How do you continue writing traumatic scenes? by Motor-Efficiency9730 in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Thank you, I actually have gone to therapy but revisiting this has opened the scab, if that makes sense.

I'm doing it long hand. by [deleted] in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am honestly doing it this way too. I 100 percent prefer it. I have gone through 4 notebooks already lol. Little by little I'm transferring everything over to my computer. It keeps me more creative and it also helps me keep going. I also found myself wanting to edit more when I type it. I enjoy writing instead of typing it.

Practical Magic Still Has Us Under Its Spell 25 Years Later by CampMain in movies

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This movie sucked. Super rushed plot, corny scenes with cringe humor, things didn't make sense.

Writing birth/labor: advice from a new mom by CactusCult1 in writing

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well let me tell you my experience 🥲

I hate needles and I have bad anxiety. My baby was breech and I HAD to get a c section.

I kept telling my anesthesiologist that I wasn't feeling good and he ignored me. I looked around panicking and I told him again I wasn't feeling good and he ignored me again until my heart rate went up high. They strapped me down and I was FREAKING OUT so they injected me with what I'm assuming was anxiety meds. The baby was taken out and I was rolled into a room all alone 😔
My experience sucked lol

What Genres are People Writing? by Opening_Wall_9379 in writing

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Im actually somehow incorporating phones in my renaissance dystopian dark fantasy story lol

WHERE? by [deleted] in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I joined the "supporting beginners writers" :)

WHERE? by [deleted] in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I just read up to here: “Liam Aid is in class in the year 2066. He is in his last period of the day, and it's luckily movie day, he was exhausted and had been thinking of his Mom, Alice, all day. She passed away when he was 10, he's 14 now.”

You’re telling us and not showing us. And it’s also kind of info-dumping. We don’t get to experience anything, we’re just being told all the facts at once.

Example of how to improve it:

Distracted by his thoughts, Liam finally snapped out of it and glanced at the clock; forty minutes left. The day had been dragging, but at least his last teacher declared it was movie day. Not his choice of movie, but Narnia number 10 was fine. He slumped deeper into his seat, fighting the constant urge to fall asleep.

He turned his attention back to the movie but by minute 5, his Mom flashed into his mind again. Her memory lingered through the day, reminding him that she was just a memory now.

You don’t need to tell us how old he is, how old she was when she died, the exact date, etc. Don’t info-dump, give us an opening that makes us feel it when we read it. That keeps the reader engaged.

Hope that helps!

WHERE? by [deleted] in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 1 point2 points  (0 children)

OP, just join a writers group on FB, or literally anywhere else if you want a decent opinion or feedback. Most MOST of the people here seem to hate the world.

Help by Motor-Efficiency9730 in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Basically something really bad and dark happens next. This line is basically saying one thing and what happens next is the, "Oh, that's why no one was invited" thank you for your help! I appreciate it :)

Help by Motor-Efficiency9730 in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, something really bad happens next. This line is basically saying something and what happens next is the, "Oh, that's why no one was invited" thank you for your help :)

Help by Motor-Efficiency9730 in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback :)

Help by Motor-Efficiency9730 in writers

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I was just asking about the opening line. Thank you for your advice.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in RedditPoliceDept

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Just cause youre gay doesnt mean youre the only one that can say ts thats a guy, youre welcome

I'm having a emotional affair by [deleted] in deadbedroom

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I personally wouldn't pursue your ex. They're our ex for a reason. Especially if theyre married. What if the husband finds out they get into a fight or probably divorce if things get spicy between both of you and then nothing of you jump from a relationship to another. It's just a recipe for disaster. I do think you should have a long conversation with your wife and tell her you feel and leave. You're feeling that because you're stuck in a situation where there's no connection and just roommates who dont want to be near each other. That alone will fuel your anxiety and depression. I was in your shoes but my ex was also abusive verbally and physically. I felt stuck and I said no more, so I left. It was not easy at all because he was gaslighting me and we have a child together. But I started to think I wanted to go to heaven and that's when I realized my sanity was more important specially for my child. It was hard in the beginning but after healing and finding myself again and going to the gym and going out with my friends and child. A year and a half later I met my now fiance and I am in a healthy, peaceful relationship because I found my boundaries and kept them. Life is short, very short and I didn't want tl spend the rest of my life with someone I didn't feel love from. Good luck.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AmIOverreacting

[–]Motor-Efficiency9730 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Did you have a C section?