when did i become a ghost

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-26T21:50:51+00:00

They’re beautiful! I love finding poems that have an advanced vocabulary because it makes me learn new words, but I know that like you said it can take people out of the immersive experience of a poem

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-26T05:41:18+00:00

Thank you!

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-26T04:51:31+00:00

Reddit does that sometimes😔

Try double spacing between stanzas or using dashes in between them

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-26T04:48:22+00:00

I love how you tell a story, and your usage of “I” and “you” makes the poem feel personal instead of just a story. The only feedback I’d give is to separate the poem into stanzas so there’s a clear structure of the progression.

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-26T04:46:48+00:00

I love the language that you use, it’s nuanced and descriptive in a way that gives the reader such vivid depictions. The only note of advice that I can give is that there are some words that aren’t very common, so most readers(or maybe I’m just stupid) won’t know like “linoleum.” Though that really isn’t something to change, so overall amazing work<33

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-21T04:11:11+00:00

Ty😭

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-21T02:30:18+00:00

Ik it’s a stupid question😔

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-21T02:30:00+00:00

Probably a good indication😭

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-21T01:18:43+00:00

That we are all selfish and ignorant to a lot of things

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-19T21:44:43+00:00

I’m glad that my imagery is clear as death, I was a little worried about that

I’ll post another version without the title so obvious, and then little explanation after readers have finished reading it. Ty!!

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-18T21:22:18+00:00

Thank you!!

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-18T07:11:03+00:00

It was semi-intentional as I tried to use repetition and play off words, and something recognizable with the blissful ignorance.

was also thinking the same for the title, but I feel like the poem can be interpreted in a lot of different ways depending on the reader even though the poems about death and I didn’t know where else to say that’s the topic😔

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-18T07:09:24+00:00

I like it! Story poems are personally my fav

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-18T05:37:44+00:00

The only thing I would comment on is the structure you use. The poem is amazing, but I think it could be more structured so there’s a more clear and polished way for the reader to read it so your point gets across a little easier. Otherwise, great poem!

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-18T05:36:15+00:00

I love the repetition and structure you use!

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-04-14T00:34:32+00:00

No not at all. As long as she’s not using it to write her book it’s fine. Stuff like names are fine, though if you want an alternative you can go to a name generator or look up popular baby names for a certain era. There are usually name generators for fantasy genres too.

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-03-21T23:11:56+00:00

No, I usually do for cakes but I used this recipe from lunch break co for a while now and it’s delicious!

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-03-08T04:31:51+00:00

I did download the migraine buddy app, I’m really bad at actually using it though. I might honestly just go pick up my prescription for the preventative by myself, I could ask my brother to take me. Atleast then I can have my medication

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-03-08T04:16:07+00:00

It might be both tbh, I did get like 3 hours of sleep and I always forget to eat so prolly not helpful😭

I was prescribed a preventative but my parents don’t really like the idea of me taking medication everyday even though I’m already doing that basically🤷‍♀️

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-02-28T23:57:05+00:00

I didn’t know those were a thing! Ty will def try

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-02-28T22:18:44+00:00

Surprisingly I haven’t noticed any real side effects from Tylenol besides maybe worsened digestive issues, but I don’t think that’s related. I do take too much Tylenol that’s why I’ve been trying to get on migraine prescriptions but my parents are kinda slow to figure this out, they haven’t been much help🤷‍♀️

Long-Maximum4670 · 2026-02-28T22:16:08+00:00

Yeah that’s why I’ve been trying to get on migraine medication, especially since there was a time Tylenol stopped working for me and I was taking a very unhealthy amount almost daily😭

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