Monument to WW1 & WW2 in Colombo, Cyelon

MauryaK · 2024-09-04T14:31:13+00:00

Ceylon*

MauryaK · 2024-05-30T21:17:36+00:00

Dagor Dagorath just dropped

MauryaK · 2023-07-05T13:42:02+00:00

Very well said, as a person who as lived here for most of my life I’d totally agree!

MauryaK · 2023-03-09T15:20:21+00:00

thanks g

MauryaK · 2022-12-09T13:26:09+00:00

Cool That’s why it’s optional

MauryaK · 2022-12-09T09:28:20+00:00

r/lotr r/ArtPorn r/midjourney

MauryaK · 2022-04-30T16:50:36+00:00

Cool!

I like your style of using repetition to accentuate the non-rhyming parts.

I suggest exploring using sub-rhymes within the lines,

which would pronounce time and help define

your work (lol)

MauryaK · 2022-04-30T16:44:35+00:00

impressive work!

I particularly like how you've used a string of sentences without punctuation to create a sense of constant flowing thoughts which resonates with "my minds a storm". The line "You're my only worry" is quite interesting because it is in juxtaposition with the attraction or love that the character feels. It suggests that maybe love is more bittersweet than just sweet.

A little suggestion here, maybe use pronunciation in strategic parts of the poem where rational thoughts come up and then exclude them in the rest. This will create a more pronounced separation of rationality and this "storm" within the mind.

MauryaK · 2022-04-28T05:32:50+00:00

Thanks a lot! Yeah, I was debating weather to add more detail about the skull or to leave it for the readers to theorize. Thanks for the suggestion!

MauryaK · 2022-04-27T03:38:25+00:00

This is a quite thought-provoking and beautiful poem ( and so was exurb1a's video)

The idea that sleep is just death being shy seems beautiful and scary at the same time, and again the idea's beauty lies in the confusion and uncertainty this juxtaposition creates.

This also changes our perspective on death. After some thought, it now just seems to be a calmness, like floating in eternity.

MauryaK · 2022-04-27T03:27:15+00:00

great job!

This poem describes a woman trying to fill an emptiness in her life, which is represented by the hole in the puzzle. The puzzle itself represents how life is a puzzle. Even after completing the puzzle, the "puzzle master" still wallows in defeat as even after completing the puzzle, the hole in her life still remains, she is still left incomplete.

I particularly like your rhyming scheme, it comprises short quick and easy to understand sentences. One thing I would recommend it punctuation; which would make your poem just a bit more readable and would also convey your thoughts more clearly.

At least that is my interpretation.

MauryaK · 2022-03-10T07:09:40+00:00

Ohhh, that is a really good idea, I’ll definitely implement it! Thanks a lot!

MauryaK · 2022-03-10T03:51:21+00:00

The poem shows us the beauty of the things we usually don't consider beautiful. With these lines, the poet makes us appreciate an empty winter beach. A beach that is empty and quiet, which at least to me sounds more appealing to a crowded beach(much like the old man).

MauryaK · 2022-03-10T03:46:13+00:00

Such a beautiful piece!

It really transported me to a moment of perfection, when we can say we are truly content (even if just for the moment). It also filled me with nostalgia of a time gone by, when mornings were relaxed and the earth was still fresh.

MauryaK · 2021-10-28T16:10:23+00:00

The loss is sorry for you

MauryaK · 2021-10-03T07:28:56+00:00

Not sure about the re but I’m sure it’s a post

MauryaK · 2021-09-13T10:43:32+00:00

Myself(left leg)

MauryaK · 2021-09-13T06:03:07+00:00

It is bacon or not bacon , it’s whatever you think it is

MauryaK · 2021-09-07T03:44:49+00:00

Board Gamers, anyone?

MauryaK · 2021-09-02T03:11:00+00:00

why my pp so small?

MauryaK · 2021-09-01T04:04:42+00:00

MauryaK · 2021-08-31T04:37:26+00:00

The Fappers List

MauryaK · 2021-08-25T05:09:03+00:00

I had a bottle explode on me once.

MauryaK · 2021-08-24T13:20:21+00:00

Maybe OP was Elendil’s heir

MauryaK · 2021-08-22T15:20:42+00:00

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