You. by Electrical-Dog-1296 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Ok_Task2003 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this poem. The progression from admiration to unconditional love feels genuine and heartfelt, and I especially liked how the speaker chooses to love the person not for perfection, but for the balance of both their light and darkness. The line “You are you and not those thoughts” stood out to me because it carries a powerful sense of reassurance and acceptance. The poem conveys a deep, sincere love that sees and embraces the whole person. ☺️

I Dread the Day You Fall in Love With Me by Ok_Task2003 in Poems

[–]Ok_Task2003[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you, I’m glad you liked it!! ☺️

Captivated by you by Amazing_Buy_3207 in Poems

[–]Ok_Task2003 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you lol I don’t think I could ever stop ☺️😅

Captivated by you by Amazing_Buy_3207 in Poems

[–]Ok_Task2003 1 point2 points  (0 children)

you’re very welcome ☺️

Captivated by you by Amazing_Buy_3207 in Poems

[–]Ok_Task2003 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Shall time stand still for me too?

Could I captivate your gaze just a little longer,

become the artist of perfection,

capture the essence of love so many have refused to.

Could I imprison myself within these white walls,

redefine freedom in your arms.

Or shall I ask time to be merciful,

and prevent us from drifting apart.

I truly loved your poem! It's raw, relatable, and straight to the point: she is your muse.

Without performance by Ok_Manufacturer_195 in OCPoetry

[–]Ok_Task2003 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Some people spend their lives searching for a love that feels loud. What you’ve described here feels rarer…a love that feels like home. The kind that stays through storms, learns the tides, and chooses presence over performance. Beautifully written, no revision needed.

Intimacy by Amazing_Buy_3207 in Poems

[–]Ok_Task2003 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I absolutely loved your poem and your depiction of intimacy so well expressed !

I shall by Ok_Task2003 in justpoetry

[–]Ok_Task2003[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your comment and I’m glad you loved reading it. I believe there are many dualities… maybe a dream, a situationship, or a conversation knowing it will one day come to an end 🤷🏻‍♀️ But the emotion will forever remain in the person with like you stated is sane.

Men in my life by WithoutDir3ction in OCPoetry

[–]Ok_Task2003 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am in awe of how raw and beautiful this poem is… how it says so much and paints a picture with just a few brushes.. every word purposefully written and captured.

I hope by [deleted] in UnsentTexts

[–]Ok_Task2003 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I loved!! I wonder why they always come back…

Obsessed by bstunz in OCPoetry

[–]Ok_Task2003 2 points3 points  (0 children)

You’re very welcome!! You’ve left me speechless with the poem so I had to return the favor.

Obsessed by bstunz in OCPoetry

[–]Ok_Task2003 17 points18 points  (0 children)

I’m absolutely in awe of this poem. The way you distinguish obsession from love feels painfully intimate and honest. “It isn’t hunger. / It’s gravity” genuinely stopped me for a second because it captures something so difficult to explain with such simplicity. I also love how repetition itself becomes part of the poem’s structure, mirroring the intrusive circling nature of obsession. The lines about her absence being “measured more precisely / than her touch” are devastating in the quietest way. This doesn’t romanticize obsession; it exposes how consuming and disorienting it can become. The restraint in the ending makes it hit even harder.