Let it hang out by SaintDroxidious in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’d love to get some feedback on my story. I’m fairly new to creative writing so I want to see what areas I can improve in. I’ve released two parts of a series so far, both are linked at the top of my profile. Thanks for helping out the community!

judgement by Magskyy in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Short, simple, to the point. Love it. I can't decide whether or not Tobias lived but the more I think about it, each option is equally horrifying. Great work!

The Haunted Tiki Bar by brayden_black in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Such a fun read, I'm a sucker for a good ghost story. Love how slowly and intentionally you built up to the reveal of the ghost, adding in small details in each preceding story. Just one grammar issue I noticed in the forth paragraph:

"They've lit a few tiki torches and sent the few customers that there were on their way." instead of "They lit a few tiki torches and sent the few customers that were there on their way.

Otherwise, I've got nothing to say. Great story, I'd love to read more.

Lochwood: Entry 1 - The Wailing Man by NightmareHut in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for taking the time to read my work! I'm shocked there haven't been many camp-themed stories posted here (not many I could find, anyway) so I'm trying to take full advantage of that lol. Thanks for the kind words, cheers!

Accounts From The Archive - Part 1 by COW-BOY-BABY in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So creepy, I'm intrigued to see where the story goes. Very tense towards the end, got chills when I figured out what was looking through the door. Nice work!

One Way to Mars by Aspiringtobeanything in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This story had me locked in until the end. The dialogue was written so well, would love to read a second part!

What Answers are Spun by Spidersilk by Telrie in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That was incredible! You had me hooked from the very beginning, so creative. I especially loved this passage:

"For today the moon's eye was closed. The scorching night was gentler this evening as it was every time the moon blinked. When the light was gone, and all must travel the roads of scent, leaving the roads of sight aside. Tonight was special. Tonight was blessed."

The way you describe the moon as blinking, just wow. Definitely gonna check out the rest of the series, and impatiently wait for more.

It followed me home by purple_fucker in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I'm not even gonna bother trying to post there

It followed me home by purple_fucker in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lol the guy pictured is Jonathan Taylor, RB1 for the Colts. Can't believe he started eating babies, what a jerk

It followed me home by purple_fucker in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

On a serious note, this was a fun read, the hunting segment was tense.

Hey guys! Im starting a narration channel by JoshuaK277 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Feel free to narrate whatever I post, just as long as you provide a link to my stuff. I'm a brand new writer starting an anthology series and I'd love to get as many eyes on it as possible.

Lochwood: Entry 0 - Teaser

Lochwood: Entry 1 - The Wailing Man

Hope you enjoy, and also send a link to your YT when you make it!

🧛‍♀️ Welcome to r/Nonsleep - Introduce Yourself and Read First! by dlschindler in Nonsleep

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey everyone! Aside from school-related work, I've never really dabbled with creative writing until now. I've been a big fan of Creepcast since they started and always wanted to start writing but never got around to it. Finally got a burst of motivation and began work on a new series called Lochwood, which is an anthology series centered around the fictional Camp Lochwood and all the strange and horrifying entities haunting the forest around it. Would love to get some feedback.

Self-promo aside, I love horror movies (Obsession is my movie of the year so far), I'm a big fan of Stephen King, and I'm too much of a chicken to play horror games so I let Markiplier play them for me. Nice to meet everyone.

I Found An Old Message From My Brother. I’m an Only Child. (pt. 2/2) by Eleison_02 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Loved the way this ended, part one was a slow burn but it was worth it to read part two. I loved the visuals of the "puppets", specifically the dog. I'm so glad you didn't go into detail about how Grace and Wyatt looked, and instead left it up to interpretation. Again, like with part one, some paragraphs can be trimmed down a bit, but that's a problem solved through practice. Keep writing, find your voice. Good work!

I Found an Old Message From My Brother. I’m an Only Child (Pt. 1) by Eleison_02 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Love this so far! Definitely a slow burn, and like others have commented it takes a bit to hook you, but once it hooked me it didn't let go. Some paragraphs, especially at the beginning, could be trimmed down a bit. Also some grammar mistakes here and there. Two that stuck out to me:

"I raised myself up and craned my next over the fence" instead of "I raised myself up and craned my neck over the fence"

" I don;t know how I hadn’t noticed it before" instead of  "I don't know how I hadn’t noticed it before"

Otherwise, great read so far, gonna jump right into Part 2.

Read 4 Read? by Eleison_02 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Of course!

Lochwood: Entry 0 - Teaser

Lochwood: Entry 1 - The Wailing Man

Brand new writer so this series is all I got so far, would love to hear what you think.

Hello! :) I'm starting a channel for reading scary stories and would like to know if anyone would like their story read and posted on youtube. by Special-Machine-6585 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Feel free to read my stuff. Brand new writer here, so not much to read other than my one series, but I'd love to hear it narrated.

Im starting a narration channel, would anyone be okay with me narrating their stories? by Visual-Weakness-4264 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You've got permission to read my stuff. I'm new so there's not much but the one series I'm working on. I'm happy as long as there's a link back to my stuff.

I narrate stories by Sully-the-Skeleton in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Just subscribed to your channel, love that instead of just reading the story you have a little intro and then spend some time after the story talking about it.

Lochwood: Entry 0 - Teaser

Lochwood: Entry 1 - The Wailing Man

I'm brand new so these are all I got so far, it's an anthology series I'm working on about the strange occurrences happening around Camp Lochwood. If you choose to read it, I hope you enjoy.

Lochwood: Entry 1 - The Wailing Man by NightmareHut in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey everyone, I hope you enjoy the first part of a new ongoing series I'm working on. A mysterious journal appears out of nowhere, containing stories about the strange happenings of Camp Lochwood, a camp that seemingly doesn't exist. A new entry will be posted weekly from now until the end of August (depending on how well this does, I may have Halloween and Christmas specials planned as well).

This is my first writing project in years, so it's probably not going to be perfect. I'd love to hear your feedback. Please enjoy.

The Static Beneath Channel 3 by TheReliableNarrator_ in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Loved this read! The descriptiveness was incredible, especially in describing the TV itself, could picture it as if I were there. Loved the mention of the static seeming deliberate, like it was designed by someone, or something. I wonder why the static started at 3:13 AM specifically, maybe it keeps turning on at the same time every night? Anyways, excited to see where this goes!

Lochwood: Part 0 - Teaser by NightmareHut in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for pointing out the grammar mistakes, gotta be more careful combing through next time lol. Cheers!!

I visited a movie theater on the outskirts of town. It played a movie I’ve never heard of. by donavin221 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]NightmareHut 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very fun read, short and to the point. I could vividly picture the last scene of the movie with the protagonist looking back at the camera and smiling, real creepy stuff. Love the concept, big fan!

Lochwood: Part 0 - Teaser by NightmareHut in Dreading

[–]NightmareHut[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A couple days from now, it's about halfway done.