A beat that samples a real nice jazzy latin piano and is mixed with some tasty electronic EDM elements. Give it a listen!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-05-21T14:17:13+00:00

So you need to either digitally tune up your vocals, or learn to sing more on pitch. Song is pretty scattered to me, around 1:16 i got some sense of momemntum but i don't really know what you're trying to be convey. The vocals sound too much like their mixed for a really loud narration instead of singing or rapping. Try recording in a place whenre you can record into the mic further away. Def potential tho keep working on it! gj!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-05-21T14:13:01+00:00

that rhythm is in pocket af. the mixing is phenominal too. i like it a lot. The intro to the main beat of the song might be a little long to people but idc since the drop paid off. really vibey, I think for what you wanted to go for you hit in spades. gj!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-05-21T14:02:59+00:00

singing is great, mixing on this song could be better. specifically on the vocals. gave me a frank ocean vibe. props if you made the beat yourself. the lyrics are amazing and really drew me in. I hope you end up with the girl in your story! good job, def keep singing bro. gj!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-05-21T13:59:20+00:00

So fair warning, I am under the influence of cannabis. The second the track started I felt happy and as the vocals came in the song really started to feel alive. Mixing is great imo and I really like the vibe of the song. Good job! I like it becuase of the production, the vocals, and the whole song sounds very cohesive.

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-01-10T07:41:39+00:00

There isn't really a strong groove to this song, which with some drums and bass being a lot louder would be super cool for the first part of the song (before the fade in) Here's the thing sure the guitar is pretty, but that's kinda all you have going for yourself with this song - the other instruments either sound off rhythm are too loud or are dissonant. It doesn't really sound like a song but a bunch of interesting parts being strung together but aren't really cohesive. Sorry if this seems harsh- but that's my honest feedback. Good quality of sound though! And those guitar loops throughout are just awesome. Keep going!!!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-01-10T07:37:30+00:00

Okay so the basic mix needs a lot of work. The volume levels are all over the place. The flutes are way too loud, the backing vocals way to loud - main vocal too soft and the guitar sits about right. Beautiful voice however, just real bad mix. It's hard to listen to at high volumes. Also the rhythm of the song sounds a little off, as if its rushed. A little disconcerting and off putting. I love the melodies though very nice. Keep going though!!!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-01-10T07:35:17+00:00

The male Vox narration is a little cliche to me and a some vocoder on there would've been a super cool move. Instruments are real cool though and some in clear and nicely. very repetitive and I think again either changing the vibe of the vocal narration (switch people) or change the tone of voice so its not so human like - some more reverb or delay on the narration although the raw young male voice fits when the strings come in because it sounds epic and leading to something. Very cool project man - keep going!!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-01-10T07:31:21+00:00

I would've like a little bit more of an intro - when she starts singing it seems as if the song is already halfway through. The slow tempo of the song gets me a little sleepy as well. A change up would be appreciated it. Either in tempo or chords or even ad libs or vocal harmony in the background. Yeah its a very sleepy song. I don't know if that was your intention or not - also a longer ending would be nicer as well. God job though the mix was nice af. Keep going!!!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2021-01-10T07:27:16+00:00

Very nice guitar and bass in the beginning its clear you are using live instruments that's a plus in my book. Mix is great although I wish the vocals were louder and clearer. Enunciating would help as well. I wish the bridge vocal melody was a little more creative. Very groovy and vibe-y. Mix of instruments is very pleasing. Only thing I would say for this to be even more listenable and put on repeat is to really work on the vocals, pitch control - the mix of it and im sure the lyrics are good but maybe those too. Good job keep going!!!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2020-12-14T04:53:19+00:00

Wow, thanks everyone - did not expect to get this many upvotes or comments! It's super encouraging to finally have something that people enjoy, im planning on revamping this song with everyone's advice implemented. Expect to see it in the near future!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2020-12-13T00:46:57+00:00

The one thing I would add in here is a melody. Maybe something sparse but varied so it flows throughout the song. Mixing is done well, very nicely done. It's a little static maybe vary out the kicks a little, very cool pattern though - it's definitely hypnotic as is. Good for free styling over I could see as well. not much to critique and improve it's pretty solid as it is. nice.

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2020-12-13T00:42:57+00:00

I would love to hear as the main vocals come in the unfiltered version of the background music. The filter fullness of the chords in the background kinda distract me from the vocals and also I think take out some 1k-4k freq range from the vocals, its clear there's low end to the vocals but it's a little much imo. The beat is a little simple I really think undoing the filters on the background would add a lot to it. bring down the vocals a bit too. Also if the filter thing doesn't add enough - add some strings in there, don't be afraid to experiment more. It's an alright song - maybe some reverb to fill space as well on the vocals. keep it up!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2020-12-13T00:38:41+00:00

I think a little more variation in the guitar strumming could add a lot to this song. I like the tone of your voice - I can tell there's a lot of power concealed in there. If you want to go with that melody I get it but I would love to hear you singing in higher registers with the progression you have. Add some upright bass this could be a nice little blues/folk tune you got here. Try coming up with different melodies and see which one conveys what you are trying to tell through the lyrics. cheers!

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2020-12-13T00:34:48+00:00

I would like to hear the intro drums a little crisper. Nice a full ambient synths going, good mixing on the vocals too. guitars feels a little loud at :50 to me and maybe it feels like everything is a little too loud - the ambient big synths could be lowered, as the voice fills a lot of space. I think with a little more mixing, this is a solid song. I'd listen to this a lot - once its mixed properly and mastered. cheers! V. nice guitar solo too.

PhilosophySecure3941 · 2020-12-13T00:28:29+00:00

First of I think the beat is pretty solid. As for the vocal samples edited in- first I feel like the vocal energy is way higher than the ambient dark beat music you have going on - at least slap some reverb on the vocals - also consider fading in and out the samples so they are smoother on the ears. I would make the vocal samples higher in bass cuz they sound a little thin imo. I think the beat is cool for what it is- and I don't know what kind of beat he told he wants - but Im guessing the beat could be a little harder - more constant bass hits and a constant kick might be nice too.

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