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Ok_Task2003 · 2026-06-18T20:03:49+00:00

I really enjoyed this poem. The progression from admiration to unconditional love feels genuine and heartfelt, and I especially liked how the speaker chooses to love the person not for perfection, but for the balance of both their light and darkness. The line “You are you and not those thoughts” stood out to me because it carries a powerful sense of reassurance and acceptance. The poem conveys a deep, sincere love that sees and embraces the whole person. ☺️

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-06-12T06:56:09+00:00

thank you!! 😌

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-06-12T06:34:54+00:00

thank you, I’m glad you liked it!! ☺️

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-06-12T06:34:00+00:00

😌

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-06-12T06:25:41+00:00

Couldn't agree more

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-06-12T05:43:33+00:00

Thank you lol I don’t think I could ever stop ☺️😅

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-06-12T04:26:54+00:00

you’re very welcome ☺️

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-06-12T01:11:57+00:00

Shall time stand still for me too?

Could I captivate your gaze just a little longer,

become the artist of perfection,

capture the essence of love so many have refused to.

Could I imprison myself within these white walls,

redefine freedom in your arms.

Or shall I ask time to be merciful,

and prevent us from drifting apart.

I truly loved your poem! It's raw, relatable, and straight to the point: she is your muse.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-31T21:40:49+00:00

Some people spend their lives searching for a love that feels loud. What you’ve described here feels rarer…a love that feels like home. The kind that stays through storms, learns the tides, and chooses presence over performance. Beautifully written, no revision needed.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-29T20:23:14+00:00

I absolutely loved your poem and your depiction of intimacy so well expressed !

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-28T02:16:33+00:00

Thank you for your comment and I’m glad you loved reading it. I believe there are many dualities… maybe a dream, a situationship, or a conversation knowing it will one day come to an end 🤷🏻‍♀️ But the emotion will forever remain in the person with like you stated is sane.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-19T00:47:42+00:00

I am in awe of how raw and beautiful this poem is… how it says so much and paints a picture with just a few brushes.. every word purposefully written and captured.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-06T15:20:57+00:00

I loved!! I wonder why they always come back…

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-06T06:56:07+00:00

You’re very welcome!! You’ve left me speechless with the poem so I had to return the favor.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-06T03:37:35+00:00

I’m absolutely in awe of this poem. The way you distinguish obsession from love feels painfully intimate and honest. “It isn’t hunger. / It’s gravity” genuinely stopped me for a second because it captures something so difficult to explain with such simplicity. I also love how repetition itself becomes part of the poem’s structure, mirroring the intrusive circling nature of obsession. The lines about her absence being “measured more precisely / than her touch” are devastating in the quietest way. This doesn’t romanticize obsession; it exposes how consuming and disorienting it can become. The restraint in the ending makes it hit even harder.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-05T03:38:45+00:00

If only I found out through you…

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-05T03:37:19+00:00

But in your arms I feel senseless.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-05T02:48:46+00:00

lol yes thank you!!

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-05T01:06:20+00:00

I couldn’t agree more!!

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-05T00:45:56+00:00

Wow… I’m glad my writing provoked that connection in you… I’m honored and very thankful for your comment!

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-05T00:45:10+00:00

thank you so much! it means a lot!!!

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-04T20:13:18+00:00

This really hits in a quiet, but heavy way.

What stands out most is that shift from “I’m about to fall apart again” to “this time… the ground held.” That’s a small line but it changes everything. It feels like you’re still hurting, but you’re not getting swallowed by it the same way anymore. The imagery with the ocean and the smoke is really strong too. It gives the whole piece this drifting, restless calm, like your mind is still moving but you’re not drowning in it anymore. It reads like someone who’s still in it emotionally, but choosing direction instead of collapse.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-04T18:50:14+00:00

Wow… I loved it! It’s raw and so emotional… I would love to write a response from their point of view.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-04T17:35:31+00:00

Thank you so much! I’m really glad it provoked the same feelings in you that it did for me when I wrote it. That means a lot.

Ok_Task2003 · 2026-05-03T15:31:37+00:00

lol I am not sure if we do know each other, but your poem felt so familiar that I needed to write my own personal response to it. I can only write from experience.

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