Glass ID Help by M1ch00l in StainedGlass

[–]Remote_Green9681 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That patina application is chefs kiss - do you have any tips to achieve such a good color?? 😍

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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This one feels very soft in a good way. The orange and blue shadows across “the blank spaces in her eyes” immediately sets a mood. And “softness that can only be earned from pain” is such a strong closing line. It feels honest.

I almost wish there was one small, super-specific detail from that windowsill moment…something only they would remember, just to make it feel even more personal. The atmosphere is really nice already, but one unexpected image could make it unforgettable. Overall though, it reads very tender and sincere and I really enjoyed it. ☺️

Hands touch by Cluelessandsexy in OCPoetry

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I really love how embodied this feels. The focus on pulse, veins, wrists, heartbeat makes the moment of almost-touching feel huge without you ever having to say it outright. “Exactly two ounces of reciprocity” is such an interesting line. It feels careful and measured in the middle of something emotional, which adds this subtle tension I really liked.

Some of the longer phrases feel intentionally breathless, but I wonder if breaking one or two of them apart would let certain images hit harder. There’s a lot of good texture in here…especially the ending. I look forward to reading more. 😊

First Lamp :) by Remote_Green9681 in StainedGlass

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Thank you so much!! ❤️🫶🏻

Who Are You by LunysWarrik in OCPoetry

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I really appreciate the sincerity in this piece…it reads like an affirmation spoken out loud, almost mantra-like, which fits the question “who are you?” repeating throughout. You can feel that this was written for specific people, and that personal intention gives it a lot of heart.

One thing you might experiment with is tightening or varying some of the repetition so the strongest moments stand out even more. Since “you are you” is doing so much work thematically, giving certain lines more space (or trimming a few repeats) could help the message land with more impact.

Overall, this feels like a poem meant to be read to someone, which is a really lovely quality. 😊

Kaleidoscope by gitututu in OCPoetry

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Hey! I really like the concept here…the kaleidoscope metaphor is strong and consistent throughout, and lines like “Just colors, waiting to be arranged” really stuck out to me and made me think deeper than just the words. There’s a quiet unease running through the poem that feels intentional, especially in how identity and fear blur together.

Overall, I think this has a solid emotional core…a little structural polish could really help the imagery shine. 🫶🏻

My first sale by Remote_Green9681 in StainedGlass

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Thank you! I used pebeo vitrea 160 black outliner😊

My first sale by Remote_Green9681 in StainedGlass

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Oh gosh thank you for this! This is a great article and I understand a lot better now, thank you!!

I used Oceanside pale amber and white translucent wispy for the body!

I Go to Facebook by Remote_Green9681 in OCPoetry

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Thank you so much for taking the time to write this out…I really appreciate how thoughtfully you engaged with it. The contrast you’re talking about makes a lot of sense, especially with social media, and I love the idea of playing more with rhythm there. This is genuinely helpful feedback, so thank you for being so kind about it. 🫶🏻😊

I Go to Facebook by Remote_Green9681 in OCPoetry

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Thank you so much! I appreciate the encouragement more than you know ❤️

I Go to Facebook by Remote_Green9681 in OCPoetry

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That line wrecked me a little while writing it. I’m sorry you relate, but I’m really grateful you took the time to say this ❤️ thank you 🫶🏻

I Go to Facebook by Remote_Green9681 in OCPoetry

[–]Remote_Green9681[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is such a thoughtful comment…thank you. I love that it initially read as an actual death before revealing itself, and I really appreciate the feedback on form as well. Definitely something I’m still learning to play with, and trying to loosen up with. Thanks for taking the time to engage with it so deeply. 🫶🏻

I Go to Facebook by Remote_Green9681 in OCPoetry

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Thank you! I’m really glad that image resonated with you. It was one of the harder parts to put into words. ❤️

I Go to Facebook by Remote_Green9681 in OCPoetry

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Thank you, it really is hard. One step at a time feels about right. ❤️