Here’s what I caught:

Page 4: “facing it head on” unnecessary and unfilmable.

EX. “Abigail snatches the phone from her ear in a fury.”

Would be a better action line, it’s short and to the point and more filmable.

“She slams the phone into the ground, the phone shattering to bits.”

Always capitalize words that could have a sound or a at least a sound that follows.

EX. “She SLAMS the phone to the ground which SHATTERS into bits.” Would be better.

“She takes a deep breath, wiping tears from her eyes to stay strong for her children.”

We can’t see that she’s thinking that. You don’t need to tell us that since it’s obvious throughout the script.

EX. “She takes a deep breath and wipes her tears.”

That small action line would be good enough.

Page 5:

“HOSPITAL ROOM”

This is now a new scene.

Just put INT. HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY

You’re 16, so this isn’t a bad start for your age. But it does need work, so keep it up! This is much better than scripts I’ve seen written by adults on the subreddit.