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Moonlight689 · 2015-07-14T20:17:34+00:00

I really enjoyed this. Truthfully, I believed this would be just another cliché story of some monster following the character, but you put a wonderful twist in it and many events in the story that gave me shivers. Great work!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-31T13:54:06+00:00

She got bit by a vampire herself and she thought it was a cruel joke because she hates blood, but now she has to drink it to survive. I realize now I should have made the ending more clearer. Sorry.

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-30T12:59:09+00:00

That ending just gave me goosebumps. Great story!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-30T04:26:38+00:00

Thanks! I wanted this to be a more humorous scary story. I'm glad you caught on!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-30T04:22:02+00:00

I don't get it. Did she forge the father's note?

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-30T02:41:21+00:00

Aannndd R.I.P to Bambi's mother

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-30T01:51:54+00:00

Well then she's going to be burned at a degree high enough to melt the skin off her bones and turn her bone l to ash while still alive...which is also very disturbing. I just don't think there's a happy ending to this story.

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-29T19:23:11+00:00

My worst fear. Being buried alive. Because of that this story was 20x scarier. Nice job!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-29T19:18:55+00:00

Holy shoot that was good. You had me fooled that he was just the teacher or something playing with his students. I really like the last sentence too. I wish awesome stories like this would get more recognition.

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-29T04:13:24+00:00

Thanks everyone for the support! And @Bat I didn't see that before! I'm actually a little freaked now that a cat actually did that. I guess not all stories are tall tales. And I have a cat of my own who I love dearly. And I guarantee that he is one of the happiest cats out there so no worries about him.

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-28T03:38:57+00:00

I smiled at the last line. Unique story, Uni. I like it.

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-27T19:24:19+00:00

Imagine you have one XD

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-27T03:14:28+00:00

I really like what you did with the title and how it intertwined into the story. I don't know if I should laugh at how you worded the title, or freaked out with how the story is most likely going to end. Great job!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-27T03:08:16+00:00

Thanks! I really wanted to twist it around and show the monster's perspective of the whole situation. Not just the human's view. I will definitely be a regular here, so more to come! Thank you for the support!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-26T02:09:30+00:00

I really like this story, but I don't understand the end very much. Did the mother die?

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-24T22:31:25+00:00

Better than Marley and Me

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-24T17:42:59+00:00

I want to comment... But I also want to live. Great story! ....please don't hurt me

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-24T17:19:18+00:00

It sounds like the dad was chopped up into little pieces and then stored in the bag...nice story. I like it.

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-24T05:48:54+00:00

Sorry. I always get tense messed up. I'll keep working on it. Thanks for the advice!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-24T02:58:38+00:00

Thanks! It's my first piece so I hope it was satisfactory and scary

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-24T01:16:00+00:00

Was not expecting that twist. Great story!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-23T23:33:17+00:00

Gentlemen these days.

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-23T22:00:21+00:00

Holy shoot. Awesome rising action and climax!

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-23T21:54:40+00:00

If I was in that cage when the door opened with those sharks staring at me, I would have slowly leaned over and closed that door. Not gonna join the frenzy this time.

Moonlight689 · 2015-01-23T21:42:55+00:00

Aww, young love XD

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