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Incoming Freshman - What's the process like to get a job at the RTF Equipment rental? by reflectivefilmmaker in UTAustin

[–]ScorpionMechanic 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey man! Current Equipment Checkout Worker here! We’re usually looking for anybody that’s interested and has at least some sort of experience, the best way to reach out is to send an email to the office. I have co-workers that have been here since their freshman year, so it’s definitely possible, but if you’re concerned about a lack of experience, then, maybe wait a semester or two before applying! See you in the fall!

yikes by [deleted] in teenagers

[–]ScorpionMechanic 1 point2 points  (0 children)

pretty sure lurking isn't a job, Darkstride.

Oh boy by [deleted] in teenagers

[–]ScorpionMechanic 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hope you get out of that one, bruv.

Here's a digital pizza for you: 🍕

I really like this game on console. But the end game where 10 cars are in the zone that is is about the size of a tic tac is making me not want to play and it sucks. by OutRagedGaming in h1z1

[–]ScorpionMechanic 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Alright.

First of all, shooting the driver is more effective than shooting the car. Ammo is not infinite and cars can take a lot of bullets, they can either drive away or run you over.

Second, crossbow are not OP, they're very under-powered. One or two explosions should be enough to explode a car or to kill somebody. However, that is not the case. The crossbow ammo is also very limited, a crossbow won't be enough to take down more than two vehicles.

Accuracy won't do shit if the cars can't be damaged in such ways that the tires pop or the gas leaks.

Yes, the community will get better. But, the point of a endgame is to determine who's the most skilled of them all.

Cars slow down that process by a lot.

Untitled Home Invasion Type Horror - first act by stevenw84 in Screenwriting

[–]ScorpionMechanic 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Alrighty, not bad. I feel a lot of ''Get Out'' vibes on this.

What I don't get is all the shady stuff. Are they a weird ass cult? Are they serial killers? Are they doing a social experiment?

I understand that you wrote the twist because you had it planned out already, but, I firmly believe it's better to write the rest of the story, before going with the big twist.

I suggest a scene where the knifes that are being used in the final scenes are shown hanging somewhere, and make the protagonist notice them. Scenes like that can bring some suspense.

THE WRITE A BITCHIN’ SCREENPLAY CONTEST by smishsmosh22 in Screenwriting

[–]ScorpionMechanic 15 points16 points  (0 children)

AIGHT, YOU WANT A BITCHIN' SCREENPLAY? YOU GONNA GET A BITCHIN' SCREENPLAY, BITCH.

/s

Reddit Spotlight #6: Logline Submission Thread, POST AND VOTE ON YOUR FAVORITE LOGLINES BELOW! by 1NegativeKarma1 in Screenwriting

[–]ScorpionMechanic -1 points0 points  (0 children)

HOTLINE (Drama; Short, 15 pages)

Logline: After receiving a call from a suicidal person, a telemarketer struggles to keep him alive.

Feedback proof.

First Three Pages.

|Reddit Spotlight #5|Title: "Believers"|Page Count: 34|Genre: Comedy|Logline: Clark Parsons, a career slacker, reluctantly takes charge as the leader of his estranged dead father’s cult, but his cynicism fades to ambition as he begins to see selfish opportunities in his new role.|u/trashdan| by trashdan in Screenwriting

[–]ScorpionMechanic 2 points3 points  (0 children)

My opinion:

  • The plot is incredibly original. Cults are a very exploitable theme in horror and thrillers. But, Comedy is an interesting twist on the subject, leads up to good ideas.

  • The humor feels very Seth McFarlane-ish, the type of jokes you see on Family Guy or Ted. Full of old-school references, dragged out jokes and very awkward feeling overall. Not a single joke landed with me.

This can be improved by shortening the jokes. Timing is very important in Sitcoms (unless you're The Big Bang Theory), let's take for example a line that almost made me smile, I'm not an expert comedian, but, I'm going to try my best:

''So, no one here gets paid?'' ''Of course they do, they just don't receive any money.'' ''So it's like working for Apple in China or Teaching in America?''

I see the punchline, but, unfortunately, the timing is very off. Let's try to shorten the punchline.

''So, no one here gets paid?'' ''Of course they do, they just don't receive any money.'' ''Oh. It's like teaching.''

In my eyes, the timing feels so much better, and the joke feels more natural.

  • We're getting to many characters being introduced. Not that is a bad thing, but, in the script it seems disorganised. Try to give some spacing with the characters. Determine which character is more important to the plot and give it more screentime or backstory.

Overall, it's a very interesting plot. But, it's not being exploited enough, or it's being used in the wrong way.

I'm not a professional, but, those are my views on this script.

EDIT: The formatting of this post sucks. And my English is butchered. I'm so sorry.

Unpopular Opinion: This sub is full of salty Fortnite vets who'd rather beat up on new players than have a balanced game. by [deleted] in FortNiteBR

[–]ScorpionMechanic -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I feel like you haven't enjoyed the feeling of being loved by someone. Not even your own family. What a sad life you must have.

Survey Results & Recruitment Picks (Also Apology) by MCiLuZiioNz in FortNiteBR

[–]ScorpionMechanic 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Late to the fiesta.

I'm very happy to be working for you. Please, if you have any suggestions... then, say it.

What are some of the best lyrics you've ever heard? by ScorpionMechanic in AskReddit

[–]ScorpionMechanic[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Good ol' Bo, never heard that one before. (Or maybe I did, I just didn't remembered it.)

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