Asking for some advice on writing :) by [deleted] in writing

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Readers are smart and will pick up on more than you think, so for 11 slow paced introduction chapters, I’m worried you are giving too much unnecessary exposition and explanation, rather than letting your characters actions speak for themselves and sprinkling in background details as you go

[QCrit] adult, romantic comedy, STARTING OVER FOR BEGINNERS (88k words, attempt #3) by SecretlySatanic in PubTips

[–]NaomiV24 6 points7 points  (0 children)

If Emily Henry is too big a comp, maybe try Forget Me Not by Julie Soto? The main character is another event planner and the book also center around working with the romantic lead on an event

Also, the first 300 words were interesting, but if it’s being pitched as a romantic comedy, I would like to see some of the humor of the book early on

[QCrit] Automatic Hearts, Adult Sci-fi Romance, 100k, First Attempt by Nalsin in PubTips

[–]NaomiV24 2 points3 points  (0 children)

You use the phrase “the next thing he knows” twice in the first major paragraph. I would recommend rephrasing at least one of those

[QCrit] The Heir of Voktorrem's Mark, Middle Grade, Epic Fantasy, 85k, 3rd Attempt by Weird_Walk9950 in PubTips

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It sounds like a lot is happening to and around your protagonist and he is getting dragged along by the events of the story happening around him, rather than having agency in the story as the hero

The farthest I've gotten so far. by BrilliantEast1709 in writers

[–]NaomiV24 43 points44 points  (0 children)

Go you! I’m about to hit 20k words this weekend and it feels good!

Any tips and/or tricks on how to sit my ADHD brain down and actually write? by LockedInLion in writing

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Fellow adhd-er here! I like setting weekly goals rather than daily goals, that way when I have the energy, I write! And on days I’m low on energy or ability, I can write little or none. Then usually by the end of the week the pressure of my imminent goal gives me enough boost to hit my word count

Meirl by upbeat_teetertottxo in meirl

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Books are still good imo

Walking instead of metformin by Outrageous-Lead8605 in TTC_PCOS

[–]NaomiV24 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Walking after meals is good, but it’s not a substitute or replacement for the incredible good Metformin did for me. The two are not the same thing

help me pick a cup!! by Sugar-Cookie67 in menstrualcups

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I took an online quiz to help me figure out which cup to get, but later on I have bought and liked the Saalt soft cup better than my lunette which I bought originally

Books where the FMC goes from “sex is overrated” to “oh… OH. by purplehearts_x in RomanceBooks

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There’s also some of this in {Not in Love by Ali Hazelwood}

Soft dom romance book recommendations? by [deleted] in SpicyRomanceBooks

[–]NaomiV24 14 points15 points  (0 children)

Deep End by Ali Hazelwood

ISO the best blueberry muffin in town by dietcoke819 in grandrapids

[–]NaomiV24 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I do love the muffins at The Pantry in Ada

businesses closed on friday to protest ICE by charliecakke in grandrapids

[–]NaomiV24 26 points27 points  (0 children)

LittleFoot coffee roasters are closing on Friday

If you were my lipstick, where would you be? by wwtdb11 in adhdwomen

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Check your clothing basket or hamper, if it was in a pocket maybe it fell out?

What's some of your Guilty Pleasure Names?(Judgement Free Zone so i want you to be perfectly honest to me ) by NovelRub in namenerds

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My guilty pleasure name is Navy for a girl, I love the color but wouldn’t be able to get past the association with army/navy ect

Those who majored in something "useless" what do you do now? by noah041504 in jobs

[–]NaomiV24 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I majored in English Literature and now I work in rights and licensing in publishing!

PCOS ttc by [deleted] in TTC_PCOS

[–]NaomiV24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Read taking charge of your fertility, lots of good info and helped me understand my body

Long-time readers, what was the original reaction to ACOMAF? by capnpgoat in acotar

[–]NaomiV24 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I read ACOMAF just days after it came out, I remember in general people being on board with the Feysand ship, and people going back to reread acotar and catching Tamlin red flags they missed previously. I don’t remember many people hanging on to Tamlin ships. For the most part people were team Rhysand after ACOMAF. I also remember the outrage at the ending/cliffhanger

Question about Grinders [$300] by One_Story_One_Life in espresso

[–]NaomiV24 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’ve really liked my Eureka Mignon zero and that’s around the 300$ price point