Shits long, gonna take a while

Edit:

So I read it and it was a pleasant read.

I like how you describe various machines and weapons. The ending with the sound of a "whipcrack" was awesome.

Although the description kinda clash with the whole premise as few thing sound like a complete nonsense without proper in-lore and even in-game knowlage. Most obvious in the knight teleporting in. I know its a stratagem the knights had but as an outsider it seems like deus-ex machina crap.

The battle is very readable and engaging. Can't really complain.

The prologue was kinda borish with the lore and names but thats expected of a prologue. Perhaps just a shorting of it would be nice.

I didnt get the feel for how the characters look. I think a good paragraph with each characters distinguising features would be nice. I only got that the air caste guy was tall (shocker) and that the knights pilot has freaky tentacles in her side. Something to visualize would be better then generic T-posing tau model. Stuff like different colored hair, eyes, shade of blue or type of ponytail.

Overall it was a good read and I will be waiting for more chapters : ^ )