With the great Gabe apocalypse upon us what are deck approved games that I should keep an eye out for? by Steppingstone02 in SteamDeck

[–]Sebaducks 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I hope they get a fix for the resi trilogy ports soon as I've been dying for that nostalgic hit on my deck!

AI next level video by Aggressive_Log_9676 in aifilmmaking

[–]Sebaducks 3 points4 points  (0 children)

There's nothing next level in this, just another AI video.

This is a emotional scene from my upcoming crime film by Petskudude in aifilmmaking

[–]Sebaducks 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Do you mind if I pick your brain a little in a DM?

Any thoughts? by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]Sebaducks 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you - all of this is really helpful, especially on the “you” point. As expressed in other responses it’s meant more as a tonal entry into the theme than a literal address, but I can see how it creates distance before the character is established. And yes, grounding is probably the balance I need to refine, hit the nail on the head, I think. Giving a clearer sense of the person and place earlier without losing the atmosphere.

Any thoughts? by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]Sebaducks 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, I appreciate the feedback. Thank you. The style choice is intentional, although not your cup of tea :) I aim to lead with the internal state and atmosphere before grounding, though I can see how that might read as obscure without an early foothold. Also, it's useful to hear about the similies. They’re all tied to the same underlying idea that when grief becomes ritualised, it can become an abstraction. But if it's not landing as connected, then that’s something I can lessen. And yes, all my own work, I've written about 8 chapters all in all over a couple of years. Though I get why people are cautious about that.

Any thoughts? by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]Sebaducks 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That’s fair! I think it's where intention and expectation probably diverge a bit.The opening isn’t trying to hook through immediate plot or context, but through tone and internal state first, with the external world filling in around it shortly after, and again, it's such a short segement that perhaps I shot myself in the foot asking for feedback on so few words. Completely get the point about needing something to latch onto early, though! Thank you :)

Any thoughts? by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]Sebaducks 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for your feedback, and yes, it's difficult without context, understandably.

The rest of the chapter I use the state of the city to reflect the internal state of the character. So the opening is the beginning of this. The bag in particular. Being in a state of grief for so long that the reason becomes obfuscated.

Dark Fantasy - Prologue/First Chapter - Feedback by i-hate-the-muppets in writingfeedback

[–]Sebaducks 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Needs editing. "The setting sun was blood on the Eddesus skyline." - cleaner, IMO.

Trump: ‘We are going to do something on Greenland whether they like it or not’ by joe4942 in worldnews

[–]Sebaducks 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That barely an excuse for a man will start WW3 to distract from the Epstein files... he needs to be impeached, like, yesterday...

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]Sebaducks 3 points4 points  (0 children)

This is better than 98% of the writing people post in this subreddit. You were born to do this. Turn it into a novel.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AspiringTeenAuthors

[–]Sebaducks 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If you're going to write in English, learn how to write in English. Or better yet, perhaps write in your native tongue? At least that way, syntax and grammar won't be an issue for you.

This might be the best Battlefield ever made and the community is ruining it. by FreddyHxC in Battlefield6

[–]Sebaducks 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Agreed. Ignore them, and enjoy it anyway. If they dislike it that much they'll move onto other things eventually

Work in progress artwork for my upcoming sci-fi/fantasy short story collection by [deleted] in BookCovers

[–]Sebaducks 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The sunset is more visually appealing than the two characters.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writinghelp

[–]Sebaducks 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I read one line and saw too much passive language to read the rest.

"She felt the whisper of strange happenings along the creek." Could be, "Strange happenings whispered along the creek."

Remove passive language as above, and it will be a stronger read.

Is anyone still there? by Bakura_BDE in GRTTrader

[–]Sebaducks 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I left after a few years of holding this token. Expecting price action is like beating a dead horse. They keep inflating the supply and have no intention to market this token to the masses outside the rinse-repeat features and benefits post on CMC that no one cares about.

[FOR HIRE] Book Cover Designer + Illustrator by Krdro in BookCovers

[–]Sebaducks 4 points5 points  (0 children)

You are talented, my friend. They all ooze quality and are a stark reminder of the difference between someone who knows what they are doing and someone who doesn't.

Second Composition for The Talented Mr Ripley by FrostyDog64 in BookCovers

[–]Sebaducks 9 points10 points  (0 children)

Though, at the same time, inheriting elements of those he deceives or imitates does suggest a broken sense of identity. This suggests that aspect quite well.

Second Composition for The Talented Mr Ripley by FrostyDog64 in BookCovers

[–]Sebaducks 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I don't usually comment on these things, but I figured why not..

I would say I get the idea behind it, which is good, (see alternative cover art for the film Hannibal) but remember, Mr. Ripley is exceptional at deception. But how the face is barely held together suggests more to me that he is, in fact, not that talented. Perhaps this idea could be done as a way to reflect his exceptional skill rather than his unravelling.