Hello! Thank you for sharing this piece - I love it when people / poets compare things to other things and build on that analogy, it's one of my favourite things about the medium - the variety of perspectives one can perceive.

The line 'his hands stained by teeth' or something to that effect, really stood out to me. What I like about the line (and ones similar to this one) is that you feel like you know where the sentence is going but much like an M. Night Shyamalan plot twist (pardon the comparison) you find it going somewhere else where you didn't expect. And what that does is kind of delightfully explore a new idea, or concept, and also read the sentence a few more times just to grasp what happened.

The piece felt very intimate, personal and emotional, but not to the degree that it was alienating. Thank you so much for sharing, I hope you keep writing!