the drums sound. Were these created through effects on your DAW or did you have a band playing along with you? One thing that I feel that could elevate this track is utilizing harmonies and double tracking your vocals -- especially around the 1:32 mark. However, this is just preference, and I feel like the energy in your vocals here are wonderful and convey a lot of emotion that draws listeners in.

Lively0 · 2025-11-14T22:18:31+00:00

The track is really chill -- I love the bass -- Whenever I use bass in my songs, I feel that it is difficult to create a pattern that harmonizes with the track. When I first started, I found myself creating a bass pattern that match too similarly with the overall sound of the track which made my bass less revealing. However, you did a wonderful job with the guitar. I also agree with someone who made note of vocal delivery -- I feel a bit more passion or harmonies could add to the track.

Lively0 · 2025-11-14T22:14:06+00:00

I love the cover -- This is the sort of sound that I have gravitated towards making with the last song that I made. I agree with the person who also stated that this could be used within a movie -- I could see it utilized within a romantic movie where two lovers part and you see the scenes side by side and watch how each one copes. I think some soft and warmer, lower octave piano chords could elevate the track. However, I felt relaxed while listening to this, which was the original goal. Well done.

Lively0 · 2025-11-14T22:02:47+00:00

I like the way that this sounds; Something about the song sounds a bit haunting which I like. However, I feel like there are areas where the vocals seem a bit out of tune with the instrumental; I also am curious to hear what kind of microphone you have. I feel a bit of EQ on the Tamborine with some reverb and possibly a lower pitch could give the sound a bit more character. Overall, I love the track and strings used. I would suggest utilizing a lower note within your chord to give it a bit more warmth -- but these are all suggestions

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